Nature Signs

[UFO the Phoenix]

Nature Signs (by Oddie Sloan 5/18/05)

Each day welcome the morning
With a new adventure
Inhale the presence

Exhale the future

Let the green light of nature
Push you forward in loose love
Where the flowers
Signal freedom unplugged

Each day welcome the road
With your shoe prints
Inhale thee unknown journey

Exhale all confusion

Let the blue prints of nature
Complete your illusion
And inspire your imagination
To sky dive into the acoustic
Rhythm on the cool wind

Each day reach for the sun
Challenge your limits
Like the fragrance of a flower
Growing on the un-traveled pavement
Be a slave to the same gesture
Let your thoughts dance with
The yellow lights from the sun’s ray
But always be aware of the vain jester
Time…making shadows hide
And giving birth to insane pressure

Each day follow the signs
To your treasure…. let your wisdom
Be refreshed in each new step
Because when dawn is gone
Dusk will spawn
But don’t fret just stop and reflect
Under the red light of twilight
Try to pause…. turn around & explore
Look where you’ve been
The kaleidoscope puzzle is solved
Your journey is known
Let nature undress your shoe prints
Giving that final reassuring signal

That you’re never alone

[Bhitiah]

"Time…making shadows hide
And giving birth to insane pressure"

I liked that LOL

but I wasnt so fond of the rest of it, I mean, good poem, good structure, your a good writer. But your message is forever tainted, at least for me.

I think it'd be cool to see you write a poem where you say exactly what you mean, exactly how you feel and be a messenger of your own mind instead of this other shit you always on ......

[da sein]

This is onew of those ideolistic metaphorical life affirmation poems that i dont like at fiurst....
but i read this three times and nnow...i wish i worte it. haha
naw this was impressive in the cleanliness of the word choice and the unwaivering string of the imagery driven metaphor...

the light and darkness as emotion...very classic...

also \/\/\/\/these ending couplets killed me...

Where the flowers
Signal freedom unplugged

To sky dive into the acoustic
Rhythm on the cool wind

Let nature undress your shoe prints
Giving that final reassuring signal
That you’re never alone

[Mind~$oul]

"Each day reach for the sun
Challenge your limits"

^I really felt those lines there. Never gonna get anywhere in life if you always waking up to the same shit....by choice.

Always manage to make me write to jot something down after reading your work. Uppin for the sleepers

One luv