A Sterling Second

absolute zero · 03-27-2005, 09:02 PM

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At the right time, tonight,
I'll blow you a kiss,
And steal it from the air,
Before it reaches your lips.
Then I'll freeze it overnight,
And lock it inside a tomb of brass.
Sending it back to melt before you,
Once you've left what you could've had.

UFO the Phoenix · 03-27-2005, 09:16 PM

wooooooord up

this was slick right here

at first I was like where is the poem....then I saw it tucked down in the corner.....very creative like always.....the capture of the kiss provided some nice imagery

I love these lil short poem of yours....props

AlmostFamous · 03-28-2005, 08:50 AM

quit farting around man... where is the poem

lol

nah i seen it barely!! lol

niceness here zero

short and sweet

RealMS · 03-28-2005, 05:01 PM

"...and nobody knows it but me..." (song, still my jam) but I think that message itself goes good with this. The entire song maybe, not sure.

the kiss was meant to be blown, then you took it back, freezed it up-feelings will change, but already have they changed.

a "good deed" done w/o the other person knowing, but was this a quote good deed unquote? lol, I was just thinking...

-Much Love

All~In-A~Key · 03-29-2005, 03:02 AM

Very ncie piece. Liked the whole kiss thing, taking it back. Then at the end using it, kind of telling this other person, hey you messed up... and look what you passed up. Very nicely put

Stay Up, Much Love, Peace

MisterEThoughts · 03-30-2005, 04:15 PM

his was sick... real creative haha... i was like wtf that dot was the poem hahahaha wow i am a little on the dumb side.. haha haha j/k but this was real slick... like other people said.. nice....

03-27-2005, 09:16 PM	#2 (permalink)
UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS! Join Date: Aug 1999 Location: Oceanside CA USA Posts: 2,965	wooooooord up this was slick right here at first I was like where is the poem....then I saw it tucked down in the corner.....very creative like always.....the capture of the kiss provided some nice imagery I love these lil short poem of yours....props __________________ *The Truth isn't out there because its already landed and the Truth is:* JESUS CHRIST Oddie Sloan

03-28-2005, 08:50 AM	#3 (permalink)
AlmostFamous U got a problem? Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Sioux Falls Posts: 2,789	quit farting around man... where is the poem lol nah i seen it barely!! lol niceness here zero short and sweet __________________ the good lord giveth and he taketh away isnt that the truth My name is Nate Short MYSPACE NAME:http://www.myspace.com/tooshortnate

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MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Bay Area,Cali Posts: 1,962	his was sick... real creative haha... i was like wtf that dot was the poem hahahaha wow i am a little on the dumb side.. haha haha j/k but this was real slick... like other people said.. nice.... __________________ complicated visionary....injected beauty... provided by the starry night of misery... http://www.lulu.com/browse/book_view.php?fCID=800464 My Published Book. "A Closed Window Of Truth"

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03-28-2005, 05:01 PM	#4 (permalink)
RealMS Pro 31 Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Lafayette/New Orleans, LA Posts: 4,228	"...and nobody knows it but me..." (song, still my jam) but I think that message itself goes good with this. The entire song maybe, not sure. the kiss was meant to be blown, then you took it back, freezed it up-feelings will change, but already have they changed. a "good deed" done w/o the other person knowing, but was this a quote good deed unquote? lol, I was just thinking... -Much Love

03-29-2005, 03:02 AM	#5 (permalink)
All~In-A~Key Allnakey Join Date: Mar 2005 Posts: 18	Very ncie piece. Liked the whole kiss thing, taking it back. Then at the end using it, kind of telling this other person, hey you messed up... and look what you passed up. Very nicely put Stay Up, Much Love, Peace

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