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Old 02-01-2005, 05:32 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Enter Poetry Greenhouse, Lyrical Garden!!!
Don’t falter, speak out…implore pardon?
Clean doubts, because all my seeds prosper
Focused on Life, Liberty and Love is the water
The Giving tree - The Giving Author
Crafting another magnum opus (No problem?)
In order for others to gasp
My breathless - MY PRECIOUS!!!
But you can freely have
Paper tablets for the depressed love sick
Misplaced innocence mixed with polluted soil
Food for the lost souls (an angel’s task?)
Lamented fabric for the unclothe
The aroma of a stubborn rose
Isolated miracle behind humanity’s glass…
Solitary wonders that refuse to grow
Meddlesome individuals will never understand…
My melting pot of thinking thoughts
Don’t fit in your world – I’m scarlet snow?
Use my Banal Flower as an online bookmark tassel
Reaching full bloom in the moons shadow
We’re all equal in the night fighting a fool’s battle
Keep your sunlight, color spectrum, atoms aple
As I write another flawless sonata, where passions tackle!!
Leaving atheist patriots and other racist associates baffled

February 1, 2005 (Black History Month)
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Old 02-01-2005, 06:33 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Wow. Your command of words is awesome.... very , um... Sit man... It's like your speakin the righteous gospel of poetic intercourse....


Each line was profound.... But I will focus on a few....

Meddlesome individuals will never understand…
My melting pot of thinking thoughts

(Yeah that's more like it... some times it 's all gibberish, but each word/ line melting right into eachother. It's like those scattered dreams that still make sense. I may still have to think about this one.... although
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Old 02-02-2005, 03:53 AM   #3 (permalink)
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What can I say man, another flawless piece. As mentioned above by screamer, your command of the vocab and the way words are put together here gave this an almost spiritual feel. Some lines that left me pondering the world were:
"Clean doubts, because all my seeds prosper"

"Paper tablets for the depressed love sick"

"We’re all equal in the night fighting a fool’s battle"

and athiest patriots?? man this was ill.
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Old 02-02-2005, 12:53 PM   #4 (permalink)
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It's always a pleasure to read your work. My breathless--My Precious! Great line.
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Old 02-04-2005, 01:02 AM   #5 (permalink)
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thanks ya'll....experimenting with the abstract and trying to expand my vocab
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Old 02-05-2005, 05:30 PM   #6 (permalink)
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The concept was damn nice man. Kinda left me confused on some parts though. Ended the piece cleverly with that last line.

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Everyline ended with a sort of pause, it was really nice how it all flowed... the concept was dope... Ima have to work with you some time... you made this one look kind of easy... nice piece man


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i dont think i got every line but i got most of it and thats whats important..lol

had a wicked flow to it..nakey talked about the pause at the ending..i thought that was dope to..sort of like giving the reader time to digest the words...

real nice concept here

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The aroma of a stubborn rose
Isolated miracle behind humanity’s glass…
Solitary wonders that refuse to grow
Meddlesome individuals will never understand…

Beautifully written.

Your wording seems to be flawless half the time, and the other half is damn good anyways. lol. Like a few other people, i didn't get all of it, but i got the main jist. Real nice piece.

And thanks for the feed, appreciation, love and respect.

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