A better day

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Old 05-07-2005, 01:37 PM   #1 (permalink)
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A better day

I walk slowly,
In sandles through
The grass, wet
With morning dew

This deserted campus;
Silence is the sound
Without the fuss
No more tests
No more papers
Just the squirrels
And me,
In the early summer heat

This is what I love
About this place
To walk through halls
Of knowledge
When no one calls
Or even sees my face

Deserted,
As students take steps
Toward summer plans
I can stand alone
With all the thoughts
I've known
With only the ideas
That I can really call my own

Without the pressures of
Fitting in,
Without the worry
Of forcing grins
Just me and myself
And the squirrels
And the occasional chirping bird
Self-assured,
Without competing ideologies
I feel free,
To actually be me...
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Love of mine, someday you will die
But I'll be close behind I'll follow you into the dark
No blinding light, or tunnels to gates of white
Just our hands clasped so tight, waiting for the hint of a spark
If heaven and hell decide that they both are satisfied
Illuminate the no's on their vacancy signs
If there's no one beside you when your soul embarks
Then I'll follow you into the dark
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Old 05-07-2005, 04:18 PM   #2 (permalink)
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cool poem. I like the feeling it has as if your walking through these empty halls already feels nostalgic for you.
"This deserted campus;
Silence is the sound
Without the fuss
No more tests
No more papers
Just the squirrels
And me,
In the early summer heat

This is what I love
About this place
To walk through halls
Of knowledge
When no one calls
Or even sees my face"

^those two stanzas are really nice.

"Without the pressures of
Fitting in,
Without the worry
Of forcing grins"

^ goddamn I hear that. Its like some people you have to be "on" with. Its like you are not supposed to ever feel sad or be this or that. Just what they want. And the cracked smile is there before I can scorn myself for showing it. Makes me look forward to the end of the month when its just me and the squirels. nice drop.

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Old 05-07-2005, 10:50 PM   #3 (permalink)
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great piece, it reminds me of the end of the school years, which is coming up im about to start highschool in august! Woo Hoo! sorry to get off topic but i loved this poem and it made the perfect read since school is about to end. keep postin ur fire.
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Old 05-07-2005, 11:41 PM   #4 (permalink)
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I'm about to graduate in the next couple weeks. I can totally relate to this...I've walked through my school when it's empty, and I can't believe it's almost time to move on. I thought this was really good. I can feel and share the emotion expressed here. Interesting style too.
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