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Old 04-28-2005, 01:50 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Truth in Advertising
I am not a poet.
I am a person.
I do not tell stories.
I tell secrets.
I do not bleed ink.
I leak an average crimson.
I am not special.
I am not romantic.
I am not a master of words.
I am an everyday slob,
Who can't speak what he feels,
So I cowar behind paper cloaking,
And wallow lifetimes inside
My own selfish self pity.
I am not a poet.
I am pitiful...

And my thoughts shall cease,
As the pages do crease.
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Old 04-28-2005, 09:21 AM   #2 (permalink)
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For whatever reason I have absoloutly no words lol

And that's not b/c I don't feel it...b/c oh I do.

Interesting....
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Old 04-28-2005, 09:41 AM   #3 (permalink)
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the first 9 lines were just ..wow..nicely composed and written...i loved this style and feel...greatness..cool...
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I don't really like this piece, for various reasons.

I've seen this done plenty of times, and fortunately, you pulled it off. But... it's not your style at all.

"I am not a poet.
I am pitiful..."

I personally LOVED that though, because I can relate. Man you're the most versatile writer I've ever seen on these boards besides Chyll. Keep writing man.
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Old 04-28-2005, 03:36 PM   #5 (permalink)
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Usually, I don't like short pieces or this format all that much.

But, this really made sense to me and I understand that completely... it didn't need to be shorter or longer.. just right to the point.

I dunno, I just really like it for some reason.
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Old 04-28-2005, 07:02 PM   #6 (permalink)
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cool little drop. Hoping for you to hit up on some modern social problems (advertising and capitalism) but you know. We do what we do.

good little read anyway

(and Im pretty sure we are all pitiful. Its just some people hide it better then others. No worries there man lol)
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lol, I didn't think i'd like this when i started it either. But eh, the way it turned out was feasable. thanks.
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So I cowar behind paper cloaking,
And wallow lifetimes inside
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loved those lines... i think in writing... so many seek to hide themselves behind words, emotions spilled on paper that wouldnt dare cross the lips... and so there you have the average man, not trying to create some flowery work of romantic art... but merely one hiding behind words on notebook paper that can be closed/covered/hidden much more quickly. if that makes sense.

anyways, for what it was, it was felt. thank you for sharing.
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A little self depreciating (SP?) But I could relate. One
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THIS WAS A NICE PIECE BRO! I LIKED IT. ALOT. KEEP WRITTING!

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Old 04-29-2005, 09:37 AM   #11 (permalink)
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Old 04-29-2005, 11:29 AM   #12 (permalink)
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^^lol

applause on this one man... i like how you underlined the things that you are not

this was different than some of your others

and i enjoyed your poetic voice in this one as well... good shit my sioux falls brother.. lol
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I'm not even gonna say what I feel about this...3 days from now I will come back to this thread and laugh myself off...knowing I've been in this situation before, feeling this way, but aside from this poem I'm still trying to find out what is the source for me downing myself. If I already know, I guess I'm trying to build myself up to where others' judgments of me are irrelevent. It gets nerve racking if I tend to think on it more than I should even pay to it, but your title gives me an idea of something to write about, except flipping it around a bit-

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Old 04-29-2005, 09:01 PM   #14 (permalink)
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yeah it's interesting, it's as if you think you're going an easy route out in pain by telling these secrets to people - who - can help you alot more than hurt. i liked the structure and everything
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