Can I Get A Few Minutes To Talk To You

Black Liquid · 12-06-2005, 05:54 PM

*2 spaces after a line are indicative of a pause*

hip hops
dead

right?

dead wrong

we just
never know
what we
got
till its
gone

like some
lovers
movin on
with
their half
of the
bond

took
the lies
and the
jive
with a
nod
then we
bought

let the
times
not the
rhymes
tell the
fans
what is
hot

gave the
people
what they
want

not the
war that
we fought

but the
party
afterwards

and awards
like we
pop

through the
deaths
of the
best

caught a

coup
de'
grace

we drop

hit songs
like draws

though they
gone
threw em
on

new-
comers
al-
bums

meanwhile

grown men
sip the
youth ser-
um

to the
same an-
thems

as the

chil-
dren

school bells
ring

sales rise

audience
multiplies

new
street
dream

be a
mc

i wonder
why

back in
the 70s

pops saw
superfly

copped him
a fur
and a
pimped out
caddy ride

now we
all want
benzes

sittin on
20s
not knowin
that we
inches

away from
the start
just as much
as the finish

cuz these
kids
got kids

who'll
live like
we livin
-Liq

absolute zero · 12-06-2005, 07:37 PM

I always liked pieces with one or two words every line. I can't place my finger on why though. I was diggin this piece anyways...I would like to see it performed, spoken.....I really am not a fan of the "cuz" and all the mis-spellings on purpose.....but do you.

Bless.

SAMARA · 12-07-2005, 01:22 AM

enjoyed the reed

Quotive · 12-07-2005, 09:30 PM

I like how it started off. Real raw shit man..

I'm a big fan of your work, but this wasn't what I expected. It didn't have that PUNCH like your other stuff.

Still good.

12-06-2005, 05:54 PM	#1 (permalink)
Black Liquid Registered User Join Date: Sep 2003 Posts: 234	Can I Get A Few Minutes To Talk To You 2 spaces after a line are indicative of a pause hip hops dead right? dead wrong we just never know what we got till its gone like some lovers movin on with their half of the bond took the lies and the jive with a nod then we bought let the times not the rhymes tell the fans what is hot gave the people what they want not the war that we fought but the party afterwards and awards like we pop through the deaths of the best caught a coup de' grace we drop hit songs like draws though they gone threw em on new- comers al- bums meanwhile grown men sip the youth ser- um to the same an- thems as the chil- dren school bells ring sales rise audience multiplies new street dream be a mc i wonder why back in the 70s pops saw superfly copped him a fur and a pimped out caddy ride now we all want benzes sittin on 20s not knowin that we inches away from the start just as much as the finish cuz these kids got kids who'll live like we livin -Liq

12-07-2005, 01:22 AM	#3 (permalink)
SAMARA myspace.com/ameliatricia Join Date: Apr 2002 Posts: 1,071	enjoyed the reed __________________ "… to the man who is actually in the arena... his place will never be with those timid cold souls who know neither victory nor defeat." Climbing out of the hole and leaving the whispers behind. idiom I realized the high road is idealistic and we are lowly creatures, everyone. The only difference is some are able to walk and not crawl, nor squirm on their belly. You decide.

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