Stand That None will Understand

[rhino42]

i walk my mile
blinded by the sands of time
im fed a bowl of bile
by the guilt of my so called crime

my life has been rough
this isnt a complaint
its a thanks to god for makin me tough
hopefully it will make me a saint

this life is a big game
if u live it well
god will give you no shame
but if not, your new home is hell

people say im crazy
thats olny because they dont understand
i know they dont because thier minds are lazy
but im willin to make a stand that none will understand

By Erik Bützin

this is just something that i wrote in about 5 minutes at school today during my ap world history class

[koban4max]

hehe..that's not bad for 5 min ...keep it up

[MisterEThoughts]

Nice little write up... I thought maybe you could redo it and make it longer...When i started to read it I was really enjoying this and than it stopped... dang it...

[rhino42]

thanks, im plannin on adding to it

[RealMS]

So you're taking honors classes??? lol jp American History was probably one of the most interesting classes I took all year. The honors course seems a lot easier than the regular too, from what I heard, I passed that honors class with flyin colors ;) but anyhoo-

I like how you set this one up, but I also feel like you could go a little more deeper with some of the lines-but if not, your new home is hell-this line for example. I like the approach and agree, just handle your business and do you.

-2 Fingers

[Czarina WiseDome]

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'but im willin to make a stand that none will understand' - best line

peace!

[JetaimeAmour]

I'm feeling it. I do agree with the others stating that it needs to be longer and get deeper into it to the point where I can feel what you feel. I love to make a connection with writers through their expressions, so give me so more so that I can truly connect with you. Other than that, it's all love.