The White Flag

UFO the Phoenix · 08-04-2005, 01:24 PM

The White Flag

The war of the worlds between a boy and girl
Continues on until one of us is dead and gone
Or submits to forbidden charm
I’m outnumbered and the battlefield is yours
I have the arms but can I go the whole nine yards?
Spending my time in books and maturity
Discovering that it takes more then looks and security
Simply put it’s having the same feelings
Rather apart or near to me
More then the fact
You keep track of our history
You turn me on by doing the little things
I riddled the mystery of our destiny
Paddling between reality and fantasy
A daydream gathering
Memories of you overshadowing
Now I’m drowning in a distorted sea
Of blended tears
One eye pouring joy the other flowing from fear
Even though you were never near me
I’ve been your prisoner for years
Held hostage by your love letters with no ransom
Because no other woman could ever match them
I surrender to your love
Signing away my heart with all rights
Because you’re the precious splinter
Forever in my thought life
Both righteous both sinners
But together we balance with no fights
Well not quite sometimes I stay up cursing your name
For long nights
Saving space for forgiveness
And when ever your mad at me its probably
For the right reasons
With my stubbornness and deep breathing
From lonely lips tempted with the idea of you leaving
A second time for some other guy
Who can provide for your simple needs of hidden feelings
And bond with your body on lonely weekends
Because false love is better then slowly grieving
Hypnotized by the L word my emotions only teasing
Your Lust Jones is barebones - alone showing cleavage
Human passions are fashions clone - going with the seasons
Fire in the hole I close my ears - froze unbelievin’
Lost my rabbit foot in the trenches and my luck fade
Weaken by bullets and seeing my companions scattered like a buffet
Permanently disabled in damaged relationships from decisions some made
Self-mutilated soldiers get to go home away from the blood rage
Meanwhile I’m folding pieces of my shattered heart
Back together and you gave me the duck tape
You see my gift is patience…Forever my love waits
Your gift is ancient with a tongue that motivates
Which amplifies my soul to reach levels I never known I could create
Make no mistake
I love you (period)
I’m still very curious
I’m still very delirious
I’m still laughing with silliness
But on the real its time to be serious
And start a new page
A reversed crusade of who leaves and who stays
We both take and we both gave
But you were never afraid to invade
My heart setting off all alarms
Until I became your slave
Fulfilling your dreams is the only time I’m free
So I surrender…. you got me
Cease fire!!!!…Please don’t drop anymore-unexpected bombs
My white flag is up
Now just take me in your arms and help nurse these scars

Sole Sovereign · 08-04-2005, 04:52 PM

Really nice piece. I followed throughout untill you started talking about the balance. Soul won't like it because it's centered. Anyways, really feeling the way you let us relate to your day to day in this piece and the admission of guilt from your side of the relationship gives it a material feel to it. Loved the read, stay up.

ManMadeofAshes · 08-04-2005, 05:27 PM

werd on this peice.

sad to sayyyyy i can relatee.

what is the white flag anyway UFO. Cause I swear for me its cowardise. Its the inability to make myself vulnerable before my lady. Its like wanting to say I Love You, but wanting to hear it from her first. The white flag keeps up from being to vulnerable, yet as we wave this sad attempt to stay in our comfort zone, we know we are so obviously not. dumb fucks love struck by a hammer with no name. But we got to keep playing this game of boy and girl routine.

your first line had me. boy and girl is such a strange concept to me now. Its like.. its all bullshit. We are just people but these silly seperations create an obligation to conform to a pre established status quo. So if I admit my sister has a good looking boy friend I must be a fag. If a lady wants to play sports, good god she must be a tomboy with a full wardrobe of pants.

haha, and now I ramble in the wrong direction..

"My heart setting off all alarms
Until I became your slave
Fulfilling your dreams is the only time I’m free
So I surrender…. you got me"

^ really like this "you got me thing" its a way to pass the blame and I have been toying with it myself. (baby would stand there and try so hard to seem religion. Well I shot first but you caused this.) < of coarse in mine I am blaming God or.. maybe organized religion for my current beliefs as opposed to speaking of an intimate relationship.

lets see something else got my attention...

"More then the fact
You keep track of our history
You turn me on by doing the little things
I riddled the mystery of our destiny
Paddling between reality and fantasy
A daydream gathering
Memories of you overshadowing
Now I’m drowning in a distorted sea
Of blended tears "

^good stuff right here. Love the stuff about keeping track of your history, and then you turn me on with the little things. That is dope cause its so true. We all have these weird little weaknesses unique to ourselves. Like a tongue and some heavy breathing in my ear and Im a fucking mess. (the funnest mess ever!!!!)

yea yea funnest aint no word but if I already knew that then them guys here aint not atta have no problem s then no dont you know..... (I know me either)

"I’m outnumbered and the battlefield is yours
I have the arms but can I go the whole nine yards?
Spending my time in books and maturity
Discovering that it takes more then looks and security
Simply put it’s having the same feelings"

nice nice nice. Love the third line down (or up). It almost sounds mature the way you wrote it. dope line.

dope poem.

