Dyed

ChyllTyrant · 05-24-2005, 01:45 AM

wackness

skandelous_lala · 05-24-2005, 03:18 AM

I hate commenting on a piece that I didn't feel b/c poetry is such a personal thing but since you posted it for our opinion I will tell you that nothing stood out to me at all with this piece. To me none of it really seemed to follow. It just felt very jumbled to me. Some lines seemed to have their places and others felt like they were just placed there b/c they rhymed in a certain way.

Bhitiah · 05-27-2005, 07:29 AM

If you replied more, you might get more responses ...

I agree with lala tho

05-24-2005, 01:45 AM	#1 (permalink)
ChyllTyrant AmIEternalOrAnEternalist? Join Date: Oct 2003 Location: Syracuse, NY Posts: 830	Dyed wackness __________________ Twyll The ChyllTyrant aka Verbal Kynt aka Soul Prophet aka Wally Wigglez And Like That... He's Gone The greatest trick the devil ever pulled, was convincing the world he didn't exist. http://www.myspace.com/twyllthechylltyrant http://www.myspace.com/realninjtruth http://www.soundclick.com/tyrantny Last edited by ChyllTyrant; 05-30-2005 at 07:03 AM.

05-24-2005, 03:18 AM	#2 (permalink)
skandelous_lala back from the dead Join Date: Sep 2000 Location: Hey! Fuck you and the horse you rode in on! Posts: 26,707	I hate commenting on a piece that I didn't feel b/c poetry is such a personal thing but since you posted it for our opinion I will tell you that nothing stood out to me at all with this piece. To me none of it really seemed to follow. It just felt very jumbled to me. Some lines seemed to have their places and others felt like they were just placed there b/c they rhymed in a certain way. __________________ ALL YOU REALLY KNOW IS WHAT I CHOOSE TO SHOW Good Mourning, Good afternoon, Good nite, what have you done with your life?. Everybody's time comes to be embraced by the light you only afraid to die when you ain't livin right

05-27-2005, 07:29 AM	#3 (permalink)
Bhitiah Powerful Scriptures Join Date: May 2004 Posts: 1,168	If you replied more, you might get more responses ... I agree with lala tho __________________ You can bomb the world to peices, but cant bomb into peace

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