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Luther · 01-31-2005, 10:46 PM

Wasting an opportunity
by reciting poetry of old
Ask of me with courtesy
I'll tell you history
And no lies
I watch the skies
Waiting for that rosy fingered dawn
Casting light upon
the wine-dark waves of the pallid sea
Stock phrases borrowed from
The Odyssey
Please Mentor me
In the ways of Divinity
I've wasted yet another opportunity
To ask Melissa out
I saw her,
I spoke,
I excused myself with dignity
Working out excuses in my head
My stomach hurts
I'm tired
I don't feel the least bit charming
But there she goes,
And my written teardrops start
I tear my own heart apart
And Homer is little consolation
All I had to say was a few simply stated words
I'm typically good with words
But with her....
I feel at a loss....
Like Zeus might send a thunderbolt upon me
The second my tongue speaks, I ____ U
I want to say....
I'm wallowing....
I want to say...
Not today, but maybe tomorrow
I want to take you out...
I want, I want, I want,
It's times like these,
I hate myself again.

xGTx · 01-31-2005, 11:13 PM

Pretty nice i kinda disagree in alot of ways on how you opened ...but now that ive read it 3 times i dont know how you could have rewritten it better...show it just goes to show you may not like something at first and learn to like it if you give it time very nice piece

akqrate · 01-31-2005, 11:37 PM

I loved this piece. Man this obviously means u've been smitten its not just a dumb crush. Let your eyes do the talking bro, when words dont come out. Much respect man, a very very nice and honest piece.

Luther · 02-01-2005, 11:46 AM

I dwell on the past
that eternity of yesterday
one foot in the past
one foot in the future
I piss all over today
What do I have to say
Hello,
I think you're beautiful
And that terrifies me
It scares me to be so scared
When everything else is going well
You rattle me into hell
I picked myself up
you watched as I fell
shaking off my tail
If I asked you out
what's the worst that could happen
I know,
I could go crazy
I might lose sight
of who I am
I could be heartbroken
to discover how much this means to me
I'll never be free
without you beside me
I'll never be happy
I'll never be whole
I need you to love me
deep in my soul
But I fold
to spare me from reality
fantasy is not what I need right now
But I'm terrified of your beauty
It casts such a spell on me
I need to focus on today...

UFO the Phoenix · 02-01-2005, 05:12 PM

woooord up

awww the poet with few words when put to the test....I can relate with this...normally we all are slick with the words and using them to create magic but still fall into those human habits of being nervous when beauty is standing right in front of us....haha I know where you coming from with this...me and Tripl did a collabo called Lady Liquid which reminds me of this piece....this was more personal though....written for that special someone...maybe a secret admire?...dont keep it a secret forever ya know gotta tell her how you really feel....I know its easier said then done...lol...but seriously

tight piece hit real close to home

PEACE AND GODBLESS

Catch TWENTY 2 · 02-02-2005, 03:48 PM

Ay luther. The poem was decent. Whole pieve was relatable but this is more of a post about your sig. I'm loving that joint man.
GET LIFTED!

01-31-2005, 10:46 PM	#1 (permalink)
Luther Registered User Join Date: Jun 2004 Posts: 249	I'm back again Wasting an opportunity by reciting poetry of old Ask of me with courtesy I'll tell you history And no lies I watch the skies Waiting for that rosy fingered dawn Casting light upon the wine-dark waves of the pallid sea Stock phrases borrowed from The Odyssey Please Mentor me In the ways of Divinity I've wasted yet another opportunity To ask Melissa out I saw her, I spoke, I excused myself with dignity Working out excuses in my head My stomach hurts I'm tired I don't feel the least bit charming But there she goes, And my written teardrops start I tear my own heart apart And Homer is little consolation All I had to say was a few simply stated words I'm typically good with words But with her.... I feel at a loss.... Like Zeus might send a thunderbolt upon me The second my tongue speaks, I ____ U I want to say.... I'm wallowing.... I want to say... Not today, but maybe tomorrow I want to take you out... I want, I want, I want, It's times like these, I hate myself again. __________________ Love of mine, someday you will die But I'll be close behind I'll follow you into the dark No blinding light, or tunnels to gates of white Just our hands clasped so tight, waiting for the hint of a spark If heaven and hell decide that they both are satisfied Illuminate the no's on their vacancy signs If there's no one beside you when your soul embarks Then I'll follow you into the dark Last edited by Luther; 01-31-2005 at 10:47 PM.

