Why i write ( please feel free to tell us why you right to )

[Philly_215]

I write to bring light to a world in forever night
To inspire the world filled with difference
The common pleas that bridge the gap over seas
And thru fiber optic cables to your computer screen
I write for the inner child so he can talk to the older soul of the man
Or women sorry but I got luv yall

It all started with X that poem from the first album some how did something
Sparked a fire, some how gave me power, provoked my pen
Some way it unlock the poet with in
This is not about a gift or a talent of men or women sorry did it again
Not about the books or the knowledge acquired there in

Its not about the description your placed under rapper, poet, rock, or pop, R & B, to gospel
From spoken word to written history, expression is what inspires me
From murder murder kill kill to baby I love you I want you forever near
In the mind of a confused child to intellectual that has yet found the reason to believe in God

I write with my heart taught to me by friends who honestly believe and trust I will dig deep
And family that have just recently seen the inner me, I know all these year who would believe
I write cause I can, I write to find a means to me so I guess I will be writing until the end
I write not for the pay shit I do get given or offered a thing
I don't write for the lime light, a 60 watt bulb does me just right
I write for the hell of it and the heaven in it I find
I write to come up with clever lines and truth I can put on each line
I write for that smile or raise of the eye brow
Or to spark a conversation about y I thought up those ideals and lines
I write, getting this close to speaking, inches away from preaching
I write..
I'm inspired by...

[screamer]

The common pleas that bridge the gap over seas
And thru fiber optic cables to your computer screen


Awseome.... Thats what's its all about.. some real fuckin good references in here that all of us poets can relate to...

I write not for the pay shit I do get given or offered a thing
I don't write for the lime light, a 60 watt bulb does me just right
(yeah, its all about shedding insight, poetry is a rawhumanfeel and whenits within a very impersonal element (like an online website) it makes our interactions all the more real.. ) Community is gone when are asses are at home behind a computer screen. but HOWEVER....


I write for the hell of it and the heaven in it I find
I write to come up with clever lines and truth I can put on each line

and this you did my dear poet..


I write, getting this close to speaking, inches away from preaching (and theres a fine line eh?)
I write..
I'm inspired by... (nice freakin drop.. hope to read more from you)
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[Philly_215]

thanks for the reply my friend and you will hear a lot more from me. but tell me why you write ( this goes for all that read this thread ) ?

reply and drop---------- reply and drop

[UFO the Phoenix]

inches away from preching....oooh wee this took me on a ride no diggity

"I don't write for the lime light, a 60 watt bulb does me just right"

^HAHA....I love it...this piece was hot no doubt....inspired me in many ways...I just finised a abstract poem called "banal flower" which talks about why I write...crazy...my poem is more twisted and hidden but yours is str8 up...open and honest...and at many spots down right funny...lol....I love this....I guess its the foundation to all us poets....we all have our reasons why we write....and share so much in common yet being so different its amazing

great job

PEACE AND GODBLESS

[Philly_215]

thanks fam i will check out your piece ( i been slacking on a lot of people pieces lately, just tired ) but i will get back on my job lol peace yall

[ManMadeofAshes]

hmmm

-okay first off, that little night I was drunk and railing people (which I didn't realize were new to the realm) I appreciate you pointing out the fact that I was being a dush. Mainly because I am usually all about trying to be constructive. Beyond that, I read my older shit.. hahaha yeah.. and its sad.

to the poem

the hmmmmmm ..,. came to mind as I finished you last line. Its interesting in a lot of ways. Mainly because its completely open ended. .. as if you don't know what your insperation beyond a general label of "experience", however what experience can't be predicted. That is how I interpret the ending (dont know what you were going for) but it is dope. My favorite movies are the ones that ending leaving me ... not really knowing what to think or how to feel. That is what the poem did for me. (major props to that)

"I write to bring light to a world in forever night
To inspire the world filled with difference
The common pleas that bridge the gap over seas
And thru fiber optic cables to your computer screen
I write for the inner child so he can talk to the older soul of the man
Or women sorry but I got luv yall"

^aight, so this whole first stanza is fire. The last line however threw me off a bit... which made me doubt the rhythm. In other words I thought I read it wrong so it made me read it again... but it still felt out of place. I think also because I think it should say gotta or got to and it says got. I dont know how that fucks with other readers but thats just a thing that was drilled into as a child. To speak properly. (i dont know if thats a mistake "got" or if I have developed anal tendencies from youth. lol. but the stanza as a whole in nice.

