Really Real, Realness, holla at me tho'....

Flo Nemesis · 01-21-2005, 02:53 AM

Where you at girl... Its ya boy boy 9 milla..
So holla back girl..
This is my poem so this thread dont get erased..
Or get replaced with and empty space...
But its an empty page from an empty soul
and an empty brain
Have night mares in the day
Day dreaming at night, But many flames
But a little place
Where light is drak inside the flames
And thoughts watch there step,
When they cross my brain
Double crossing me, they plot and scheme..
About alot of things
About better days in the night, I dream
of suicidle being who look forward to tommorow..
Looking for any time that they can borrow......

UFO the Phoenix · 01-21-2005, 10:31 AM

woooord up

really real real....this was different....welcome to the board...got that ebonic style...and a rap voice inside your words....I like the whole empty theme you was using in the beginning...that could of been expanded a tad bit more....and the topic was confusing...you talking about a girl?...empty relationship?....kinda bounces around then it goes to the struggle inside your head....the thoughts crossing was tight....the suicide line made me shiver....lost to many peers to suicide its not pretty....there always be brighter tommorrows yo believe that....this piece caught my interest but didnt do much with it....I'll be looking for more your work....stick around....keep writing you have a gift that should be explored more....and keep your head up....peep other poets in the realm no short cuts around here

PEACE AND GODBLESS

Flo Nemesis · 01-21-2005, 10:52 AM

yo, you dont remembe realness or really real that use to post poetry in here... maybe nearly 2 years back?

01-21-2005, 02:53 AM	#1 (permalink)
Flo Nemesis Registered User Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Covington Ky Posts: 37	Really Real, Realness, holla at me tho'.... Where you at girl... Its ya boy boy 9 milla.. So holla back girl.. This is my poem so this thread dont get erased.. Or get replaced with and empty space... But its an empty page from an empty soul and an empty brain Have night mares in the day Day dreaming at night, But many flames But a little place Where light is drak inside the flames And thoughts watch there step, When they cross my brain Double crossing me, they plot and scheme.. About alot of things About better days in the night, I dream of suicidle being who look forward to tommorow.. Looking for any time that they can borrow......

01-21-2005, 10:31 AM	#2 (permalink)
UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS! Join Date: Aug 1999 Location: Oceanside CA USA Posts: 2,965	woooord up really real real....this was different....welcome to the board...got that ebonic style...and a rap voice inside your words....I like the whole empty theme you was using in the beginning...that could of been expanded a tad bit more....and the topic was confusing...you talking about a girl?...empty relationship?....kinda bounces around then it goes to the struggle inside your head....the thoughts crossing was tight....the suicide line made me shiver....lost to many peers to suicide its not pretty....there always be brighter tommorrows yo believe that....this piece caught my interest but didnt do much with it....I'll be looking for more your work....stick around....keep writing you have a gift that should be explored more....and keep your head up....peep other poets in the realm no short cuts around here PEACE AND GODBLESS __________________ *The Truth isn't out there because its already landed and the Truth is:* JESUS CHRIST Oddie Sloan

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01-21-2005, 10:52 AM	#3 (permalink)
Flo Nemesis Registered User Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Covington Ky Posts: 37	yo, you dont remembe realness or really real that use to post poetry in here... maybe nearly 2 years back?

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