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Old 02-02-2005, 08:59 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Breathe...
wassup all...
just a quick key,
just thinking,



all so often,i find myself just lusting to breathe..
fresh air and explore the complete options of my life,
but i also feel so trapped within the everyday ways of my deep fight,
ive been struggling with myself
deep inside
like a bipolar rollercoaster
a complete suprise
sometimes
what the other side of my nature,has got to offer for me..
a narcissistic view of this tormented world we dwell in,
each one of this dwells with their inner conflict,
with their own ways...

so many words though left unexchanged
confrontations,
with love,
it catapulted my adrenaline,
and finally exposed the breath of fresh air,
i so strongly lusted for,
but before i could even relax,
i find myself once again..
detached,
from the mystical princess known as love...

a poet with so many thoughts to express,
no doubt can become lost at times,
chasing my concrete dreams,
hoping someday to realize
my own impact on this tormented globe,
cuz the truth is..
we all need some fresh air yall,
the lingering smoke might be capturing our deep dreams,
and locking them away for an unknown extent of time...
can I finally grasp what my inner differences are surrounded on..
its time to finally live with confidence,
why is this fresh air at times so hard to find?
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Old 02-03-2005, 03:13 PM   #2 (permalink)
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really i hate to complain,
even though sometimes it might seem like i like to...
but i dont know,maybe rules are needed in here...
just sayin,
lots of people gettin slept on,
not just me,far more people than that
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Old 02-04-2005, 12:52 AM   #3 (permalink)
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22 peeps and 1 respones...this is a shame I understand why you mad man...sorry the realm is sleeping all of a sudden?....I think alot of talent is being slept on and alot of nonsense is being "upped"....its a shame but thats how it is...anyway on to your poem....this piece was that "BREATH OF FRESH AIR"!?!?!?!?!....I know exactly what you mean man....sometimes we can get so caught up into our daily lives....work/school and what not that its hard to catch that breath of fresh air.....(lol...living in Cali all I get is that breath of fresh smog)....but yo this was classic...then you brought love in the mix and really set this off....I can relate to this piece on many levels....the poet with soooo many thougts and dreams can easliy get lost in this world of darkness that really has no care for the art....every now and then we catch that breath of fresh air and it really is a life changing experience....I loved this poem....and it was just keystyle...yeah man thats tight

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Old 02-04-2005, 01:54 AM   #4 (permalink)
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yeah man........this was great. I picture you standing on the street corner, just screaming this out, or maybe whispering it....

"a poet with so many thoughts to express,
no doubt can become lost at times,"

this would sound great spoken.......

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Old 02-04-2005, 08:16 PM   #5 (permalink)
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Damn man, I feel you. The words fresh air is literally hard to find, but just thinking about it, it makes me feel ill than I already am. You know when you first find out something, you start getting that feeling that you yourself just isn't right, it makes you think things I guess until you could be reassured of it.

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what the other side of my nature,has got to offer for me..
a narcissistic view of this tormented world we dwell in,
each one of this dwells with their inner conflict,
with their own ways...
^^you say this part so good, and its a shame that its so for real out here. I'm not really replying like we should, but just know that I read this--
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Old 02-04-2005, 09:24 PM   #6 (permalink)
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Sorry I didnt reply to this sooner. But EP you had alot of emotion in this although I havent felt this way quite yet so I cant really relate. But I was feeling the emotion and the questioning.
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Old 02-04-2005, 09:56 PM   #7 (permalink)
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no doubt yall i didnt mean everyone i just see alot of people uppin their poems after someone replies sayin "thats all the feedback i get"

anyways my bad yall...for uppin my poem,my fault,last time though
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This definately was refreshing. It was a quest for an absolution. You conveyed your inner thoughts very well and the struggle came across powerfull, the two middle stanzas were my favourite. Take care man, and I hope you find that fresh air!
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Loved this piece man. It spoke to me on so many levels. One of the best at expressing yourself emotionally. First stanza started the poem off well. Keep it up


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man people complain when there is a rule, then they complain when there isn't one... lol, even with the reply rule people were getting slept on... anyways I could feel this piece... a breathe of fresh air... kind of like an optimistic thought... something there but hard to find. Nice simple piece man


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poem was cool.....really seems like a keystyle

your poems usually seem a lot more focused then this one...

this was sort of all over the place for me where as usually yous stuff is really straight forward

still nice though

i find myself once again..
detached,
from the mystical princess known as love...

...wish the poem stayed on that type of stuff the entire time

still dope though

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Old 02-10-2005, 02:31 PM   #12 (permalink)
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I felt this piece in so many ways being that me and my girl are goin through the same thing right now. We have so many things goin on with our lives that sometimes we forget about each other and shit gets thrown around and taken the wrong way. We are on a break right now and realizing these things so that we know in the future that if something like this comes up again that we can notice it and solve it in a quick and easy way. Love the work though, keep it coming!
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