These Posts Here...

Bhitiah · 08-31-2005, 03:17 AM

These posts here stand along side roads
that have been traveled by many
struggling to leave
or maybe just trying to get anywhere
these roads will take you
these roads have seen arrivals
and departures
but still havent gotten used too
the hurt these sidewalks contain

the blacktop only putting tragedy
farther deep inside concrete
we travel along these roads
bad news delivered by cellphone
I know that most of us are just trying to get home
or just find home
maybe just a peice
and some of us beg on knee's
underneath street lamps
that only highlight the tears streaming down our faces
we cant get high
and certainly cant get by
one is supposed to exlude the other
they want us to pick one
but we're used to not having either
and getting one,
once in awhile
somehow makes sense
and this here isnt supposed to make sense
cause we dont have the change to spend...

These posts here
that provide space for lost animals
and once in awhile lost children
somehow in the end...
these posts here
end up stabbed by random nails
the posters torn down
and traveled by wind
distances we can only imagine...

These posts here...
remain the only constant along this road
of uncertainty
these posts here...
remain the only thing
certain to me...

Ok, This is the first thing I've written in days, maybe even weeks. I dont really know how long it's been ...I've been suffering from an insane writers block. So this is random.

UFO the Phoenix · 08-31-2005, 03:34 AM

I dont even know where to start with this one....you come out of nowhere with an insane topic/concept idea that not even myself would of ever considered....and you got writers block.....*shakes head in confusion*......

just

tight

skandelous_lala · 08-31-2005, 07:18 AM

I like this..writer's block or not..sure it may not have your usual style to it...but the concept is there. I love the concept.sure it could be refined but you have something good going on..especially to post it here..I think we can all obviously relate to it.

h.wood · 08-31-2005, 09:48 AM

yea i agree very creative . perfect analogies nice job

AlmostFamous · 08-31-2005, 10:13 AM

the road less taken

yes thats what it reminds me of.. nice piece no doubt

nice analogies like h wood said... very different from your other pieces... like you said random... random it was!

keep your head up

famous

iceheart · 08-31-2005, 11:51 PM

i am really digging the imagery here. got a vivid mental image of what you might have been looking at. i love it when i can see where i am or feel what the writer feels from reading a poem.

mad respect

ManMadeofAshes · 09-01-2005, 06:22 AM

this post here...... kicks ass bhitiah.

I love the whole poem but a few parts I was extremely impressed by...

"the blacktop only putting tragedy
farther deep inside concrete
we travel along these roads
bad news delivered by cellphone
I know that most of us are just trying to get home
or just find home
maybe just a peice
and some of us beg on knee's
underneath street lamps
that only highlight the tears streaming down our faces
we cant get high
and certainly cant get by"

^ that shit is crazy dope right there. Amazing description. Amazing rhythm. love eet.

"These posts here
that provide space for lost animals
and once in awhile lost children
somehow in the end...
these posts here
end up stabbed by random nails
the posters torn down
and traveled by wind
distances we can only imagine...

These posts here...
remain the only constant along this road
of uncertainty
these posts here...
remain the only thing
certain to me..."

^ ahh this feels so nostalgic to me. I love that feeling. There is something about being able to remember that comforts me. Its our foundation. Ironically its progression. Being able to learn from mistakes is revolution if applied. If you can change your world you've done something really special.

great drop.

-ashes

MISSKEYdaQUEEN · 09-01-2005, 06:12 PM

Quote:

I know that most of us are just trying to get home
or just find home
maybe just a peice
and some of us beg on knee's
underneath street lamps
that only highlight the tears streaming down our faces
we cant get high
and certainly cant get by
one is supposed to exlude the other
they want us to pick one
but we're used to not having either
and getting one,
once in awhile
somehow makes sense
and this here isnt supposed to make sense
cause we dont have the change to spend...

man oh man...that part just had me seeing something so vivid

Yes maam...keep it up mah!! Like they all said this piece is great!! And i'm digging the originality!!

RealMS · 09-01-2005, 10:05 PM

This makes me think about thinking of all the times I was close to leaving the place where I grew up from for most of my life, and then thinking-this is where I'm from. In some instances, it can be bad or good, but like ashes said about remembering...yep. I hate having to leave, to start a new life, shyt's gonna be hard but that's life. Keep writing girl.

-Much Love

RealMS · 09-01-2005, 10:07 PM

mmaaaaaaaaan I have another comment. You told me you was on some crazy writer's block and all--so you write about something I overlook everyday-POSTS for crying out loud. I think that's probably why I haven't written in a while either. Always thinking too much.

