un-titled

Philly_215 · 01-20-2005, 04:03 PM

I am refracted like light thru a prism
any one gives a glimpse but inverts it to there position
I speak but still silent, you have yet to hear my voice
never met me but you relate to me,
embrace me and rejoice
an invisible image an un-determined silhouette with privilege

my thoughts echo thru your mind,
and at times resonates thru your eyes,
I'm recited thru your voice box
quoted and analyzed,
processed and digested one stanza at a time

I am only a reflection of many wandering souls
a warm place to go when the world turns ice cold
I am only but a tool that your desires have willed to move
nothing more then a spark hoping to fuel your inspiration

not an end but a start
the answer to emptiness that looms in your heart
the focus of your lusts, an out let to your rage
I am a shoulder to cry on when in pain,
I am the rose that grew from concrete that catches the suns rays
I am a channel for your energy's I am simply put..

Poetry

Philly 05

UFO the Phoenix · 01-20-2005, 10:03 PM

wooooord up!!!

this was cool....started out slow but it build itself up and then had a very strong ending...first time I read this I thought it was dealing with love for some reason...and it just sounded sloppy and unorganized but once I got up the end I had to reread it and I enjoyed it more the second time around...the rose that grew from concrete line jumped out at me....on that 2 pac vibe.....this was cool for what it was...think somebody has already done this before and that rose line is becoming water down but other then that I really liked this...the fact that it was untitled and mis lead me is the thing that attracts me....props yo....stick around I'm feeling your style

PEACE AND GODBLESS

Philly_215 · 01-21-2005, 07:39 AM

^^ thanks for the reply yo

peace

Flo Nemesis · 01-21-2005, 03:34 PM

I am refracted like light thru a prism
any one gives a glimpse but inverts it to there position
I speak but still silent, you have yet to hear my voice
never met me but you relate to me,
embrace me and rejoice
an invisible image an un-determined silhouette with privilege

you a genius with the pen my friend.. this was impecible...

oh my god is all I can say to this piece.. this shit was brilliantly written... you a smart ~~~~~.. I hope you doin' things yo, thats word... but yeah I'mma keep checkin you out homeskillet... nice

Philly_215 · 01-21-2005, 03:47 PM

Why thank you my friend

i am humbbled by you

Madnick · 01-21-2005, 04:42 PM

You keep it up through the whole piece you were trying and trying to get there and you kept on getting better as the piece went on. Nice job I liked this.

01-20-2005, 04:03 PM	#1 (permalink)
Philly_215 The Silent Poet Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: some time here and sometimes there Posts: 426	un-titled I am refracted like light thru a prism any one gives a glimpse but inverts it to there position I speak but still silent, you have yet to hear my voice never met me but you relate to me, embrace me and rejoice an invisible image an un-determined silhouette with privilege my thoughts echo thru your mind, and at times resonates thru your eyes, I'm recited thru your voice box quoted and analyzed, processed and digested one stanza at a time I am only a reflection of many wandering souls a warm place to go when the world turns ice cold I am only but a tool that your desires have willed to move nothing more then a spark hoping to fuel your inspiration not an end but a start the answer to emptiness that looms in your heart the focus of your lusts, an out let to your rage I am a shoulder to cry on when in pain, I am the rose that grew from concrete that catches the suns rays I am a channel for your energy's I am simply put.. Poetry Philly 05 __________________ "No bodies going to love me like me so i'm a soul provider" Joe Buddens "So for all you wana be's who's attitude is shitty God don't like ugly but he aint to fond of pretty neither" Lyfe Jennings http://www.myspace.com/watcher07

01-20-2005, 10:03 PM	#2 (permalink)
UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS! Join Date: Aug 1999 Location: Oceanside CA USA Posts: 2,965	wooooord up!!! this was cool....started out slow but it build itself up and then had a very strong ending...first time I read this I thought it was dealing with love for some reason...and it just sounded sloppy and unorganized but once I got up the end I had to reread it and I enjoyed it more the second time around...the rose that grew from concrete line jumped out at me....on that 2 pac vibe.....this was cool for what it was...think somebody has already done this before and that rose line is becoming water down but other then that I really liked this...the fact that it was untitled and mis lead me is the thing that attracts me....props yo....stick around I'm feeling your style PEACE AND GODBLESS __________________ *The Truth isn't out there because its already landed and the Truth is:* JESUS CHRIST Oddie Sloan

01-21-2005, 07:39 AM	#3 (permalink)
Philly_215 The Silent Poet Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: some time here and sometimes there Posts: 426	^^ thanks for the reply yo peace __________________ "No bodies going to love me like me so i'm a soul provider" Joe Buddens "So for all you wana be's who's attitude is shitty God don't like ugly but he aint to fond of pretty neither" Lyfe Jennings http://www.myspace.com/watcher07

01-21-2005, 03:47 PM	#5 (permalink)
Philly_215 The Silent Poet Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: some time here and sometimes there Posts: 426	Why thank you my friend i am humbbled by you __________________ "No bodies going to love me like me so i'm a soul provider" Joe Buddens "So for all you wana be's who's attitude is shitty God don't like ugly but he aint to fond of pretty neither" Lyfe Jennings http://www.myspace.com/watcher07

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01-21-2005, 03:34 PM	#4 (permalink)
Flo Nemesis Registered User Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Covington Ky Posts: 37	I am refracted like light thru a prism any one gives a glimpse but inverts it to there position I speak but still silent, you have yet to hear my voice never met me but you relate to me, embrace me and rejoice an invisible image an un-determined silhouette with privilege you a genius with the pen my friend.. this was impecible... oh my god is all I can say to this piece.. this shit was brilliantly written... you a smart ~~~~~.. I hope you doin' things yo, thats word... but yeah I'mma keep checkin you out homeskillet... nice

01-21-2005, 04:42 PM	#6 (permalink)
Madnick Modern Laureate Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Oregon State Posts: 1,111	You keep it up through the whole piece you were trying and trying to get there and you kept on getting better as the piece went on. Nice job I liked this.

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