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Old 04-13-2005, 01:37 PM   #1 (permalink)
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I know love
I've blown love
I've swallowed love
consumed love
and spit love out...
I've wrapped love in plastic
knowing i was about to trap it
and prevent it from spreading
I've contained
and blamed
and fell over in pain
from just the mere thought
of experiancing love...
I've cried a hundred times
but never dropped a tear
in the name of..
I've smiled from nothing
laughed about something
I cant remember the name of...
I've met
and I've loved
the peices of us
that together represent love
and seperated destroy love
But I give love
a bad name...
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Old 04-13-2005, 01:43 PM   #2 (permalink)
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hhmmmmmmmmmmm. . . . .

i enjoyed this but i think i will have to let it set for a moment before i can really give you a detailed reason on why but i know i was feeling it now cause of the way it flowed and the ease upon which it allowed me to take the journey

any way i will try to get back and give you UFO worthy reply lol

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Old 04-13-2005, 01:50 PM   #3 (permalink)
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i'm not cominting b/c u said u dont write about love
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Old 04-13-2005, 11:58 PM   #4 (permalink)
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^^ You stubborn bitch. It's not an "I love you" poem...Like oh my god what would I do without you, I'm so in love, so desperately needing you...oh baby dont leave cause id die without you, suck my toe, yeah the left one, ooohhh....Bitch.
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Old 04-14-2005, 06:47 PM   #5 (permalink)
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in the name of...i can't remember the name of...-I like those pauses. Reading it straight through the 2nd time I caught onto that structure. Damn girl this is nice. You know my perception of love and all, and sometimes I think its weird how me and you are so opposite yet, well I respect your pov. Shoot- experience is a teacher. Keep it up girl

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Old 04-14-2005, 08:04 PM   #6 (permalink)
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I liked this piece, it flowed real nice and showed 'love' in some interesting ways. Especially wrapping it in plastic, that was well, different. The last line was also powerful when you gave yourself the blame for taking love on board and not doing wellby it. It was almost like saying. Love is good, but people misuse it. Very nice piece.

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This is a love poem and dont be going around calling my baby lpoet a bitch.


Anyway I could have sworn this was longer when you showed it to me the first time. Think this is one of your better pieces. Could have been longer though. Keep it up

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Old 04-17-2005, 05:45 AM   #8 (permalink)
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I liked the flow and structure you used. Good piece.

I've smiled from nothing
laughed about something
I cant remember the name of...

^^Liked that part the most for whatever reason =)
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