why did the boy with the dreams give up

Gods son · 08-03-2005, 10:22 PM

why did the boy with the dreams give up
why did he give up?cuz life was to much
such fate is due to having a bad youth
picture yourself in his shoes
no dad,& a mother that hardly takes care of you
he went out with friends,& was soon introduced to drugs
he became heavy into them to
every night,he went home to a crack fiend mother
she was pregnant,through it all he still loved her
he went out & got her a pendant,that read i love you

he came home one night,his mother was high
and in tears, crying,cuz she had misscarried
she began blaming him,so he left
he went to a friends house for the night
next morning he got a call in his cell
one of his homies had died
shot in between the eyes
after the funeral he went home and cried
a few hours passed
laying in his room
why God?is what he asked
he went into the dror,& pulled out a gun
looked at his hand shaking
he pointed it at his own chest
but decided not to
so he pointed it at his head
cuz he wanted to make sure he was dead
he pulled the trigger,and that was the end

his mother came home,& found him there
tears streaming down her face she was screaming
in greaving,for the second time
cuz not including,the one that she misscarried
this would be the second son that she burried

Mind~$oul · 08-04-2005, 07:03 PM

Yup I've seen in all man. Even been through some of that shit myself with my mother being on drugs and all. Not much more I can say. Heartfelt piece. Welcome to the realm

One luv

Gods son · 08-04-2005, 07:09 PM

cool thanks man

Quotive · 08-05-2005, 12:27 PM

Decent story. Reminds me of something Nas would do back in the day.

Welcome... spread love around to recieve it.

FreakEmoWriter9 · 08-05-2005, 05:43 PM

nice piece, explains just how not recieving the love from your family can truly mess up a life.

ManMadeofAshes · 08-06-2005, 03:39 AM

definately like a story here. went for the dramatic ending. rhythm was a little bland but other than that I like.

.Malone. · 08-07-2005, 01:14 PM

At first i thought, this was going to be a life expereince from you but it wasn't,
The story was nice and I thought It would've been better if it rhymed but maybe I feel that way because I rap,
The stories emotion is so deep in this and the story went thru a time period that was so nice, I could relate somewhat to this because I got a freind going thru the same thing as that kid

Bhitiah · 08-08-2005, 04:30 AM

yeah this was cool...Good to see new faces around here...

Where do you stay in california?

Gods son · 08-08-2005, 01:44 PM

i stay in juniper hills been out here for like 2 years almost its like the desert out here but i used to live in van nuys in the valley

Koban4max2 · 08-08-2005, 05:44 PM

This poem is sad. I liked the first paragraph because it relates to me.

08-03-2005, 10:22 PM	#1 (permalink)
Gods son Registered User Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: sunny California Posts: 32	why did the boy with the dreams give up why did the boy with the dreams give up why did he give up?cuz life was to much such fate is due to having a bad youth picture yourself in his shoes no dad,& a mother that hardly takes care of you he went out with friends,& was soon introduced to drugs he became heavy into them to every night,he went home to a crack fiend mother she was pregnant,through it all he still loved her he went out & got her a pendant,that read i love you he came home one night,his mother was high and in tears, crying,cuz she had misscarried she began blaming him,so he left he went to a friends house for the night next morning he got a call in his cell one of his homies had died shot in between the eyes after the funeral he went home and cried a few hours passed laying in his room why God?is what he asked he went into the dror,& pulled out a gun looked at his hand shaking he pointed it at his own chest but decided not to so he pointed it at his head cuz he wanted to make sure he was dead he pulled the trigger,and that was the end his mother came home,& found him there tears streaming down her face she was screaming in greaving,for the second time cuz not including,the one that she misscarried this would be the second son that she burried

08-04-2005, 07:03 PM	#2 (permalink)
Mind~$oul I'm Pretty Join Date: Apr 2001 Location: North Memphis BITCH! Posts: 17,145	Yup I've seen in all man. Even been through some of that shit myself with my mother being on drugs and all. Not much more I can say. Heartfelt piece. Welcome to the realm One luv __________________ "Everybody wanna be a nicca, but don't nobody wanna be a nicca"-Paul Mooney "I tried to live right, but society aint made for niccas to live right"-Joe Budden

08-04-2005, 07:09 PM	#3 (permalink)
Gods son Registered User Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: sunny California Posts: 32	cool thanks man __________________ Rest in Peace to little erica and all the countless other little boys and girls that got shot by stray bullets my latest songs ive recorded on my demo split second(tribute to erica)done to the lost souls instrumental of tupac and the outlawz why god(what can we do)done to the keep ya head up instrumental of tupac nuthing but a AG party done to the 2 of amerikaz most wanted instrumental brother my brother done to the po nigga blues instrumental from tupac

08-06-2005, 03:39 AM	#6 (permalink)
ManMadeofAshes *DREAMER Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: at home Posts: 635	definately like a story here. went for the dramatic ending. rhythm was a little bland but other than that I like. __________________ http://www.myspace.com/manmadeofashes

08-07-2005, 01:14 PM	#7 (permalink)
.Malone. Registered User Join Date: Aug 2005 Posts: 60	At first i thought, this was going to be a life expereince from you but it wasn't, The story was nice and I thought It would've been better if it rhymed but maybe I feel that way because I rap, The stories emotion is so deep in this and the story went thru a time period that was so nice, I could relate somewhat to this because I got a freind going thru the same thing as that kid __________________ Malone's Music Aim = Malonethetruth

08-05-2005, 05:43 PM	#5 (permalink)
FreakEmoWriter9 Registered User Join Date: May 2005 Location: AZ Posts: 112	nice piece, explains just how not recieving the love from your family can truly mess up a life.

08-08-2005, 04:30 AM	#8 (permalink)
Bhitiah Powerful Scriptures Join Date: May 2004 Posts: 1,168	yeah this was cool...Good to see new faces around here... Where do you stay in california? __________________ You can bomb the world to peices, but cant bomb into peace

08-08-2005, 01:44 PM	#9 (permalink)
Gods son Registered User Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: sunny California Posts: 32	i stay in juniper hills been out here for like 2 years almost its like the desert out here but i used to live in van nuys in the valley __________________ Rest in Peace to little erica and all the countless other little boys and girls that got shot by stray bullets my latest songs ive recorded on my demo split second(tribute to erica)done to the lost souls instrumental of tupac and the outlawz why god(what can we do)done to the keep ya head up instrumental of tupac nuthing but a AG party done to the 2 of amerikaz most wanted instrumental brother my brother done to the po nigga blues instrumental from tupac

08-08-2005, 05:44 PM	#10 (permalink)
Koban4max2 Registered User Join Date: Aug 2005 Posts: 137	This poem is sad. I liked the first paragraph because it relates to me.

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