Brush Strokes (keystyle)

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Old 10-24-2004, 01:34 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Brush Strokes (keystyle)
A given title revitalized by destiny
Replication? No, dedication through specifics
Existance defined by the dedication
The dedication persists like thought
Motioning for progression though
Progress is diluted, from within said brushing
Though life seems to trickle,
down
to
destiny, it never wants to cease
Existance through color and wonder
And wandering thoughts
Touching life and death and love and none
Because life is love or none
Why did they discover guns?
To uncover hate because love escapes
Like a bird, out of sight, into mind
A colorful bird painting its own images
A wonderful creature creating its own destiny
God works in treacherous conditions
Ridiculed if one line is off
Solidifying his existance when that river flows
And that sky stays blue for an entire week
And when that sun, shines...bright
And when that tree stands taller than God himself
Perspective? Dedication...
No more wondering just wandering
Because without love there is no love
And without life there is no death
Repeating instances of manifested truth
Defeating instances of fallacy
Because
we live like the trees
Standing tall for attention, sometimes
Drawn and lonesome, sometimes
Falling, for a purpose, unknown
Until the event is through
The creative ways He expressed his vision
Persistance, dedication...

7 minutes... wow
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Old 10-24-2004, 01:50 AM   #2 (permalink)
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^WOW

man you turning heads tonight Scarifice!?!?!....this was live

I love the free flow of this in the begining and then the building up

the end was my favorite:

we live like the trees
Standing tall for attention, sometimes
Drawn and lonesome, sometimes
Falling, for a purpose, unknown
Until the event is through
The creative ways He expressed his vision
Persistance, dedication...


hot hot hot

and you just wrote that off the top???....props yo

thanks for sharing with us

dont be a stranger yo post more often when you have the time

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Old 10-24-2004, 02:07 AM   #3 (permalink)
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wow @ the multies the first three lines were fire...

God works in treacherous conditions
Ridiculed if one line is off
Solidifying his existance when that river flows
And that sky stays blue for an entire week

that was incredible....theres not much more i can say

just a great piece....

yea, i agree with ufo...stick around mayne

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Old 10-24-2004, 02:24 AM   #4 (permalink)
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Old 10-24-2004, 04:01 AM   #5 (permalink)
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7 min is wow i agree hehe but man i got to say this was pure fire man you know i haven't seen much from you but what i see here tonight i got to give you mad props this was real hot keep this up man....
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could have done without the seven minutes shit..lol

anyhow

the poem was impressive..i liked the flow to the poem..very easy and fast paced for me to read

felt like u were dropin a bit of knowledge at the begining..very nice flow

And when that tree stands taller than God himself
Perspective? Dedication...
No more wondering just wandering
Because without love there is no love
And without life there is no death
Repeating instances of manifested truth
Defeating instances of fallacy
Because
we live like the trees
Standing tall for attention, sometimes
Drawn and lonesome, sometimes
Falling, for a purpose, unknown
Until the event is through
The creative ways He expressed his vision
Persistance, dedication...

...my fav part..

Upin..hope to see more from you
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Old 10-25-2004, 01:57 AM   #7 (permalink)
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^^ lol thanks


what about the 7 minutes part? I was just suprised at myself..
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This was nice, you didn't leave anytime to bore the reader or anything, Liked how you wrote this, and the whole chronology of it was placed nicely, good piece.

Hate it when people put "keystyle" though, poetry comes from within, people dont just stop writing a poem then come back to it 2 days later in most cases, because you feel different and such. i "keystyle" all my stuff, but no need for that.

Repetition of Philosophy is normally easy to do in a short time anyways.

But like i said, i was very impressed with how well placed everything in here was.

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Really enjoyed reading this piece. I liked how you kept up the pace of the flow.

"Ridiculed if one line is off"

^Cant get no more real than that man.

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we live like the trees
Standing tall for attention, sometimes
Drawn and lonesome, sometimes
Falling, for a purpose, unknown
Until the event is through
The creative ways He expressed his vision
Persistance, dedication..."

You ended the poem strong with those lines.


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