One last smile ( her broken silence part 2)

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Old 03-28-2005, 01:14 AM   #1 (permalink)
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One last smile ( her broken silence part 2)
Ceiling like vapor hangs on a string
The marsh of yesterdays hollow ending
Indulges its lonely beginning
As screams for happiness dissolve

Ashes fall, thinking this was easy

Sorry for letting you leave me
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Old 03-28-2005, 01:17 AM   #2 (permalink)
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"Ceiling like vapor hangs on a string
The marsh of yesterdays hollow ending
Indulges its lonely beginning
As screams for happiness dissolve

Ashes fall, thinking this was easy

Sorry for letting you leave me"



Lmfao, My retarded ass just quoted what you wrote and pressed send or whatever, LOL....My bad.



I loved that tho, I love your writing for real..
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Old 03-28-2005, 06:04 PM   #3 (permalink)
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No point of return to sum that up. Nothing one can do or say can reverse it. I just read part 3-didn't realize the part 3-before reading this, and I wonder if I read part one now.

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Old 03-28-2005, 09:56 PM   #4 (permalink)
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Ceiling like vapor hangs on a string
The marsh of yesterdays hollow ending
Indulges its lonely beginning
As screams for happiness dissolve

Ashes fall, thinking this was easy

Sorry for letting you leave me
this was like a build up to fireworks that drifted down like a falling leaf from a dreamy tree at the end. tell us all what it means to you
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Old 03-28-2005, 11:50 PM   #5 (permalink)
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I think I'll have to go find part1 to understand...be back then, lol...
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Old 03-29-2005, 12:47 AM   #6 (permalink)
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This was nice... Short but beautiful... Just beautiful....
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Old 03-29-2005, 12:49 AM   #7 (permalink)
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i didnt read part 1.......


yesterdays [do i say shit!!!] left yesterday unfulfilled, consuming the lonely beginning to the [do i say relationship!!!].... while screams for happiness are no longer being helped
ashes fall, like it'd be easy but its only awful
blatantly, you feel bad about letting it go

i like it
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Old 03-29-2005, 01:18 PM   #8 (permalink)
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broken silence is pretty old for most of us to remember but your style is one of its own and just stands out to me....this was no different.....very original....you seem to be in the midst of creating your own slogan for love....I cant wait to read pt 3
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Old 03-30-2005, 07:15 PM   #9 (permalink)
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Had to go back and read the first part.

This piece made me feel empty on the inside man. Real short but it packed a lot of hidden emotion in it. Uppin for you


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Old 03-31-2005, 12:57 PM   #10 (permalink)
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yeah ofcourse it was nice but

TOO FUCKIN SHORT...

how many times i gotta tell u abou this shit

hahah...

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