"Nobody Believes Me"

Nereus · 10-25-2004, 02:08 AM

"Nobody Believes Me"

why did you do it
broken bandaged beaten
how could this happen
sucked dry withered lost
confusion horribly constant
the distrust harming me
mentally tormenting
leave....just leave...
it will never subside
so lowered
soil i see
death waiting i feel
life pumping i feel
conflicted is the situation
trusted in angels
that switched shapes
started to move awkward
there pace turned to hoofs
that of evil's conductor
left with solitude's hand
in a game never ceasing
untill breathing is no option
how does this arise
from a person held so high
i want to rise inward
but can't with such a growing problem
will not submit
will die regardless it seems
female oh female
wrapped me in your blessing
just to open up and find
that all you hold is bloody murder
you came in like a dove
a suspenseful box of chocolate
honest and loyal
just to expierence
the aftermath of your exit
leaving like a furious beast
taking & erasing past..present..future
spoke and spoke
lies and lies
fuckin hate...fuckin scared
believed you i did
a greed filled mind
with homocidal contemplations
you turned to be
will never say my accusations are fact
of course psychoticness is
psychotic...so psychotic it entrusts
while you cover your loose ends
i'm waiting...hurting..suffering
just knowing
escape is not a choice
no matter which road i pave
you have blocked any form of life
i wanted to succeed
yearned to be loved
no life now
never will be a chance again
because of the never ending damage
you caused & have yet to cause
know way to stop the storm
when nobody believes me

-------NEREUS

Thaumaturge · 10-25-2004, 02:33 AM

This was str8, was feeling how it flowed along, you expressed your emotion good and kept reiterating it throughout,

-Thaum

I Own You · 10-25-2004, 06:00 AM

i know your scared of dieing but suck it up and take it like a man before i have to tear ya up on a track about how scared you are

Nereus · 10-25-2004, 06:17 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by I Own You

i know your scared of dieing but suck it up and take it like a man before i have to tear ya up on a track about how scared you are

Whoa...Check yourself playboi....Scared to die? You should be glad your head is twisted right now dogg...im takin that into consideration.....

...Death Fears Me....

Peep the poem....

If it's somethin personal you know where to hit me at & thas wassup....

1-Hundid

BrokenSoul8604 · 10-25-2004, 08:54 AM

i hope i own you isnt shaft or a shaft impersonator. Anyways.

to be completely honest, only one part really jumped out at me.

"death waiting i feel
life pumping i feel"

Those lines were very well thought of, but the rest was ok. Maybe it's because it's seven in the morning and i aint thinking straight. I'll come back and read it when i get off work.

until then~

God Bless

Nereus · 10-25-2004, 03:52 PM

/\ good look on the reply....

"i own you" is my nicca...i made the name....and i gave the info to my boi..so he could peep rapmusic.com from his crib...

thanks for checkin my piece...

stay up

1-Hundid

Mind~$oul · 10-25-2004, 07:31 PM

You already have two other poems up. I'ma have to close this one.

10-25-2004, 02:08 AM	#1 (permalink)
Nereus Your Downfall Join Date: Sep 2000 Location: CT Posts: 3,112	"Nobody Believes Me" "Nobody Believes Me" why did you do it broken bandaged beaten how could this happen sucked dry withered lost confusion horribly constant the distrust harming me mentally tormenting leave....just leave... it will never subside so lowered soil i see death waiting i feel life pumping i feel conflicted is the situation trusted in angels that switched shapes started to move awkward there pace turned to hoofs that of evil's conductor left with solitude's hand in a game never ceasing untill breathing is no option how does this arise from a person held so high i want to rise inward but can't with such a growing problem will not submit will die regardless it seems female oh female wrapped me in your blessing just to open up and find that all you hold is bloody murder you came in like a dove a suspenseful box of chocolate honest and loyal just to expierence the aftermath of your exit leaving like a furious beast taking & erasing past..present..future spoke and spoke lies and lies fuckin hate...fuckin scared believed you i did a greed filled mind with homocidal contemplations you turned to be will never say my accusations are fact of course psychoticness is psychotic...so psychotic it entrusts while you cover your loose ends i'm waiting...hurting..suffering just knowing escape is not a choice no matter which road i pave you have blocked any form of life i wanted to succeed yearned to be loved no life now never will be a chance again because of the never ending damage you caused & have yet to cause know way to stop the storm when nobody believes me -------NEREUS __________________ ...$'all Vengeance... -Fuck ass only the green moves me... -I got a clean Uzi-A pair of gloves and a mask from the scream movie... -So if your plottin on poppin off, sceem smoothly... -Or get a little red splatter on ya cream coogy... --Banks-- 1 -Hundid [list][/list] Last edited by Nereus; 10-25-2004 at 02:15 AM.

10-25-2004, 08:54 AM	#5 (permalink)
BrokenSoul8604 Apparently Emotionless Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: DMI~ Posts: 705	i hope i own you isnt shaft or a shaft impersonator. Anyways. to be completely honest, only one part really jumped out at me. "death waiting i feel life pumping i feel" Those lines were very well thought of, but the rest was ok. Maybe it's because it's seven in the morning and i aint thinking straight. I'll come back and read it when i get off work. until then~ God Bless __________________ A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness.

10-25-2004, 03:52 PM	#6 (permalink)
Nereus Your Downfall Join Date: Sep 2000 Location: CT Posts: 3,112	/\ good look on the reply.... "i own you" is my nicca...i made the name....and i gave the info to my boi..so he could peep rapmusic.com from his crib... thanks for checkin my piece... stay up 1-Hundid __________________ ...$'all Vengeance... -Fuck ass only the green moves me... -I got a clean Uzi-A pair of gloves and a mask from the scream movie... -So if your plottin on poppin off, sceem smoothly... -Or get a little red splatter on ya cream coogy... --Banks-- 1 -Hundid [list][/list]

10-25-2004, 07:31 PM	#7 (permalink)
Mind~$oul I'm Pretty Join Date: Apr 2001 Location: North Memphis BITCH! Posts: 17,145	You already have two other poems up. I'ma have to close this one. __________________ "Everybody wanna be a nicca, but don't nobody wanna be a nicca"-Paul Mooney "I tried to live right, but society aint made for niccas to live right"-Joe Budden

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10-25-2004, 02:33 AM	#2 (permalink)
Thaumaturge Registered User Join Date: Jun 2004 Posts: 354	This was str8, was feeling how it flowed along, you expressed your emotion good and kept reiterating it throughout, -Thaum

10-25-2004, 06:00 AM	#3 (permalink)
I Own You My Hatred Will Devour You Join Date: Oct 2004 Location: Hidden in Your Place Posts: 9	i know your scared of dieing but suck it up and take it like a man before i have to tear ya up on a track about how scared you are

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