"It all started with X that poem from the first album some how did something
Sparked a fire, some how gave me power, provoked my pen
Some way it unlock the poet with in
This is not about a gift or a talent of men or women sorry did it again
Not about the books or the knowledge acquired there in"

^ dope. felt like this was the stanza that was building up to something larger.... to me it had that exact effect... making me anticipate the next stanza.

"Its not about the description your placed under rapper, poet, rock, or pop, R & B, to gospel
From spoken word to written history, expression is what inspires me
From murder murder kill kill to baby I love you I want you forever near
In the mind of a confused child to intellectual that has yet found the reason to believe in God"

^ lol... now I am anticipating the next stanza. Same feeling to it. Building to a climax.

"I write cause I can, I write to find a means to me so I guess I will be writing until the end"

^well put. I can relate.

"I write for the hell of it and the heaven in it I find
I write to come up with clever lines and truth I can put on each line"

^hahah.. this is cool because I read that first line and thought you had used the heaven and hell concept in a very creative way. Then I read the last line refering to this compulsion you feel towards that very direction of clever. made me do the one breath laugh. "ha" lol

Word. aand I mentioned the ending. Dope peace. and I apoligize for my horrible lag in the reply I owed you . (and I know I still owe you one more.)

peace.

ashes

[Philly_215]

^^ owe me lol shit after a helpful review like that. Dawg just call it even, and about the that spaz out thing you did a whille back forget about it. it was just i read a lot of your comments you gave before that and it struck me as out of your charector ( not saying i know you ) but just different some how. so let it ride fam we all have or bad side.

Now on to a few things you pointed out. i left this open ended cause i come to see that i write for different reasons and they are for ever changing as i get older. so i felt it wouldn't be fair or real of me to limit that in the end of it all. i also did it that way so the readers mind would hopefully dift into why they write, causing an add on effect where they would provide there own why i write poem or piece. i was a Mod in another site and was looking for a way to generate more poetry or comments or basic involvment on the site.

"I write to bring light to a world in forever night
To inspire the world filled with difference
The common pleas that bridge the gap over seas
And thru fiber optic cables to your computer screen
I write for the inner child so he can talk to the older soul of the man
Or women sorry but I got luv yall"

i put the i got love part in there to throw off the mood, not make it so serious. because i am often told my poetry is very serious. so this was my attempt to relax a bit. um nothing more well not that i can remember. this one is about two years old.


but fam thanks for the detailed reply. Between you and UFo giving such detailed feed back and asking and pointing out things that really can help a person. i am sure i will improve. thanks fam

Ps.
can you or any one check out UFo and my battle on the PTL

Thanks

[Mind~$oul]

"In the mind of a confused child to intellectual that has yet found the reason to believe in God "

That line stood out the most to me man. Cant say anything that has already been said. But I think this piece could use a little structue help man lol. Seem like some were just running into each other. Other than that, nicely written.


One luv

[Philly_215]

thanks fam ^^

[RealMS]

Inspired by...life, my childhood (though one day I hope to have a better one lol), growing up steadfast, all the cracks and smooth layers of it-I guess trial and error first, and now-still trial and error, but in the midst of that happiness I've found in my inner self that I've spread to others-a feeling of peace. All I want is to see everybody truly happy.

Well done philly-this piece sets a difference amongst the others I have read from you. I can't quite pin point what it is, and I don't think you know what I'm talking about when I say difference lol, but it's fine. A poem like this, yeah I've done a few, but have yet to accomplish what I really want to express lol. Your poem says a lot on the contrary though-where you "originated" from as far as poetry goes.
-Much Love

[absolute zero]

Great work....figured i'd contribute.

I write for
Every emotion
Locked inside of me.
To breathe into a summer breeze.
I write to die twice each day.
My pen is my sword.
My canvas.
Dull until
I caress it.
I write
To
Die.