FREESLAVES - Feat. Mind~$oul

UFO the Phoenix · 03-27-2005, 09:11 PM

FREESLAVES -

Easter Exclusive Collabo

UFO

Mind~$oul

Freedom is like an Easter egg held by chopsticks
Fragile mythical programmed in city projects
With fear on demand liberty begins to drop quick
My silly conscious commands my pen to stop this
But it’s a Freeland bless with free will
So my free hand free writes regardless
Even though people
All follow their own magnified garbage
Nobody is free, were slaves to the life system
Chained to a job, relationship, or even religion
Whatever helps your mental vision
All of outside is an open prison
On death row serving a life sentence
You only have four visits
And one of them is God, so pay close attention

To these mindless victims
standing on the corners
gossiping amongst the wind...
trying to ignore the
whaling sirens...
over the years it's become
permanent in their heads...
brown bags held tight
liquor in their hands...
and that's their only grip
to freedom that is...because
you'll get bashed for
your atheist religion...
or choosing the shell-toes
over those Jordan’s...
thrown to jail for whipping
your back talking children...
a week later they on cnn
for shooting up school buildings...
the devil is within...
but you best fight it
off with their Jesus...and
their holy bible
and verses
you cant hold freedom

RealMS · 03-28-2005, 12:03 AM

hmm...you two are quite clear with it, and both of you have two different points made. First of all-damn at the title-more creative than someone would think at first, me being one.

Nobody is free, were slaves to the life system
^so dang on blunt with it, but that itself said in such a poetic form, you know I'm feelin it. You pumpin my blood rate right about now lol...

the devil is within...
but you best fight it
off with their Jesus...and
their holy bible
and verses
you cant hold freedom
kinda sayin don't you dare let me see you giving up for the devil's work, but believe in what you believe most, in your heart & brain and use that as your tool. Still can't get over the title though.

-Much Love

Bhitiah · 03-28-2005, 12:49 AM

"Even though people
All follow their own magnified garbage
Nobody is free, were slaves to the life system
Chained to a job, relationship, or even religion
Whatever helps your mental vision
All of outside is an open prison
On death row serving a life sentence
You only have four visits
And one of them is God, so pay close attention" <<<For real! You tell em.

"To these mindless victims
standing on the corners
gossiping amongst the wind...
trying to ignore the
whaling sirens...
over the years it's become
permanent in their heads...
brown bags held tight
liquor in their hands...
and that's their only grip
to freedom that is...because
you'll get bashed for
your atheist religion...
or choosing the shell-toes
over those Jordan’s...
thrown to jail for whipping
your back talking children...
a week later they on cnn
for shooting up school buildings...
the devil is within...
but you best fight it
off with their Jesus...and
their holy bible
and verses
you cant hold freedom" <<<DAAAMN THO, ....I loved everything in that, every word...That's hott...DAMN, I love your writing kid. LOL

allnakey · 03-28-2005, 01:17 AM

You both came nicely, loved the theme and the way you both portriated it, very nice collabo. Loving the realism of everyline

Stay Up, Much Love, Peace

AlmostFamous · 03-28-2005, 09:05 AM

All of outside is an open prison
On death row serving a life sentence
You only have four visits
And one of them is God, so pay close attention

niceness ufo... i like how you worded this part

and

Mindsoul

over those Jordan’s...
thrown to jail for whipping
your back talking children...
a week later they on cnn
for shooting up school buildings...
the devil is within...
but you best fight it
off with their Jesus...and
their holy bible
and verses
you cant hold freedom

dope little collab here you guys took two different approaches and came together in a sense

niceness for sure

peace

Mind~$oul · 03-29-2005, 01:10 PM

Thanks for the love peoples.

Uppin one last time.

Brit Boi Gee · 03-30-2005, 08:49 PM

nice collabo, fellas!

That freedom and chop stick line was real good, I mean it conjurs up imagery of something slipping and hard to hold. It was also strong in the senes that it showed the weight of opression, the world as like something out to block you through a lot of mediums. The ending of Ufo's verse struck me as a real nice, I mean it offered something in a place, in a person, something to spot and become one with and be saved..It was kind of like the threee visits of scrooge, or something along those lines..

Mind~Soul as usual depicted the social conciousness and the moments of imagination that people can relate too. The conversation drifitng in the wind, the sirens that stick in your mind, but are so frequent that you get used to them. These descriptions I say are delicate power. They are sharp, relatable to everyone and subtle in delivery so you take it in and hardly notice until the image and feeling is upon you and already had an effect. This verse like UFo's connected with the freedom and religious connection, and I feel the stanzas blended and complimented eachother nicely.

