The Printing Press

Amerrorist · 05-22-2005, 04:51 AM

Alright.. I know I haven't been active and/or very responsive towards others' poetry. For that I am apologetic.. Although, if not time taken to comment, please read. I haven't been able to write in such a long time, this is the first in what appears as ages and I'm just stuck in this mood. If you would care to comment you could leave a link to your poem and I would gladly return the good deed. Keep alive.

The Printing Press

Cold is pressed but never sealed into a breath that never feels. The hopeless felt tip never real will hold a selfish sex appeal. Alluring waste of morbid life. A curing taste, a tortured knife. To be the blade that is to cut is to see the pain that is to come. The ink, the skin, the flesh, the bone. A drink to sink a breath alone. You'll never know my pity. Read your letters, I've wrote you plenty. A mouth kept shut has severed the silence and now left none. So who will fall not far from the tree of knowledge. All were scarred of the seed of homage. Honest to God it's a Socrates apology. If not for you, then all for me. Selfish is held in the palm of resilience. Crushed to a grain of salt and rebuilt with the touch of a stain of fault and guiltless. Though nobody's perfect, I'll prove I'm someone. Who you are to you will lose you loved ones. You loved none.

~Eloquent · 05-22-2005, 01:37 PM

man i was really feelin the deep detail you put in this
the paragraph structure made it hard to follow though
but what ive read from you so far....
the shit is always full of detail and you always bring it exactly how it is not makin excuses for no one...
dope drop

da sein · 05-23-2005, 01:10 PM

The hopeless felt tip never real will hold a selfish sex appeal
^^^
the sexualioty of a pen...this could be a whole piece in itself

Selfish is held in the palm of resilience. Crushed to a grain of salt and rebuilt with the touch of a stain of fault and guiltless.
^^^killin shit!

overall a success...though some of the abstractions could be reworded to solidify the power of both the imagery and the meaning behind

keep up

RealMS · 05-23-2005, 06:52 PM

resisting something. At first it was more of someone than just a thing, but lingering down and eventually towards the ending it looks like it could go both ways, from the reader's perception. A person, an object. Eh. That's besides the point somewhat.

That just sounds cold hearted, if it was going out to someone else-being about them. Or it could be because of a fear yet to be conquered.

I got another different feel for this lol. Sounds like you were talking about publishing companies. Okay maybe a little. But do you see where I'm going with the thought?

-Much Love

Amerrorist · 05-26-2005, 01:13 AM

publishing companies lol ..I don't write about anything I just sit down and let it pour out. I take from it as much as you do because it is limitless.

Mind~$oul · 05-31-2005, 03:56 AM

I was trying to find the connection with the title and the actually poem but sadly I couldnt find it lol. I dont normally like this type of structure it always reminds me of reading a book though I love to read books just dont like reading this structure in poetry.

Poem seemed like it had a message withing a message. Something only the writer will probably just understand on his own.

One luv

05-22-2005, 04:51 AM	#1 (permalink)
Amerrorist American Terror Is.. Join Date: May 2003 Location: Florida Posts: 341	The Printing Press Alright.. I know I haven't been active and/or very responsive towards others' poetry. For that I am apologetic.. Although, if not time taken to comment, please read. I haven't been able to write in such a long time, this is the first in what appears as ages and I'm just stuck in this mood. If you would care to comment you could leave a link to your poem and I would gladly return the good deed. Keep alive. The Printing Press Cold is pressed but never sealed into a breath that never feels. The hopeless felt tip never real will hold a selfish sex appeal. Alluring waste of morbid life. A curing taste, a tortured knife. To be the blade that is to cut is to see the pain that is to come. The ink, the skin, the flesh, the bone. A drink to sink a breath alone. You'll never know my pity. Read your letters, I've wrote you plenty. A mouth kept shut has severed the silence and now left none. So who will fall not far from the tree of knowledge. All were scarred of the seed of homage. Honest to God it's a Socrates apology. If not for you, then all for me. Selfish is held in the palm of resilience. Crushed to a grain of salt and rebuilt with the touch of a stain of fault and guiltless. Though nobody's perfect, I'll prove I'm someone. Who you are to you will lose you loved ones. You loved none. __________________ What advice do you have for younger kids getting into HXC? Like I was saying before HC is more than just a music or scene. To me it’s a lifestyle you know. It’s the way you go about your business, caring about yourself, you know, being true to yourself, your family , your peoples, keepin’ it real. - Madball

05-26-2005, 01:13 AM	#5 (permalink)
Amerrorist American Terror Is.. Join Date: May 2003 Location: Florida Posts: 341	publishing companies lol ..I don't write about anything I just sit down and let it pour out. I take from it as much as you do because it is limitless. __________________ What advice do you have for younger kids getting into HXC? Like I was saying before HC is more than just a music or scene. To me it’s a lifestyle you know. It’s the way you go about your business, caring about yourself, you know, being true to yourself, your family , your peoples, keepin’ it real. - Madball

05-31-2005, 03:56 AM	#6 (permalink)
Mind~$oul I'm Pretty Join Date: Apr 2001 Location: North Memphis BITCH! Posts: 17,145	I was trying to find the connection with the title and the actually poem but sadly I couldnt find it lol. I dont normally like this type of structure it always reminds me of reading a book though I love to read books just dont like reading this structure in poetry. Poem seemed like it had a message withing a message. Something only the writer will probably just understand on his own. One luv __________________ "Everybody wanna be a nicca, but don't nobody wanna be a nicca"-Paul Mooney "I tried to live right, but society aint made for niccas to live right"-Joe Budden

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05-22-2005, 01:37 PM	#2 (permalink)
~Eloquent Cold Logic Join Date: Feb 2003 Location: trapped where i cant leave,Florida Posts: 3,825	man i was really feelin the deep detail you put in this the paragraph structure made it hard to follow though but what ive read from you so far.... the shit is always full of detail and you always bring it exactly how it is not makin excuses for no one... dope drop

05-23-2005, 01:10 PM	#3 (permalink)
da sein feel influence Join Date: May 2005 Location: Buffalo, NY Posts: 48	The hopeless felt tip never real will hold a selfish sex appeal ^^^ the sexualioty of a pen...this could be a whole piece in itself Selfish is held in the palm of resilience. Crushed to a grain of salt and rebuilt with the touch of a stain of fault and guiltless. ^^^killin shit! overall a success...though some of the abstractions could be reworded to solidify the power of both the imagery and the meaning behind keep up

05-23-2005, 06:52 PM	#4 (permalink)
RealMS Pro 31 Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Lafayette/New Orleans, LA Posts: 4,231	resisting something. At first it was more of someone than just a thing, but lingering down and eventually towards the ending it looks like it could go both ways, from the reader's perception. A person, an object. Eh. That's besides the point somewhat. That just sounds cold hearted, if it was going out to someone else-being about them. Or it could be because of a fear yet to be conquered. I got another different feel for this lol. Sounds like you were talking about publishing companies. Okay maybe a little. But do you see where I'm going with the thought? -Much Love

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