The Meaning Of Winter

[ChyllTyrant]

The Meaning Of Winter


trick of hades

my winter season hallowing
trick of treatise
intersection masquerade
what was the rise of souls

was what as risen in the sea
bubbles of inspiration
from the sunken winner

winter, my november remembers
swimming through summer
and living with lovers
all to an abrupt end
as ends become lost
as finalization spirals my station
into abyss

IS nothing acrid?
is everything sacred?


forget me

something sorry approaches us
when we telephone our mother
badly unknowns
and something sorry surrounds
when we hang up

conversations destroy half of us
when rebuilt, never the same
we are ever the same,
as when we let devestation commence
when we are born

and when we, wombless
descend to the woe of tombship
discussing the toes frozen
and moods, doomed to the mob,
of cheergivers' superficiality


each spring's beginning
each new bud, sapling, germination
each old bud, sap, germ infection

i await to be held in stasis
at a standard basis of chassis chastity
chess chasing down my mind
less lacing up my body

each spring's beginning
to last to the first individual
perfection, of frost
perfection, of forced habitual
hibernation, in lit cave
or in lit stove, heat vent, or brave faust


when halloween hits
i am shot out a bottle
when my birthday next
neck in neck, yet arm in arm

i am swarmed with swords
of knights and devils
of nights of evil
of death and despair
if only, a breath of air


bleach my skin
and tell that rabbit
i'll follow his tracks
in the blue snow
and soon know
the meaning
if what but a name
if what...


(oh, poor demeter
the meter of our demeaning)

[Bobby D]

This is undoubtedly one of your finest works Chyll. Your language usage and vivid diction put the poem out on a projector for all to see. Lovely.

Pure Genius

Return....

Thanks...PeeSe.

[Black Liquid]

this was good but if you really want your message to reach others you must make it able to be understood universally. i couldnt help but feel somewhat excluded by your vocabulary. this was like readin your mind, i felt like a foreigner tryin to conversate with you. on some "how do you say......" the truth, though universal, is still a matter of perspective.
-Liq

[Quotive]

"winter, my november remembers
swimming through summer
and living with lovers
all to an abrupt end
as ends become lost
as finalization spirals my station
into abyss"

This really made me say "wow..." I can relate.. winter feels weird to me man. I like how you snuck the multies in there. Veryyyy vivid, veryyy ol' Chyll.

I love how you used alliteration. Shit is dope man.

"(oh, poor demeter
the meter of our demeaning)"

For some reason, this came across as being sad. I don't know, it's just... sad.

Good shit man.

[d-rell]

nice poem yo..


beautiful choice of words IMO..


~1~

[ChyllTyrant]

not trynna argue... but language is supposed to be universal...

if it makes you pick up a book... then i've had success.

there is no language that you can use, that everyone will be understood and entertained, simultaneously.
i find mundane language to be the one that is most commonly understood. yet the most understood language is one that is deciphered, and entertains.
it IS a matter of perspective, in other words, but a perspective that is translated cannot be too complex. and a perspective that is altered is one that is unuseful in meaning.

if that made any sense... you get my idea.

but thanks to everyone who replied anyways. it's greatly appreciated.

PEACEKIWESKI

[UFO the Phoenix]

follow that blue rabbit!!?!?!?!....man this was just the "inspiration" I needed.....wow......str8 up man....I've been all down and depressed due to winter/fall and the bad weather....and this kinda made sense of things from a new angle.....a new way of looking at things...I perosnally love your vocab and didnt find it that hard to understand at all?....in fact it helped the poem climax to a higher level of greatness bringing back memories of my spring time fun....and "Swimming in Summer"....it seems you captured all the season in this one poem....and winter vexes' me the most.....I love this....I always like the touch of nature and relating more of your personal life into the mix....nice job

bravo