The Life and Death of Night

[Poetickz]

dusk breaks...see the remaining fires slowly dwindle on the horizon...
pushin through with its reds, and oranges...
mother natures blended peach complexion arises
only to settle with a saddening blue...
the ashes from daylights fire begin to settle...
blackening every inch in its grasp...like a poison
and from mother natures womb comes the night...
born yet again...
time for creatures of daylight to begin to rest
in a dreamy state of peaceful slumber
the nocturnal awake...searching to crave their immediate hunger
feasting on the helpless and weak
happiness and good is the basis of day
while depression and evil reign like tyrants opressing the public
playing a synical version of hide and seek, with murderous intentions
the strong survive
creatures of the night roam...insects
devouring the decomposing corpses of creatures laid to rest
devious weasles sneak about kidnapping the unhatched eggs from a birds nest
owls hooting...with an exorcist head haunting the lonely wanderers warning them
to watch their back
snakes slither slimely through cool damp grass covered with dew
but now dawn arrives...a phoenix arising from the ashes to relight the sky
mother nature's peach complexion arises to assist the phoenix with lighting the fires
casting off the evil that has terrorized the land...but only till the fires grow tired
Goodness Prevails

holla back at me with what yall think...this is the poem i posted in the PTL league.
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[UFO the Phoenix]

^word man props once again for this.....you impressed me yet once again

now get at me about that collabo

stay up

[AlmostFamous]

mother natures blended peach complexion arises
only to settle with a saddening blue

nicely put lines right here...


i dont know about the rest though man... truthfully it seemed a bit forced to me... ive read other pieces from you and they seem to flow better than this one... just my opinion though

ill give you examples if you want

[Poetickz]

i was tryin somethin new mos def...i was suprised with the outcome...this is really one of my first abstract type poems to be honest...mos def appreciate the feed as always bro.
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[LthGd]

The imagery was the best part about this piece along with the story line. I like how everything went and I liked the vocab that you used. Real nice.

[Poetickz]

uppin this
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[Czarina WiseDome]

I read this in the PTL.. beautiful.. peace!