they think im stoppin....

~Eloquent · 05-22-2005, 01:34 PM

There's no way i could ever stop...
im poised, passionate,and driven
tears fall down my face so freely
creating a river, of hopeless love to drown in...
soaking myself with thunderstorms of illusion induced sadness...
forcing every last bit of water pouring down my cheeks...

theirs no way i could stop this shit cuz im in way to deep...
fuck what a critical,nit picking,so called friend thinks
in the world of hungry wolves,you cant afford no longer to be sheep...
look at how their fangs,
they sink in...
drinking anothers passion,
while heartbeat is throbbing...
watch them sink their fangs in so ruthlessly...
watch them spit pieces of skin all over the terrain...
watch them dig deep again,if their prey isnt yet finished off...
watch them glorify their ruthlessness...
sayin it was the message from god,
watch them defend their ignorance cuz they attend christian synagouges...
watch them...
completely deny the truth
that us hungry men pursue...
watch them deny the poets hunger
watch them downplay the poets vision...
watch them,become just another number in a society
no longer identify with trust and fidelity

than they expect me..
to just lay down...
drop the pen...
and give up my fight
what they wouldnt know
that its deeper than black and white
they say things have changed
while cold bodies still illuminated by street lights...
does it matter the color of ones skin while they lay lifeless before their perimeter is chalked?
does it matter if a cold blooded killer,swears up and down,that they were directed by god?
does it matter just cuz they got ends that they can trick...
and confuse another young women because "they pockets thick"

does it matter that another women blames the problem of infidelity all on men...
when some of us cling tight to those we love
just wantin them to let us in?

does it really matter that the word of truth is so lost in a man?
that the youth cant even stand
cuz the streets are swamped with contraband?
does this shit even matter to yall?
sometimes i really wonder...
if most people i thought were my friends...
really just assist to take me under...
who the fuck can i trust...
when hardly anyone says what they mean?

Bhitiah · 05-22-2005, 03:17 PM

This was tiiiight. For real.

"who the fuck can i trust...
when hardly anyone says what they mean?" I think about that allllllll the time for real.

UFO the Phoenix · 05-22-2005, 07:43 PM

Never heard you come like this before El?

hope things is alright

this sound more of a vent a rant to clear some weight off your chest from maybe an argument with a close friend?....not sure....the parts about people killing in the name of god was chilling....made me think of terriost....its all messed up.....this piece seemed to scream silently over a busy highway of deaf blind souls wondering aimlessly with their lifes....love the imagery of the wolves....maddness in the city....look into the crowd....if you look closely you can see their fangs

RealMS · 05-23-2005, 07:09 PM

I really don't know the correct terminology for this lol but it's like 2 intersections that become 4 roads of circles. You get into it from the road you were previously on to get to the other way you're trying to go. Lol, they have one near my dad's in the city but I can't think of the word for nothing. That's what I thought about when reading this. Why do ppl. act the way they do. Not so much act alltogether, but react. Why? Things could be simple, could. Key word. And if all happened to be, would we learn anything for ourselves? Or just walk around, living uncultured because things were so simple? IDK. I feel like we're all our own selves when it really comes down to things. Nice to see you around.

-Much Love

~Eloquent · 05-24-2005, 04:32 PM

yea basically ive always felt if its to simple...no way its true
kinda negative and pessimistic sometimes...
but from my experiences...i hate running from problems and much rather face them on now....
and UFO it wasnt about one actual argument its about tryin your hardest to get people to listen and direct on each point of view without discrimination...
and some people feel that they might be exempt from consequences to their actions,cuz they feel they represent something...
but to truly represent something you got to take the bitter with the sweet and really follow thru....
thank you all...
peace

Mind~$oul · 05-28-2005, 04:20 PM

Great piece man. Never really seen you come like this in a poem. Had a lot of aggressiveness in it. This world is a dog eat dog world man. There isnt a hand few of people you can trust out in this world. I know actually what you mean about running from problems. It's not doing anything but building up on you. Waiting for the perfect time to collapse. We still need to do that collab.

One luv

Bhitiah · 06-01-2005, 02:45 AM

"they say things have changed
while cold bodies still illuminated by street lights...
does it matter the color of ones skin while they lay lifeless before their perimeter is chalked?
does it matter if a cold blooded killer,swears up and down,that they were directed by god?"

