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Old 03-28-2005, 12:32 AM   #1 (permalink)
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...do me a favor...

stop tryna plagiarize
around with my
mind,

cause it's obvious
you don't
you can't
know how
I
feel....

and this is no where close to love,
but a fool's advocate

infatuated
with everything
except who
I
am...

I know you feel
infallible,

I'm positive you haven't been here before
Used to having your way
Dropping a damsel's many dreams

but
get this
straight...

I am in love

and it ain't you
I was meant to love...
in the first place.
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Old 03-28-2005, 12:42 AM   #2 (permalink)
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"cause it's obvious
you don't
you can't
know how
I
feel...."

that hurts...lol...I felt that


"infatuated
with everything
except who
I
am..." <<DAMN, Yep...I feel that too




My heart stopped when I read those two parts, I was like...What's she doin' all up in my head for? lol....Good Drop Girl...I feeel ya pain- No doubt -Tiah
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Old 03-28-2005, 12:53 AM   #3 (permalink)
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thanks girl. Pain tho? lol hell nah, more like aggravation, wishin I was invisible for a minute lol. Its about a dude just constantly not wanting to leave you alone. Like for instance you're in the mall and you walk past and all of a sudden they think they own you. Man please, get on you know. This incident happened yesterday when I went to New Orleans for Easter to see my family and all. I had the night to myself so I wanted to get out, but being that I'm a minor (haha) I can't really go out over there, so I went shopping. Its not really on my mind all that much, but something made me wanna write about it. As you can see I get no inspiration from it, guess you can this a keystyle. Eh, I miss my baby :cries: I need to call him

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Old 03-28-2005, 12:57 AM   #4 (permalink)
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Word, I hate those mall stalkers too...Fuck those kids. I mean...If you follow a girl around the mall do you really expect her to holla @ you or something? I mean, you just followed my ass around the mall for 30 minutes, If you didnt have anything better to do, then I dont want nothing to do with ya, Ya know what I mean?! lol.

I took the poem in a different way tho, kinda the same thing, just different. LOL


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Old 03-28-2005, 05:38 AM   #5 (permalink)
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I know exactly how u feel, definately aggravation and definately pissed off. When i go out, I always get it and it really gets to me, I got better things to do than try and get away from a guy for the next 20minutes who wont give up just because he thinks your something to have. Its always about thrill of the chase, possession and ownership. Hunt you, trap you, tame you, keep you and, the icing on the cake... tell all the boys how they got you. My opinion. Nice drop.
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Old 03-28-2005, 08:58 AM   #6 (permalink)
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I'm positive you haven't been here before
Used to having your way
Dropping a damsel's many dreams

but
get this
straight...

I am in love

and it ain't you
I was meant to love...
in the first place.

wow this was like whoa

im speechless... the ending was near perfect

rep up


*exits room in disbelief that I just read such a great poem!*
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Old 03-28-2005, 10:26 AM   #7 (permalink)
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I liked that alot, the way I had it reading out in my head, was cool lol.

infatuated
with everything
except who
I
am...

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Old 03-28-2005, 11:59 AM   #8 (permalink)
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This was a real nice poem realms and I thought that it had some type of anger but it was for a good cause and you just did a real nice job with it...
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Old 03-28-2005, 12:37 PM   #9 (permalink)
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this whole ting was awesome, i like the way u ended this was off the chain. nice drop
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Old 03-28-2005, 12:56 PM   #10 (permalink)
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Shaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaawty, hello. lol

infatuated
with everything
except who
I
am...

That was powerful.

Real real nice piece here B-marie.

but
get this
straight...

I am in love

and it ain't you
I was meant to love...
in the first place.

^loving that as well.

Holla at meeeeeeeeeeee yo. lol.
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Old 03-28-2005, 10:25 PM   #11 (permalink)
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oooo nice piece realMS, this was like a authorative piece, like you weren't gonna take anything, and the ending was just a glorious slight twist that brought love as the source which took the edge off your demands, and turned it into something else completely!

keep it up girl!
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I liked the last part of the rant.
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Old 03-29-2005, 12:16 AM   #13 (permalink)
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I'm late, lol...but I liked it to say the least. Have seen this happen to many women dealing with the wrong guy, but they learn as life progresses, just as you have I'm sure...
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'i was meant to love in the first place'
the last line struck me more than any other peice from this work


i like it, playing with your mind when they really have no clue and you don't think much of yourself while they're full of themselves and you love the concept of love


i enjoyed it, stay strong
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i'm reduced to giving you one word answers, emaculate
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Old 03-29-2005, 01:05 PM   #16 (permalink)
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dont know how I missed this piece but this was one of your best pieces by far!!!!!.....the title really captures your message in this one....such a BOLD statement and the metaphor for love was so real...I know I could relate....forget what OTHERS say you know in your heart......this was so nice......actually calling this nice is a big understatement....this was beyond nice

would make a GOOD spoken word.....perhaps you could record this one for us in a short lil audio....would be ill to hear your voice

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Old 03-29-2005, 02:23 PM   #17 (permalink)
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nice i was really digging the beginnin and then the ending made me love it even more... this was short but i am digging the style.. real nice... i am digging the whole poem real nice...

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do me a favor...

stop tryna plagiarize
around with my
mind,

stood out ...
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You must got a big booty. I use to be one of them mall stalkers by in my younger years. Nice little piece you came up with. Good to see something different being posted here in the realm.

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