Stoned

[Sole Sovereign]

"Stoned"

this dream does not exist,
it's just me, skipping stones on ya stream of consciousness.
some travel just inches, some travel a distance
but never did a stone make it to the river ahead.
what are the odds? we can figure the spread.
we can all drink, the bigger the keg.
so this one stone, turned into sand when i threw it
after years, millions of grains then i blew it...away
the current kept bringin' this one stone, i threw it for days
'til it became smooth as the rays of the moon in it's usual phase.
due to malaise of the ocean, some ain't used to the waves
this stone got sea sick
cus he really got green quick.
or was he masking his jealousy of the stones that swim better?
i'll never know.
but some sink faster seekin' a treasured home.
others are hard to figure out you'd need a Rosetta Stone.
you'll find when reapin' the benefits, the seeds are better sewn.
like the words of a weathered poem, the leaves are forever blown.
some stones you can never throw while in ya glass house.
others check in at low tide, and you'd rather 'em cash out
some love slow rides, some rather the fast route
this one had no pride, even the biggest boulders have doubts
no matter the size of the stone, they all one in the same
cus no matter how long it takes they all crumble..the same

[MisterEThoughts]

WOW man this was awesome nice topic.... cool word play i am digging this topic for sure... something new and unique man this nice....

[illpoetical]

yeah this was intense and i liked the subject. you put the lines together well and showed alot of metaphors. anyway tight piece

[Quotive]

Damn this was tight..

Never really read a poem/flow about stones and actually liked it, lol.

The middle parts are ill man. Good drop.

[BrokenSoul8604]

this was incredible....considering that i had a different idea of what this poem would be about, from the title....lol....

great imagery about the stones.....lovin that

keep it up

God Bless

[lpoet]

lol@ stoned..i wasent expecting this

i guess i'm going to have to agree with the others in here and say the piece was the shit

i could never think of some shit like this

the current kept bringin' this one stone, i threw it for days
'til it became smooth as the rays of the moon in it's usual phase.

..very dope..

[Mind~$oul]

Man I came in here thinking this was gonna be about something else. Drugs more than likely. But you fooled me with this piece man. You came with some nice metaphors. Loved the way you described certain things.

one luv

[AliuqeT]

this was hott!! keep this up foreal. i did think it was about gettin high though lol, but it was good.

An obviously deceptive title made this piece even more appealing when the subject matter is of actual stones, metaphorically.


my favorite stone of this piece was this one,

so this one stone, turned into sand when i threw it
after years, millions of grains then i blew it...away
the current kept bringin' this one stone, i threw it for days
'til it became smooth as the rays of the moon in it's usual phase.
due to malaise of the ocean, some ain't used to the waves
this stone got sea sick
cus he really got green quick.
or was he masking his jealousy of the stones that swim better?
i'll never know.
but some sink faster seekin' a treasured home.

I really thought it was amazing how you turned something so simple as a stone into a world of treasures and fantasies skipping across waters, traveling over he planet. the flow made it even better and wrapped this picture perfectly. I wish you would expand a lil more on the descriptions of the stones that followed, but this was a great piece nevertheless.

INSPIRATIONAL and definately moving poetry Forward, I'm feeling it

[UFO the Phoenix]

woooooord up

this poem made me smile

LOVE the concept

this gets 11 on my originality score card

just blew it out the water with this one....you seem to know eaxactly what you wanted to say in this...the flow was on point and thats what made this interesting the rhyme flow and your word-play seemed to bounce and skip like a stone across water....very intertesting

took it to another level

this is my kind of poetry

GET AT ME ON AIM I WANNA INTERVIEW YOU!!!!!!!!!!

OddieUFO7

holla


PEACE AND GODBLESS

[Quotive]

Uppin'

[Nereus]

I was feelin this patna...word up...

this line was fire boi..."'til it became smooth as the rays of the moon in it's usual phase." ----dope...

stay up

1-Hundid

[UFO the Phoenix]

got to up this

[Twisted Pyro]

WOW....thats maaaad ill. Fa real your good at writing-i love it!I liked how you put everythin together the way you did.My fav line was...

"even the biggest boulders have doubts
no matter the size of the stone, they all one in the same
cus no matter how long it takes they all crumble..the same"

No doubt keep writing=) hope to read more of your work homay!<3

thanks for showin love and reading my lil poem.

[RealMS]

^I see we got family in the realm lol.

Anyway-the opening lines were amazing, and to me the rhyme scheme was like icing on the cake lol. I like where you were going with it, I kinda deciphered this piece into many things. It could be about a friendship for example-childhood best friends who went their own way growing up, but somehow in the strangest way, met back up with eachother later in life. Or it could've been about us as human beings in general. We all exist under the sun, we're like crayons in a box. It made me think about a message in a bottle set off into the sea, but your message came back to you.

you'll find when reapin' the benefits, the seeds are better sewn.
^That's gotta be my favorite line. Keep doin the damn thing, and drop your piece for week 3 too lol.
-Much Love