^^ For real.

"does it matter that another women blames the problem of infidelity all on men...
when some of us cling tight to those we love
just wantin them to let us in?"

Damn ....

MISSKEYdaQUEEN · 06-02-2005, 02:17 PM

"look at how their fangs,
they sink in...
drinking anothers passion,
while heartbeat is throbbing...
watch them sink their fangs in so ruthlessly...
watch them spit pieces of skin all over the terrain...
watch them dig deep again,if their prey isnt yet finished off...
watch them glorify their ruthlessness...
sayin it was the message from god,
watch them defend their ignorance cuz they attend christian synagouges...
watch them...
completely deny the truth
that us hungry men pursue...
watch them deny the poets hunger
watch them downplay the poets vision..."

I had to read that like 5 times because it just spoke to me!!!

man I like this...

Not your normal approach from the pieces I've read from you, but I like this side.

I like this poem!

6ftground · 06-02-2005, 04:17 PM

"There's no way i could ever stop...
im poised, passionate,and driven
tears fall down my face so freely
creating a river, of hopeless love to drown in...
soaking myself with thunderstorms of illusion induced sadness...
forcing every last bit of water pouring down my cheeks..."

The opener to all who knows poetry!
Damn good drop fam... I see you still drop-in it like it's HOT!
Nice on the mind... Nice drop..Peace 6

05-22-2005, 01:34 PM	#1 (permalink)
~Eloquent Cold Logic Join Date: Feb 2003 Location: trapped where i cant leave,Florida Posts: 3,825	they think im stoppin.... There's no way i could ever stop... im poised, passionate,and driven tears fall down my face so freely creating a river, of hopeless love to drown in... soaking myself with thunderstorms of illusion induced sadness... forcing every last bit of water pouring down my cheeks... theirs no way i could stop this shit cuz im in way to deep... fuck what a critical,nit picking,so called friend thinks in the world of hungry wolves,you cant afford no longer to be sheep... look at how their fangs, they sink in... drinking anothers passion, while heartbeat is throbbing... watch them sink their fangs in so ruthlessly... watch them spit pieces of skin all over the terrain... watch them dig deep again,if their prey isnt yet finished off... watch them glorify their ruthlessness... sayin it was the message from god, watch them defend their ignorance cuz they attend christian synagouges... watch them... completely deny the truth that us hungry men pursue... watch them deny the poets hunger watch them downplay the poets vision... watch them,become just another number in a society no longer identify with trust and fidelity than they expect me.. to just lay down... drop the pen... and give up my fight what they wouldnt know that its deeper than black and white they say things have changed while cold bodies still illuminated by street lights... does it matter the color of ones skin while they lay lifeless before their perimeter is chalked? does it matter if a cold blooded killer,swears up and down,that they were directed by god? does it matter just cuz they got ends that they can trick... and confuse another young women because "they pockets thick" does it matter that another women blames the problem of infidelity all on men... when some of us cling tight to those we love just wantin them to let us in? does it really matter that the word of truth is so lost in a man? that the youth cant even stand cuz the streets are swamped with contraband? does this shit even matter to yall? sometimes i really wonder... if most people i thought were my friends... really just assist to take me under... who the fuck can i trust... when hardly anyone says what they mean?

05-22-2005, 03:17 PM	#2 (permalink)
Bhitiah Powerful Scriptures Join Date: May 2004 Posts: 1,168	This was tiiiight. For real. "who the fuck can i trust... when hardly anyone says what they mean?" I think about that allllllll the time for real. __________________ You can bomb the world to peices, but cant bomb into peace

05-22-2005, 07:43 PM	#3 (permalink)
UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS! Join Date: Aug 1999 Location: Oceanside CA USA Posts: 2,965	Never heard you come like this before El? hope things is alright this sound more of a vent a rant to clear some weight off your chest from maybe an argument with a close friend?....not sure....the parts about people killing in the name of god was chilling....made me think of terriost....its all messed up.....this piece seemed to scream silently over a busy highway of deaf blind souls wondering aimlessly with their lifes....love the imagery of the wolves....maddness in the city....look into the crowd....if you look closely you can see their fangs __________________ *The Truth isn't out there because its already landed and the Truth is:* JESUS CHRIST Oddie Sloan