01-31-2005, 11:13 PM	#2 (permalink)
xGTx The Rock Join Date: Mar 2002 Location: Rochester, NY Posts: 1,160	Pretty nice i kinda disagree in alot of ways on how you opened ...but now that ive read it 3 times i dont know how you could have rewritten it better...show it just goes to show you may not like something at first and learn to like it if you give it time very nice piece __________________ The RocK CCC Copyright ©2002 - 2004 IIxGTxIIzXFreeStyleXzIICantGetRightIIJCWIIII "Now That I Got My Money Up, I Only Date Chicks Wit Fake Tits And Tummy-Tucks,"

01-31-2005, 11:37 PM	#3 (permalink)
akqrate Ear-candy Join Date: Sep 2001 Location: These streets below the moon Posts: 401	I loved this piece. Man this obviously means u've been smitten its not just a dumb crush. Let your eyes do the talking bro, when words dont come out. Much respect man, a very very nice and honest piece. __________________ Love, a game where the devil rolls the dice Not knowing when we threw ourselves in To keep our fire ablaze... akQrate

02-01-2005, 11:46 AM	#4 (permalink)
Luther Registered User Join Date: Jun 2004 Posts: 249	I dwell on the past that eternity of yesterday one foot in the past one foot in the future I piss all over today What do I have to say Hello, I think you're beautiful And that terrifies me It scares me to be so scared When everything else is going well You rattle me into hell I picked myself up you watched as I fell shaking off my tail If I asked you out what's the worst that could happen I know, I could go crazy I might lose sight of who I am I could be heartbroken to discover how much this means to me I'll never be free without you beside me I'll never be happy I'll never be whole I need you to love me deep in my soul But I fold to spare me from reality fantasy is not what I need right now But I'm terrified of your beauty It casts such a spell on me I need to focus on today... __________________ Love of mine, someday you will die But I'll be close behind I'll follow you into the dark No blinding light, or tunnels to gates of white Just our hands clasped so tight, waiting for the hint of a spark If heaven and hell decide that they both are satisfied Illuminate the no's on their vacancy signs If there's no one beside you when your soul embarks Then I'll follow you into the dark

02-01-2005, 05:12 PM	#5 (permalink)
UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS! Join Date: Aug 1999 Location: Oceanside CA USA Posts: 2,965	woooord up awww the poet with few words when put to the test....I can relate with this...normally we all are slick with the words and using them to create magic but still fall into those human habits of being nervous when beauty is standing right in front of us....haha I know where you coming from with this...me and Tripl did a collabo called Lady Liquid which reminds me of this piece....this was more personal though....written for that special someone...maybe a secret admire?...dont keep it a secret forever ya know gotta tell her how you really feel....I know its easier said then done...lol...but seriously tight piece hit real close to home PEACE AND GODBLESS __________________ *The Truth isn't out there because its already landed and the Truth is:* JESUS CHRIST Oddie Sloan

02-02-2005, 03:48 PM	#6 (permalink)
Catch TWENTY 2 Poet Extrodinaire Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: Columbia, SC......Clinton, MD Posts: 569	Ay luther. The poem was decent. Whole pieve was relatable but this is more of a post about your sig. I'm loving that joint man. GET LIFTED! __________________ ERIC ROBERSON PRESENTS: THE VAULT - VOL 1.5

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