A poem dedicated to my father...

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Old 04-13-2005, 03:13 PM   #1 (permalink)
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A poem dedicated to my father...

Ive been meaning to write this poem of a while and never got to it. This is a piece about my father. He has one of the most beautiful souls there is, and this poem is to show how wonderful a person he is.....enjoy!

" My Father… "

My father…
My father is as normal, common, as average as any other ordinary man in our society of labels.

My father‘s childhood, was a foul, confused, lost, corrupted upbringing. A path, that often leads to future, physical and mental escape, extents of death.

My father’s education, is one of simplistic knowledge. Who’s comprehension, has been limited from the many pleasures and life styles that our world offers.

My fathers marriages, are ones of disappointment, of sorrow,….misfortune.

My father’s parenting, has been a betrayal of ones offspring. A fatherless figure, a lone guide.

My father’s mistakes, has left him with a nonflexible home, and a financial status of a low.

My father’s faith has been shattered, walked out on, empty.


This is what my father looks like, through superficial eyes…

But…

Though my father’s life is looked at as being average, his breath is unparalleled, and filled with prosperity.

Though my father’s childhood was rough, it has taught him life lessons, that has sculpted him into the man he is today.

Though my father’s education is confined, his wisdom is extensive. Becoming the teacher, and purifying the soul.

Though my father’s marriages have been those of adversity, he has gained children, who make his life whole.

Though my father hasn’t always been there for me in the past. He has become my shadow, my rock, my protector.

Though my father’s past mistakes, have left him meager and cautious. He has happiness that is not found in the rich.

Though my father has had his problems with faith, he is a complete believer. Because of my father, I know there is a God.

My father is, My father.

Wut u guys think???
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Old 04-13-2005, 03:27 PM   #2 (permalink)
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yo dawg you may want to post this in the other forum thats where must poems go. but don't worry i'm sure a mod will help you out

welcome and i'll tell you what i think about this later

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Old 04-13-2005, 03:36 PM   #3 (permalink)
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yo thx man, and thx for not busting my balls about posting in the wrong forum...lol.

So where should i post this?
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Old 04-13-2005, 04:47 PM   #4 (permalink)
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http://board.rapmusic.com/poetry-realm/

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Old 04-13-2005, 05:48 PM   #5 (permalink)
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i posted there, here. Poet Tree, isnt that for poet battling? I dont want to do that, just wanna post a poem...........
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Old 04-13-2005, 07:05 PM   #6 (permalink)
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Old 04-13-2005, 09:50 PM   #7 (permalink)
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This is a cool poem for your father, I hope you shared this with him
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Old 04-13-2005, 10:24 PM   #8 (permalink)
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damn man i wish my dad was like that, my father was a good dad when he wasnt drunk but that wasnt to often, great write you should let him read if u havent already


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Old 04-16-2005, 02:24 PM   #9 (permalink)
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Nice..

'My father’s education, is one of simplistic knowledge. Who’s comprehension, has been limited from the many pleasures and life styles that our world offers.' - nice

I loved how you restated everything from the beginning onto a more positive note.. peace!
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This was the best piece I've read in a really long time. I could definately relate and I loved how you had that turning point in the middle. I didn't see it coming at all. Beautiful job.
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awww...sorry I gotta say that but I relate a lot. My dad grew up with a father in the military, moved from country-country, then state to state til he was about 17 (graduation year) so to him education was not a very high priority at the time. I don't know its weird because the knowledge (and intelligence) he carries now is ridiculous lol. My best friend. His marriages didn't work out, but through all of his problems he has two children to watch grow up. Its a beautiful turn out through all the bad situations. My dad is living out his second childhood in my eyes right now. Living it to the fullest. This was beautiful. I wrote a poem to him when I was so much younger, but its nothing compared to this. This is just deep (-er than mine too)

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