Powerfull piece no doubt,
keep writing!

Poetickz · 03-30-2005, 09:51 PM

very nice....feelin the irony in the title

both of yall came hard as hell with this piece too.

Quote:

Nobody is free, were slaves to the life system
Chained to a job, relationship, or even religion
Whatever helps your mental vision
All of outside is an open prison
On death row serving a life sentence
You only have four visits
And one of them is God, so pay close attention

very nice very nice, was feelin all of this.

Quote:

thrown to jail for whipping
your back talking children...
a week later they on cnn
for shooting up school buildings...

wtf is that!?! sick shit there, feelin the irony of that shit...makes me feel like im imprisoned too..

very nice job yall
one

MisterEThoughts · 03-31-2005, 03:34 AM

HMm... I am digging this... SO fuckin true... I am really diggin this actually.. I want a part 2 shit...

i would quote it... but all of it was nice... I am really loving this guys... real nice job....

koban4max · 03-31-2005, 03:57 AM

hahahah the first line was funny..and tight! hahaha keep it up

lpoet · 03-31-2005, 12:24 PM

this was dope...nice job by the both of you..wish it was another line by the both of you..i think the poem cvould have went a lil deeper into the topic...you 2 both touched on it but didnt dive to deep inside..

still dopeness by the both of you

ufo..i aint forgot about that piece...it actually inspired me to write the piece i'm going to post shortly..it didnt go with yours so i kept it seperate

Upin

Lord RAH · 04-01-2005, 12:07 AM

Hey I dug this collab a lot especially the topic it was just to short for me...I thought you could have gotten deeper....You really made me want more...Big Up

03-27-2005, 09:11 PM	#1 (permalink)
UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS! Join Date: Aug 1999 Location: Oceanside CA USA Posts: 2,965	FREESLAVES - Feat. Mind~$oul FREESLAVES - Easter Exclusive Collabo UFO Mind~$oul Freedom is like an Easter egg held by chopsticks Fragile mythical programmed in city projects With fear on demand liberty begins to drop quick My silly conscious commands my pen to stop this But it’s a Freeland bless with free will So my free hand free writes regardless Even though people All follow their own magnified garbage Nobody is free, were slaves to the life system Chained to a job, relationship, or even religion Whatever helps your mental vision All of outside is an open prison On death row serving a life sentence You only have four visits And one of them is God, so pay close attention To these mindless victims standing on the corners gossiping amongst the wind... trying to ignore the whaling sirens... over the years it's become permanent in their heads... brown bags held tight liquor in their hands... and that's their only grip to freedom that is...because you'll get bashed for your atheist religion... or choosing the shell-toes over those Jordan’s... thrown to jail for whipping your back talking children... a week later they on cnn for shooting up school buildings... the devil is within... but you best fight it off with their Jesus...and their holy bible and verses you cant hold freedom __________________ *The Truth isn't out there because its already landed and the Truth is:* JESUS CHRIST Oddie Sloan

03-28-2005, 12:49 AM	#3 (permalink)
Bhitiah Powerful Scriptures Join Date: May 2004 Posts: 1,168	"Even though people All follow their own magnified garbage Nobody is free, were slaves to the life system Chained to a job, relationship, or even religion Whatever helps your mental vision All of outside is an open prison On death row serving a life sentence You only have four visits And one of them is God, so pay close attention" <<<For real! You tell em. "To these mindless victims standing on the corners gossiping amongst the wind... trying to ignore the whaling sirens... over the years it's become permanent in their heads... brown bags held tight liquor in their hands... and that's their only grip to freedom that is...because you'll get bashed for your atheist religion... or choosing the shell-toes over those Jordan’s... thrown to jail for whipping your back talking children... a week later they on cnn for shooting up school buildings... the devil is within... but you best fight it off with their Jesus...and their holy bible and verses you cant hold freedom" <<<DAAAMN THO, ....I loved everything in that, every word...That's hott...DAMN, I love your writing kid. LOL __________________ You can bomb the world to peices, but cant bomb into peace

03-28-2005, 01:17 AM	#4 (permalink)
allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself Join Date: Mar 2003 Posts: 2,860	You both came nicely, loved the theme and the way you both portriated it, very nice collabo. Loving the realism of everyline Stay Up, Much Love, Peace __________________ And I sat watching a flower As it was withering I was embarrassed by its honesty So I'd prefer to be remembered as a smiling face Not this fucking wreck That's taken its place get some balls biatch or else

