Crime-Pay

AngerManagement · 01-17-2005, 02:41 AM

its always been said that crime doesn't pay
but i see millionaire druglords in the papers everyday
crime only doesn't pay if you get caught
and you can't come out ahead if you gotten shot
the real trick is bribing tha authorities
so that no one ever follows up on leads
based on yah reported illegitimate deeds

Grupe Home · 01-17-2005, 04:36 AM

Eh yo
True enough.

Philly_215 · 01-17-2005, 07:05 AM

sounds like there should be more, is there more ?

if not this was still cool, a street-agraphy

UFO the Phoenix · 01-17-2005, 02:50 PM

woooord up

yeah this was sorta blunt and empty....being that its very simple and str8 to the point....the topic is great and the idea is worth writing about but the way you expressed yourself to it was boring...this was waaay to short to leave any impact or effect on the reader....you touched on a bit of truth here but left it at that....should of added some abstract imagery into this....break down a rhyme scheme go in more detail....take this idea and run with it....what about crime pays....why are the bad guys allowed to win...why are the rich evil and prevail?....go further with it because you might be on to something

PEACE AND GODBLESS

01-17-2005, 02:41 AM	#1 (permalink)
AngerManagement Registered User Join Date: Jan 2005 Posts: 11	Crime-Pay its always been said that crime doesn't pay but i see millionaire druglords in the papers everyday crime only doesn't pay if you get caught and you can't come out ahead if you gotten shot the real trick is bribing tha authorities so that no one ever follows up on leads based on yah reported illegitimate deeds

01-17-2005, 04:36 AM	#2 (permalink)
Grupe Home Knowledge Of Past Join Date: Oct 2003 Location: Toronto Posts: 46	Eh yo True enough. __________________ :Grupe Home:R-C

01-17-2005, 02:50 PM	#4 (permalink)
UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS! Join Date: Aug 1999 Location: Oceanside CA USA Posts: 2,965	woooord up yeah this was sorta blunt and empty....being that its very simple and str8 to the point....the topic is great and the idea is worth writing about but the way you expressed yourself to it was boring...this was waaay to short to leave any impact or effect on the reader....you touched on a bit of truth here but left it at that....should of added some abstract imagery into this....break down a rhyme scheme go in more detail....take this idea and run with it....what about crime pays....why are the bad guys allowed to win...why are the rich evil and prevail?....go further with it because you might be on to something PEACE AND GODBLESS __________________ *The Truth isn't out there because its already landed and the Truth is:* JESUS CHRIST Oddie Sloan

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01-17-2005, 07:05 AM	#3 (permalink)
Philly_215 The Silent Poet Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: some time here and sometimes there Posts: 426	sounds like there should be more, is there more ? if not this was still cool, a street-agraphy

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