Like a poem

illpoetical · 10-24-2004, 06:38 PM

it's been a minute so, i gotta get the pen wet again... holla

Like a poem

You never strive to see the poetry I see in you
You might be different than the next person
And you’re still like a poem
You might speak differently to different people
And talk in different tongues
And you’re still like a poem
Only some people see your beauty
Only some see your true meaning
And you’re still like a poem
Everyone tries to capture the real you
Everyone wants to understand you
And because they can’t, you’re still like a poem
So as I sit here trying to capture you in words
And hold you hostage in similes and metaphors
As I sit here and try to write so that there are hidden meanings
Covert agendas and messages
I can only think of you reading this and I think
No matter what people take away you never change
No matter what they say and interpret you as
You never change, you’re only you
And you’re still like a poem

InTheStars · 10-24-2004, 10:34 PM

A different viewpoint of a poem, it was a nice read. Glad you are getting the pen wet again.
Loving

h.wood · 10-24-2004, 10:41 PM

clever really . comparing intrigue with a person and with a good poem . nice piece.^

lpoet · 10-24-2004, 11:34 PM

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Originally Posted by h.wood

clever really . comparing intrigue with a person and with a good poem . nice piece.^

yeah its actually really is..i like the idea but i think u could have flipped it a lil better..think you could have went a lil more indepth with your lines..

its nice as it is though..wish my shit was this good when i'm "just trying to get the pen wet"..lol

nice to see u around

UPin

BrokenSoul8604 · 10-24-2004, 11:44 PM

this was creative....nice approach to the subject, basically what everyone else says....i do think you could have flipped it better too, but it is nice....

keep it up

God Bless

Mind~$oul · 10-25-2004, 07:52 PM

"Everyone tries to capture the real you"

^That line holds alot of truth.

This was a pretty creative piece man, nice concept you came with. But I kinda agree with lpoet, I think it would have been much better if you would have made it longer with a little more depth. I'm not knockin you though. Good to see you around.

One luv

illpoetical · 10-26-2004, 12:28 AM

thanks for the replies, people

10-24-2004, 06:38 PM	#1 (permalink)
illpoetical raising the bar everyday Join Date: Jun 2000 Location: Long Island Posts: 1,533	Like a poem it's been a minute so, i gotta get the pen wet again... holla Like a poem You never strive to see the poetry I see in you You might be different than the next person And you’re still like a poem You might speak differently to different people And talk in different tongues And you’re still like a poem Only some people see your beauty Only some see your true meaning And you’re still like a poem Everyone tries to capture the real you Everyone wants to understand you And because they can’t, you’re still like a poem So as I sit here trying to capture you in words And hold you hostage in similes and metaphors As I sit here and try to write so that there are hidden meanings Covert agendas and messages I can only think of you reading this and I think No matter what people take away you never change No matter what they say and interpret you as You never change, you’re only you And you’re still like a poem __________________ How vain it is to sit down and write when you have not stood up to live. The skill of writing is to create a context in which other people can think.

10-24-2004, 10:34 PM	#2 (permalink)
InTheStars IWLH4Y2C Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Saint Petersburg, FL Posts: 434	A different viewpoint of a poem, it was a nice read. Glad you are getting the pen wet again. Loving __________________ In the reality of many realities, how we see what we see, affects the quality of our reality- John Trudell

10-24-2004, 10:41 PM	#3 (permalink)
h.wood aka sue storm Join Date: Jul 2002 Location: you dont have the belt to enter Posts: 3,235	clever really . comparing intrigue with a person and with a good poem . nice piece.^ __________________ where did i go?

10-24-2004, 11:44 PM	#5 (permalink)
BrokenSoul8604 Apparently Emotionless Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: DMI~ Posts: 705	this was creative....nice approach to the subject, basically what everyone else says....i do think you could have flipped it better too, but it is nice.... keep it up God Bless __________________ A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness.

10-25-2004, 07:52 PM	#6 (permalink)
Mind~$oul I'm Pretty Join Date: Apr 2001 Location: North Memphis BITCH! Posts: 17,145	"Everyone tries to capture the real you" ^That line holds alot of truth. This was a pretty creative piece man, nice concept you came with. But I kinda agree with lpoet, I think it would have been much better if you would have made it longer with a little more depth. I'm not knockin you though. Good to see you around. One luv __________________ "Everybody wanna be a nicca, but don't nobody wanna be a nicca"-Paul Mooney "I tried to live right, but society aint made for niccas to live right"-Joe Budden

10-26-2004, 12:28 AM	#7 (permalink)
illpoetical raising the bar everyday Join Date: Jun 2000 Location: Long Island Posts: 1,533	thanks for the replies, people __________________ How vain it is to sit down and write when you have not stood up to live. The skill of writing is to create a context in which other people can think.

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