A variation of necrosis...

[Thaumaturge]

My soul lost Through the wanted perception of now jagged thoughts,
Trapped and locked in a vacuous cloth with all the fabric stripped off.
No longer know my own identity, lookin back wishing to retain,
Childhood dead...memories an abstract version of abstract pain.
Septic days' appearance seperates my spirit from the empty grave that's near it,
The devil's great inference is present through my cessant meditation periods.
This depressive state is frequent, Former ecstasy no longer existant,
philosophy decyphered as bloodlust birthed the death of me in lungs that are missin.
Haunted melodies are sung by musicians in my chest, lamenting myself,
Reminded of felicity walking on earth within each sentence of hell.
Writing for the sake Ice stakes are the closest I'll be to whole,
Joy flows in a stream of coal with edges corrodin my evil throat.
Hypocritical verbalization can't be haulted, A reflection absent of flesh,
Anatomy wrecked from ashes slashin the pelt into a blackened effect.
Askin for help, Any water within me is a solid trace of desolation,
Olive shades infest my face while self-created demonic traces set abrasions.
Suffocation on glass oxide, heart cries screams to a predated grave,
As I lay amongst the weight of the pain and pray under the sky's smaze.
The sacrifice worn within me eternally, Past an aborted crest,
a palisade antecedent forever lies in my skeleton, as a form of death...


The Golden Pen--Chapter 1: The Stranded
Brush Strokes (keystyle)
"Nobody Believes Me"

[Nereus]

This was a hot piece...the elaborate imagery is very filling for the reader...the rhyming throughout was on point....sensed alot of dark blood pumping energy in the message...but thats me...

"Septic days' appearance seperates my spirit from the empty grave that's near it" ---that stood out, dope

this was cool...

1-Hundid

[BrokenSoul8604]

Three reply rule isnt in effect anymore, but you're cool for showin love anyways~~

piece was straight. I had to look up a couple words.

Line Neurus quoted stood out along with this one:
"As I lay amongst the weight of the pain and pray under the sky's smaze."

That was powerful, other than that, my dumbass couldnt understand some of the words, lol...so that might have taken away from the enjoyment of it. Usually if i try to use strong vocab, it comes off a little too forced, but you handled it well.

God Bless

[Quotive]

Hmm some Canibus shit lol..

Love the multies and vocab man, but I only understood like half of this..

"Hypocritical verbalization can't be haulted, A reflection absent of flesh,
Anatomy wrecked from ashes slashin the pelt into a blackened effect."

Dope as fuck yo. My favorite rhymes in the piece..

Ill drop man. You held it down.

[Thaumaturge]

Lol, wasn't trying to use big vocab homie but thanx for the replies

[UFO the Phoenix]

props for showing love yo...not to many cats peep 3 and more poems like that

anyway this was dope but maybe to much for me...and its too late right now for me to brake down each line in my mind

this poem took the reader on a quick pinball around word-play and scattered thoughts....nice piece just took awhile for me to get into it

Love the imagery and the freeflow to this...gotta admit this was a pretty sick poem

Stay up

Keep em coming

PEACE AND GODBLESS

[TIZM]

tightish

[akqrate]

nah man this was on some different level. everything about this piece was so perfect. some people just have a gift and obviously u r one of them. this is the first time i've peeped you but obviously wont be my last.