Dried Tears...

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Old 04-26-2005, 08:37 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Dried Tears...
Birth.
Youth.
Lust.
Envy.
Love.
Passion.
Hate.
Death.
Ascention.



Life.... such a strange thing
some are born.. useless
others born as Kings....
to decide... the fate
of others......
Some sisters, moms
Dads... and Brothers
While.... everything has a purpose
I can't find a point in life
Laying down..
Since I have nothing to stand up for
The ground... is softer then
my bed... death would be a favor
Instead of....
Laying here... with this sour flavor
of Death in my mouth...
Taking deep Breaths.....
Life... somehow over since..
Nothing is left...
Pain... pointless as it would seem
Trying to discern the difference
between Reality and a dream
I'm lost within myself
Blessings....
Hide on the shelf of my sins
With... loved ones
Who torment me with
memories of when they were alive
but now... they found a way to die...
So from my brain.. I watch my minds eye cry
Sustained.... is the suffering I pertake
as I look unto this world
I realize.. my life may have been a mistake

Birth.
Youth.
Lust.
Envy.
Love.
Passion.
Hate.
Death.
Ascention.
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Old 04-26-2005, 08:42 PM   #2 (permalink)
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welcome welcome..i see this is your first piece....always enjoy seeing new poets in here

very intense piece..i like it b/c its very real...i think eveyrone has felt like this from time to time and even though i'm not 100 percent sure of my place here i know that i do have a place..everyone does..its all about what you want to do with it..nothing is void...

very nice..make sure to hit up some of the other poets and i'm sure this will recieve some much deserved love

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Hmmm.. this was okay for me. I didn't really like the format and I thought the topic was played out. I commend you for having a different writing style than how most people write, but I just didn't see anything that original or anything that stood out in the content of the poem. I thought it was just "okay"
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and even though i'm not 100 percent sure of my place here i know that i do have a place..everyone does..its all about what you want to do with it..nothing is void...
dang, true that.

The way I look at it is, these so called "Kings" do not decide our fate-my fate anyway. We're forgetting life after death. But some may not believe in that and hey, that's fine with me. Just know what YOU believe in. I also like the part about losing loved ones-hit a soft spot in me. Even if its someone you hear about on the news or word of mouth, it just gets at me for a minute. Sometimes I just can't understand it, but in time things will clear. And suffering, long suffering-we all gotta go through it. Do not follow the crowd of this world as a whole.

Welcome to the Realm as well. I think this is my 3rd time saying this today lol

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I agree with Ghostly. This was a decent piece. I liked the message you were trying to point your finger on. Everybody as a reason in life, it's up to you to find it. I hope to see more from you soon.

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To me this is certainly a piece that I would like to hear...not just read. I imagine it has more of a depth to it when actually listened to... b/c I could "hear" it in my mind and that is what I enjoyed about it the most.
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good to see you over here too....nicely written i think...true this isn't your best work...however I already told you that...
You should post up some of your different style stuff ....
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