the lost

koban4max · 04-27-2005, 03:27 AM

I wonder...
how will I ever be in a life of better places,
the life of better tastes, the life of better faces?
I see the empty of a lost soul taking the lost road,
as time rolls by, we all know we be growing old.
I pray to god to help us change,
like traffic, we get stuck in a way we behave.
I couldn't bother, but they're still my brothers
who studders while they slanged,
caughted up cuz they couldn't hang.
There's so much death that we missed,
so much good ol' memories that we reminice.
I remember a lil homie who committed a sucide,
who've been victimized by a bully on the website.
these lost made the world feel hopeless,
but the truth is, we need to build each other up to stay focus.
There's no sense of wanting freedom, as we know,
we are the ones being enslaved by material goal.
So, whatever it is that we struggle,
we gotta let it go....

Shibbymet · 04-27-2005, 03:31 AM

I liked this a lot, very nice flow, and it conected with how im feeling right now, verry good dude

"There's no sense of wanting freedom, as we know,
we are the ones being enslaved by material goal.
So, whatever it is that we struggle,
we gotta let it go...."

def liked this a lot..very true...keep up ur writing ill be checking ur work

UFO the Phoenix · 04-27-2005, 10:26 AM

Koban returns just when we need him most!!!!!!!

love this poem yo....simple and heartfelt....in and out right to the point.....the lil storys in this were shocking and disturbing....someone being bully on a website decides to comment suicide thats crazy??!?!?...but the sad this is I can understand that

..............

man this poem was powerful...and you had a nice cadence flow to it...the wordplay was str8.....I love the fact we need to build each other up instead of breaking each other down....I need that right now in my life...to refocus on whats most important

"enslaved by material goal"

^thats says it all right there

gotta let it go....give it up.....let go let GOD

PROPS FOR THIS

koban4max · 04-27-2005, 12:36 PM

hahaha to ufo...u know i'll be here..haha...i ain't "out of sight" .ahah
hope ya got my email..late..

04-27-2005, 03:27 AM	#1 (permalink)
koban4max Registered User Join Date: Sep 2003 Posts: 428	the lost I wonder... how will I ever be in a life of better places, the life of better tastes, the life of better faces? I see the empty of a lost soul taking the lost road, as time rolls by, we all know we be growing old. I pray to god to help us change, like traffic, we get stuck in a way we behave. I couldn't bother, but they're still my brothers who studders while they slanged, caughted up cuz they couldn't hang. There's so much death that we missed, so much good ol' memories that we reminice. I remember a lil homie who committed a sucide, who've been victimized by a bully on the website. these lost made the world feel hopeless, but the truth is, we need to build each other up to stay focus. There's no sense of wanting freedom, as we know, we are the ones being enslaved by material goal. So, whatever it is that we struggle, we gotta let it go....

04-27-2005, 03:31 AM	#2 (permalink)
Shibbymet Registered User Join Date: May 2003 Posts: 40	I liked this a lot, very nice flow, and it conected with how im feeling right now, verry good dude "There's no sense of wanting freedom, as we know, we are the ones being enslaved by material goal. So, whatever it is that we struggle, we gotta let it go...." def liked this a lot..very true...keep up ur writing ill be checking ur work __________________ Silence is golden, but it depends on where you at, and who you holdin.

04-27-2005, 10:26 AM	#3 (permalink)
UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS! Join Date: Aug 1999 Location: Oceanside CA USA Posts: 2,965	Koban returns just when we need him most!!!!!!! love this poem yo....simple and heartfelt....in and out right to the point.....the lil storys in this were shocking and disturbing....someone being bully on a website decides to comment suicide thats crazy??!?!?...but the sad this is I can understand that .............. man this poem was powerful...and you had a nice cadence flow to it...the wordplay was str8.....I love the fact we need to build each other up instead of breaking each other down....I need that right now in my life...to refocus on whats most important "enslaved by material goal" ^thats says it all right there gotta let it go....give it up.....let go let GOD PROPS FOR THIS __________________ *The Truth isn't out there because its already landed and the Truth is:* JESUS CHRIST Oddie Sloan

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04-27-2005, 12:36 PM	#4 (permalink)
koban4max Registered User Join Date: Sep 2003 Posts: 428	hahaha to ufo...u know i'll be here..haha...i ain't "out of sight" .ahah hope ya got my email..late..

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