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Old 11-28-2005, 11:31 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Apologetic tear.
Upset my girl, wrote this in a quick 10 minutes.. and gave it to her,


I do stupid things, of course I do..
I’m a man with pride and all..
I upset my mentor, my darling, my wife..
My love, my rose... I’m your thorn…

We read from the same book
But sometimes from a different page
Every tear says a ‘sorry’
Yet each in a very different way

My cheeks slow the process
Like you know your shoulders should do
A sight so sad in front of you
Picture what a ‘little tough boy’ would do

As the puddle grows in size
Attempts in vain to reconcile…
My cries for sorry… drown within
Along with pride, endeavour n' charming smile

With enough to fill a bucket
Or Quench a Childs’ thirst… willing to repent it
Was what happened was really that bad?
Once everything is put in perspective…


Pretty gay, but something to reflect my mood and i felt like writing, so heh.
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Old 11-28-2005, 11:39 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Pshh..it's not gay to write about how you feel =p

I liked this. It kept it's apologetic tone through out.
I just hope that you wrote what you were really feeling and not what you thought she wanted to hear....
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Old 11-28-2005, 11:44 PM   #3 (permalink)
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Nah, i do feel really bad.. it hits me hard when i upset her.. i know that there's nothing that i'd ever wanna do to hurt her in any way, and yea.. i'ma email it to her in a bit.

Thanks for the hasty reply.

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Old 12-02-2005, 04:23 AM   #4 (permalink)
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Bhitiah takes it up the butt!
"We read from the same book
But sometimes from a different page
Every tear says a ‘sorry’
Yet each in a very different way" <<for real


This was good, not gay at all...Stay up
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Old 12-02-2005, 09:14 AM   #5 (permalink)
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What a pleasant suprise.

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I liked this alot....wish my boyfriend had a little lesds pride so he could atleast say half of this when he makes me upset....lol....definetly not gay and very touching!!

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Thanks kindly, ma'am.

Maybe he will one day..
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Much respect. But it couldn't have been me. I cant stand admitting when I'm wrong when it comes between me and my girl. I'm pretty sure she'll like this though.

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gay....nope it's actually pretty nice to me, hey i'dforgive you...but then again i don't know what you did but nyways.....

My cheeks slow the process
Like you know your shoulders should do
A sight so sad in front of you
Picture what a ‘little tough boy’ would do

that was my favourite part
don't know y it just was.
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Yea, that's a real personal part^

She dedicated a song called little tough boys to me, by Gary Allen..

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This is nice. Something a girl would melt for. I noticed it has a more personal meaning between you and your girlfriend, like an inside joke, but not a joke, just a inside feeling between you an her

apologies are always hard to come up with, and I think you did a good honest job on this one, she'll love it... and hopefully her reading it is followed with forgiveness

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Dean, you're always honest-and sincere-with whatever you say. I can tell this came straight from the heart. And I know its probably been awhile since you've written-so for you to write this, it must mean much.

I guess that's why I didn't roll my eyes when I read this (haha). In my own situation, well you know but in my case:

Was what happened was really that bad?

HELL to the YES it was really that bad. But it's the past. It's funny now how everything is but I don't take advantage of it. THAT, is the weird part. Anyway-I hope you two are mending and things are better.

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Dean, you're always honest-and sincere-with whatever you say. I can tell this came straight from the heart. And I know its probably been awhile since you've written-so for you to write this, it must mean much.

I guess that's why I didn't roll my eyes when I read this (haha). In my own situation, well you know but in my case:

Was what happened was really that bad?

HELL to the YES it was really that bad. But it's the past. It's funny now how everything is but I don't take advantage of it. THAT, is the weird part. Anyway-I hope you two are mending and things are better.

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Well, well, well... look who's come crawling out the woodwork

Uhm, yea.. i was honest i guess lol. And yesssssss, it was so damn long since i wrote anything, so for me to shake off the rust, it meant alot to me.

Yea, we're mending and what not, we're cool now.

PM, tell me how you doing! Lond time no talk..
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