05-28-2005, 04:20 PM	#6 (permalink)
Mind~$oul I'm Pretty Join Date: Apr 2001 Location: North Memphis BITCH! Posts: 17,145	Great piece man. Never really seen you come like this in a poem. Had a lot of aggressiveness in it. This world is a dog eat dog world man. There isnt a hand few of people you can trust out in this world. I know actually what you mean about running from problems. It's not doing anything but building up on you. Waiting for the perfect time to collapse. We still need to do that collab. One luv __________________ "Everybody wanna be a nicca, but don't nobody wanna be a nicca"-Paul Mooney "I tried to live right, but society aint made for niccas to live right"-Joe Budden

06-01-2005, 02:45 AM	#7 (permalink)
Bhitiah Powerful Scriptures Join Date: May 2004 Posts: 1,168	"they say things have changed while cold bodies still illuminated by street lights... does it matter the color of ones skin while they lay lifeless before their perimeter is chalked? does it matter if a cold blooded killer,swears up and down,that they were directed by god?" ^^ For real. "does it matter that another women blames the problem of infidelity all on men... when some of us cling tight to those we love just wantin them to let us in?" Damn .... __________________ You can bomb the world to peices, but cant bomb into peace

05-23-2005, 07:09 PM	#4 (permalink)
RealMS Pro 31 Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Lafayette/New Orleans, LA Posts: 4,231	I really don't know the correct terminology for this lol but it's like 2 intersections that become 4 roads of circles. You get into it from the road you were previously on to get to the other way you're trying to go. Lol, they have one near my dad's in the city but I can't think of the word for nothing. That's what I thought about when reading this. Why do ppl. act the way they do. Not so much act alltogether, but react. Why? Things could be simple, could. Key word. And if all happened to be, would we learn anything for ourselves? Or just walk around, living uncultured because things were so simple? IDK. I feel like we're all our own selves when it really comes down to things. Nice to see you around. -Much Love

05-24-2005, 04:32 PM	#5 (permalink)
~Eloquent Cold Logic Join Date: Feb 2003 Location: trapped where i cant leave,Florida Posts: 3,825	yea basically ive always felt if its to simple...no way its true kinda negative and pessimistic sometimes... but from my experiences...i hate running from problems and much rather face them on now.... and UFO it wasnt about one actual argument its about tryin your hardest to get people to listen and direct on each point of view without discrimination... and some people feel that they might be exempt from consequences to their actions,cuz they feel they represent something... but to truly represent something you got to take the bitter with the sweet and really follow thru.... thank you all... peace

06-02-2005, 02:17 PM	#8 (permalink)
MISSKEYdaQUEEN Watch the black panther.. Join Date: Jul 2002 Location: Glenville REPPIN BIYAAAATCHES!! Posts: 17,647	"look at how their fangs, they sink in... drinking anothers passion, while heartbeat is throbbing... watch them sink their fangs in so ruthlessly... watch them spit pieces of skin all over the terrain... watch them dig deep again,if their prey isnt yet finished off... watch them glorify their ruthlessness... sayin it was the message from god, watch them defend their ignorance cuz they attend christian synagouges... watch them... completely deny the truth that us hungry men pursue... watch them deny the poets hunger watch them downplay the poets vision..." I had to read that like 5 times because it just spoke to me!!! man I like this... Not your normal approach from the pieces I've read from you, but I like this side. I like this poem! __________________ Queen's MySpace Page Queen's Other Myspace Page biaaatches *********************** The battles that count aren't the ones for gold medals. The struggles within yourself—the invisible, inevitable battles inside all of us—that's where it's at.~Jesse Owens (1913-1980)

06-02-2005, 04:17 PM	#9 (permalink)
6ftground MC-KHP Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: 3 story house by the mountains Posts: 1,758	"There's no way i could ever stop... im poised, passionate,and driven tears fall down my face so freely creating a river, of hopeless love to drown in... soaking myself with thunderstorms of illusion induced sadness... forcing every last bit of water pouring down my cheeks..." The opener to all who knows poetry! Damn good drop fam... I see you still drop-in it like it's HOT! Nice on the mind... Nice drop..Peace 6 __________________ DaMiddleFinger

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