08-31-2005, 03:17 AM	#1 (permalink)
Bhitiah Powerful Scriptures Join Date: May 2004 Posts: 1,168	These Posts Here... These posts here stand along side roads that have been traveled by many struggling to leave or maybe just trying to get anywhere these roads will take you these roads have seen arrivals and departures but still havent gotten used too the hurt these sidewalks contain the blacktop only putting tragedy farther deep inside concrete we travel along these roads bad news delivered by cellphone I know that most of us are just trying to get home or just find home maybe just a peice and some of us beg on knee's underneath street lamps that only highlight the tears streaming down our faces we cant get high and certainly cant get by one is supposed to exlude the other they want us to pick one but we're used to not having either and getting one, once in awhile somehow makes sense and this here isnt supposed to make sense cause we dont have the change to spend... These posts here that provide space for lost animals and once in awhile lost children somehow in the end... these posts here end up stabbed by random nails the posters torn down and traveled by wind distances we can only imagine... These posts here... remain the only constant along this road of uncertainty these posts here... remain the only thing certain to me... Ok, This is the first thing I've written in days, maybe even weeks. I dont really know how long it's been ...I've been suffering from an insane writers block. So this is random. __________________ You can bomb the world to peices, but cant bomb into peace

08-31-2005, 03:34 AM	#2 (permalink)
UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS! Join Date: Aug 1999 Location: Oceanside CA USA Posts: 2,965	I dont even know where to start with this one....you come out of nowhere with an insane topic/concept idea that not even myself would of ever considered....and you got writers block.....shakes head in confusion...... just tight __________________ *The Truth isn't out there because its already landed and the Truth is:* JESUS CHRIST Oddie Sloan

08-31-2005, 07:18 AM	#3 (permalink)
skandelous_lala back from the dead Join Date: Sep 2000 Location: Hey! Fuck you and the horse you rode in on! Posts: 26,707	I like this..writer's block or not..sure it may not have your usual style to it...but the concept is there. I love the concept.sure it could be refined but you have something good going on..especially to post it here..I think we can all obviously relate to it. __________________ ALL YOU REALLY KNOW IS WHAT I CHOOSE TO SHOW Good Mourning, Good afternoon, Good nite, what have you done with your life?. Everybody's time comes to be embraced by the light you only afraid to die when you ain't livin right

08-31-2005, 09:48 AM	#4 (permalink)
h.wood aka sue storm Join Date: Jul 2002 Location: you dont have the belt to enter Posts: 3,235	yea i agree very creative . perfect analogies nice job __________________ where did i go?

08-31-2005, 10:13 AM	#5 (permalink)
AlmostFamous U got a problem? Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Sioux Falls Posts: 2,789	the road less taken yes thats what it reminds me of.. nice piece no doubt nice analogies like h wood said... very different from your other pieces... like you said random... random it was! keep your head up famous __________________ the good lord giveth and he taketh away isnt that the truth My name is Nate Short MYSPACE NAME:http://www.myspace.com/tooshortnate

09-01-2005, 06:22 AM	#7 (permalink)
ManMadeofAshes *DREAMER Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: at home Posts: 635	this post here...... kicks ass bhitiah. I love the whole poem but a few parts I was extremely impressed by... "the blacktop only putting tragedy farther deep inside concrete we travel along these roads bad news delivered by cellphone I know that most of us are just trying to get home or just find home maybe just a peice and some of us beg on knee's underneath street lamps that only highlight the tears streaming down our faces we cant get high and certainly cant get by" ^ that shit is crazy dope right there. Amazing description. Amazing rhythm. love eet. "These posts here that provide space for lost animals and once in awhile lost children somehow in the end... these posts here end up stabbed by random nails the posters torn down and traveled by wind distances we can only imagine... These posts here... remain the only constant along this road of uncertainty these posts here... remain the only thing certain to me..." ^ ahh this feels so nostalgic to me. I love that feeling. There is something about being able to remember that comforts me. Its our foundation. Ironically its progression. Being able to learn from mistakes is revolution if applied. If you can change your world you've done something really special. great drop. -ashes __________________ http://www.myspace.com/manmadeofashes

09-01-2005, 10:05 PM	#9 (permalink)
RealMS Pro 31 Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Lafayette/New Orleans, LA Posts: 4,232	This makes me think about thinking of all the times I was close to leaving the place where I grew up from for most of my life, and then thinking-this is where I'm from. In some instances, it can be bad or good, but like ashes said about remembering...yep. I hate having to leave, to start a new life, shyt's gonna be hard but that's life. Keep writing girl. -Much Love

09-01-2005, 10:07 PM	#10 (permalink)
RealMS Pro 31 Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Lafayette/New Orleans, LA Posts: 4,232	mmaaaaaaaaan I have another comment. You told me you was on some crazy writer's block and all--so you write about something I overlook everyday-POSTS for crying out loud. I think that's probably why I haven't written in a while either. Always thinking too much.

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