-ashes.

ManMadeofAshes · 08-04-2005, 05:34 PM

eh yo were is oceanside compared to long beach or irvine. (im moving down in that direction and know a single mother cept a nasty bitter little excuse for an aunt)

just curious.

UFO the Phoenix · 08-04-2005, 05:57 PM

^First off thanks for peeping Sole Sover you one of the cats that go way back I'll get back at you and your poems

Next off thanks for the in depth feedback Ashes you are never afraid to speak your mind and now it seems as well as open your heart............I feel ya man

But yo Oceanside is like an hour or so drive away from long beach/Irvine.....traffic is crazy on the 5 though just to give you heads up

Mind~$oul · 08-08-2005, 05:35 AM

Word this was a great piece by you man. It's kinda like you finally gave up running from love and let it take your heart captive. Must be some bomb pussy though.

One luv

shrek · 08-08-2005, 11:54 AM

"Who can provide for your simple needs of hidden feelings
And bond with your body on lonely weekends
Because false love is better then slowly grieving
Hypnotized by the L word my emotions only teasing
Your Lust Jones is barebones - alone showing cleavage
Human passions are fashions clone - going with the seasons
Fire in the hole I close my ears - froze unbelievin’
Lost my rabbit foot in the trenches and my luck fade"
that was tight matter fact this whole piece was tight. Im a new member on this site so what I mostly enjoyed is the way you write, propps!

Koban4max2 · 08-08-2005, 05:48 PM

Nice poem..but what is "submit for forbidden charm?"
could you explain?

08-04-2005, 01:24 PM	#1 (permalink)
UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS! Join Date: Aug 1999 Location: Oceanside CA USA Posts: 2,965	The White Flag The White Flag The war of the worlds between a boy and girl Continues on until one of us is dead and gone Or submits to forbidden charm I’m outnumbered and the battlefield is yours I have the arms but can I go the whole nine yards? Spending my time in books and maturity Discovering that it takes more then looks and security Simply put it’s having the same feelings Rather apart or near to me More then the fact You keep track of our history You turn me on by doing the little things I riddled the mystery of our destiny Paddling between reality and fantasy A daydream gathering Memories of you overshadowing Now I’m drowning in a distorted sea Of blended tears One eye pouring joy the other flowing from fear Even though you were never near me I’ve been your prisoner for years Held hostage by your love letters with no ransom Because no other woman could ever match them I surrender to your love Signing away my heart with all rights Because you’re the precious splinter Forever in my thought life Both righteous both sinners But together we balance with no fights Well not quite sometimes I stay up cursing your name For long nights Saving space for forgiveness And when ever your mad at me its probably For the right reasons With my stubbornness and deep breathing From lonely lips tempted with the idea of you leaving A second time for some other guy Who can provide for your simple needs of hidden feelings And bond with your body on lonely weekends Because false love is better then slowly grieving Hypnotized by the L word my emotions only teasing Your Lust Jones is barebones - alone showing cleavage Human passions are fashions clone - going with the seasons Fire in the hole I close my ears - froze unbelievin’ Lost my rabbit foot in the trenches and my luck fade Weaken by bullets and seeing my companions scattered like a buffet Permanently disabled in damaged relationships from decisions some made Self-mutilated soldiers get to go home away from the blood rage Meanwhile I’m folding pieces of my shattered heart Back together and you gave me the duck tape You see my gift is patience…Forever my love waits Your gift is ancient with a tongue that motivates Which amplifies my soul to reach levels I never known I could create Make no mistake I love you (period) I’m still very curious I’m still very delirious I’m still laughing with silliness But on the real its time to be serious And start a new page A reversed crusade of who leaves and who stays We both take and we both gave But you were never afraid to invade My heart setting off all alarms Until I became your slave Fulfilling your dreams is the only time I’m free So I surrender…. you got me Cease fire!!!!…Please don’t drop anymore-unexpected bombs My white flag is up Now just take me in your arms and help nurse these scars __________________ *The Truth isn't out there because its already landed and the Truth is:* JESUS CHRIST Oddie Sloan

08-04-2005, 04:52 PM	#2 (permalink)
Sole Sovereign Hungry But Never Starving Join Date: Jan 2001 Posts: 2,927	Really nice piece. I followed throughout untill you started talking about the balance. Soul won't like it because it's centered. Anyways, really feeling the way you let us relate to your day to day in this piece and the admission of guilt from your side of the relationship gives it a material feel to it. Loved the read, stay up. __________________ ...Take a step: one step, one dive... ...Fate is death. A leap of faith over sunset's sunrise... ...Hate is everpresent, some let love die... ...even if you laced loosely, some get tongue tied... elo§overeign ˜W™