03-28-2005, 09:05 AM	#5 (permalink)
AlmostFamous U got a problem? Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Sioux Falls Posts: 2,789	All of outside is an open prison On death row serving a life sentence You only have four visits And one of them is God, so pay close attention niceness ufo... i like how you worded this part and Mindsoul over those Jordan’s... thrown to jail for whipping your back talking children... a week later they on cnn for shooting up school buildings... the devil is within... but you best fight it off with their Jesus...and their holy bible and verses you cant hold freedom dope little collab here you guys took two different approaches and came together in a sense niceness for sure peace __________________ the good lord giveth and he taketh away isnt that the truth My name is Nate Short MYSPACE NAME:http://www.myspace.com/tooshortnate

03-29-2005, 01:10 PM	#6 (permalink)
Mind~$oul I'm Pretty Join Date: Apr 2001 Location: North Memphis BITCH! Posts: 17,145	Thanks for the love peoples. Uppin one last time. __________________ "Everybody wanna be a nicca, but don't nobody wanna be a nicca"-Paul Mooney "I tried to live right, but society aint made for niccas to live right"-Joe Budden

03-28-2005, 12:03 AM	#2 (permalink)
RealMS Pro 31 Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Lafayette/New Orleans, LA Posts: 4,228	hmm...you two are quite clear with it, and both of you have two different points made. First of all-damn at the title-more creative than someone would think at first, me being one. Nobody is free, were slaves to the life system ^so dang on blunt with it, but that itself said in such a poetic form, you know I'm feelin it. You pumpin my blood rate right about now lol... the devil is within... but you best fight it off with their Jesus...and their holy bible and verses you cant hold freedom kinda sayin don't you dare let me see you giving up for the devil's work, but believe in what you believe most, in your heart & brain and use that as your tool. Still can't get over the title though. -Much Love

03-30-2005, 08:49 PM	#7 (permalink)
Brit Boi Gee manifest the zen Join Date: Mar 2002 Location: Near To Athena Posts: 15,977	nice collabo, fellas! That freedom and chop stick line was real good, I mean it conjurs up imagery of something slipping and hard to hold. It was also strong in the senes that it showed the weight of opression, the world as like something out to block you through a lot of mediums. The ending of Ufo's verse struck me as a real nice, I mean it offered something in a place, in a person, something to spot and become one with and be saved..It was kind of like the threee visits of scrooge, or something along those lines.. Mind~Soul as usual depicted the social conciousness and the moments of imagination that people can relate too. The conversation drifitng in the wind, the sirens that stick in your mind, but are so frequent that you get used to them. These descriptions I say are delicate power. They are sharp, relatable to everyone and subtle in delivery so you take it in and hardly notice until the image and feeling is upon you and already had an effect. This verse like UFo's connected with the freedom and religious connection, and I feel the stanzas blended and complimented eachother nicely. Powerfull piece no doubt, keep writing! __________________ They all laughed when I said I was going to be a comedian. They aren't laughing now. -Bob Monkhouse Brit Boi has a highly calibrated wifermometer

03-31-2005, 03:34 AM	#9 (permalink)
MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Bay Area,Cali Posts: 1,962	HMm... I am digging this... SO fuckin true... I am really diggin this actually.. I want a part 2 shit... i would quote it... but all of it was nice... I am really loving this guys... real nice job.... __________________ complicated visionary....injected beauty... provided by the starry night of misery... http://www.lulu.com/browse/book_view.php?fCID=800464 My Published Book. "A Closed Window Of Truth"

03-31-2005, 03:57 AM	#10 (permalink)
koban4max Registered User Join Date: Sep 2003 Posts: 428	hahahah the first line was funny..and tight! hahaha keep it up

03-31-2005, 12:24 PM	#11 (permalink)
lpoet POET Join Date: Oct 2002 Location: Indianapolis, IN Posts: 12,672	this was dope...nice job by the both of you..wish it was another line by the both of you..i think the poem cvould have went a lil deeper into the topic...you 2 both touched on it but didnt dive to deep inside.. still dopeness by the both of you ufo..i aint forgot about that piece...it actually inspired me to write the piece i'm going to post shortly..it didnt go with yours so i kept it seperate Upin __________________ "SHE CAME BACK TO ME AND I PRAY SHE STAYS" --lpoet

04-01-2005, 12:07 AM	#12 (permalink)
Lord RAH Grandeur's illuminant Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: Detroit...Wesside Posts: 753	Hey I dug this collab a lot especially the topic it was just to short for me...I thought you could have gotten deeper....You really made me want more...Big Up __________________ Roguish motives molded Into the coldest opus

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