Time

Killafornian · 10-25-2004, 01:35 AM

It's all just a matter of time
between the days and the nights
from a child being born
to the taking of a life
you'll see it will be
it's all just a matter of time
till what's new becomes old
what's good becomes bad
from what's bought is sold
so just close your eyes
and wait for a while
tomorrow is still one whole day
so don't despair
soon what's in your hair
will forever be brushed away
cause it's all just a matter of time
till what you've done get's erased
till love lost returns
till what you broke is replaced
you'll see it will be

BrokenSoul8604 · 10-25-2004, 09:00 AM

Nice concept, last couple lines stood out.

Before that, nothing really jumped out at me, but the piece was well written

keep it up

God Bless

Mind~$oul · 10-27-2004, 03:06 AM

Decent piece, cant really say much about it though. Think it would have been a lot more interesting if you would have made it longer.

One luv

10-25-2004, 01:35 AM	#1 (permalink)
Killafornian West Side Til I Die Join Date: Oct 2002 Location: Used to be in Sac Town, I'll probably end up in a Texas MaxSec Posts: 1,932	Time It's all just a matter of time between the days and the nights from a child being born to the taking of a life you'll see it will be it's all just a matter of time till what's new becomes old what's good becomes bad from what's bought is sold so just close your eyes and wait for a while tomorrow is still one whole day so don't despair soon what's in your hair will forever be brushed away cause it's all just a matter of time till what you've done get's erased till love lost returns till what you broke is replaced you'll see it will be __________________ Never has a man pleaded for his guilt... ...nor for his innocence... ...all he holds dear for naught... ...just to save ignorance from being brought.

10-25-2004, 09:00 AM	#2 (permalink)
BrokenSoul8604 Apparently Emotionless Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: DMI~ Posts: 705	Nice concept, last couple lines stood out. Before that, nothing really jumped out at me, but the piece was well written keep it up God Bless __________________ A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness.

10-27-2004, 03:06 AM	#3 (permalink)
Mind~$oul I'm Pretty Join Date: Apr 2001 Location: North Memphis BITCH! Posts: 17,145	Decent piece, cant really say much about it though. Think it would have been a lot more interesting if you would have made it longer. One luv __________________ "Everybody wanna be a nicca, but don't nobody wanna be a nicca"-Paul Mooney "I tried to live right, but society aint made for niccas to live right"-Joe Budden

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