08-04-2005, 05:27 PM	#3 (permalink)
ManMadeofAshes *DREAMER Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: at home Posts: 635	werd on this peice. sad to sayyyyy i can relatee. what is the white flag anyway UFO. Cause I swear for me its cowardise. Its the inability to make myself vulnerable before my lady. Its like wanting to say I Love You, but wanting to hear it from her first. The white flag keeps up from being to vulnerable, yet as we wave this sad attempt to stay in our comfort zone, we know we are so obviously not. dumb fucks love struck by a hammer with no name. But we got to keep playing this game of boy and girl routine. your first line had me. boy and girl is such a strange concept to me now. Its like.. its all bullshit. We are just people but these silly seperations create an obligation to conform to a pre established status quo. So if I admit my sister has a good looking boy friend I must be a fag. If a lady wants to play sports, good god she must be a tomboy with a full wardrobe of pants. haha, and now I ramble in the wrong direction.. "My heart setting off all alarms Until I became your slave Fulfilling your dreams is the only time I’m free So I surrender…. you got me" ^ really like this "you got me thing" its a way to pass the blame and I have been toying with it myself. (baby would stand there and try so hard to seem religion. Well I shot first but you caused this.) < of coarse in mine I am blaming God or.. maybe organized religion for my current beliefs as opposed to speaking of an intimate relationship. lets see something else got my attention... "More then the fact You keep track of our history You turn me on by doing the little things I riddled the mystery of our destiny Paddling between reality and fantasy A daydream gathering Memories of you overshadowing Now I’m drowning in a distorted sea Of blended tears " ^good stuff right here. Love the stuff about keeping track of your history, and then you turn me on with the little things. That is dope cause its so true. We all have these weird little weaknesses unique to ourselves. Like a tongue and some heavy breathing in my ear and Im a fucking mess. (the funnest mess ever!!!!) yea yea funnest aint no word but if I already knew that then them guys here aint not atta have no problem s then no dont you know..... (I know me either) "I’m outnumbered and the battlefield is yours I have the arms but can I go the whole nine yards? Spending my time in books and maturity Discovering that it takes more then looks and security Simply put it’s having the same feelings" nice nice nice. Love the third line down (or up). It almost sounds mature the way you wrote it. dope line. dope poem. -ashes. __________________ http://www.myspace.com/manmadeofashes

08-04-2005, 05:34 PM	#4 (permalink)
ManMadeofAshes *DREAMER Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: at home Posts: 635	eh yo were is oceanside compared to long beach or irvine. (im moving down in that direction and know a single mother cept a nasty bitter little excuse for an aunt) just curious. __________________ http://www.myspace.com/manmadeofashes

08-04-2005, 05:57 PM	#5 (permalink)
UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS! Join Date: Aug 1999 Location: Oceanside CA USA Posts: 2,965	^First off thanks for peeping Sole Sover you one of the cats that go way back I'll get back at you and your poems Next off thanks for the in depth feedback Ashes you are never afraid to speak your mind and now it seems as well as open your heart............I feel ya man But yo Oceanside is like an hour or so drive away from long beach/Irvine.....traffic is crazy on the 5 though just to give you heads up __________________ *The Truth isn't out there because its already landed and the Truth is:* JESUS CHRIST Oddie Sloan

08-08-2005, 05:35 AM	#6 (permalink)
Mind~$oul I'm Pretty Join Date: Apr 2001 Location: North Memphis BITCH! Posts: 17,145	Word this was a great piece by you man. It's kinda like you finally gave up running from love and let it take your heart captive. Must be some bomb pussy though. One luv __________________ "Everybody wanna be a nicca, but don't nobody wanna be a nicca"-Paul Mooney "I tried to live right, but society aint made for niccas to live right"-Joe Budden

08-08-2005, 11:54 AM	#7 (permalink)
shrek Registered User Join Date: Aug 2005 Posts: 7	"Who can provide for your simple needs of hidden feelings And bond with your body on lonely weekends Because false love is better then slowly grieving Hypnotized by the L word my emotions only teasing Your Lust Jones is barebones - alone showing cleavage Human passions are fashions clone - going with the seasons Fire in the hole I close my ears - froze unbelievin’ Lost my rabbit foot in the trenches and my luck fade" that was tight matter fact this whole piece was tight. Im a new member on this site so what I mostly enjoyed is the way you write, propps!

08-08-2005, 05:48 PM	#8 (permalink)
Koban4max2 Registered User Join Date: Aug 2005 Posts: 137	Nice poem..but what is "submit for forbidden charm?" could you explain?

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