Burning Tears

Quotive · 10-03-2004, 10:24 PM

I'm drenched, and sanitized in blood.
The angels burn to ashes whenever I fantisize your touch.
God drowns in his own words when my eyes romanticize your love.
I drew your beautiful face onto a portait of broken glass.
Puzzled together by struggle, morbid, and hopeless tasks.
Your soul, I grasp, and travel through stars.
Just you, and I chasing the demons, battling scars.
I kept my hands on your heart, but the God's oxygen ripped our atoms apart.

The darkened clouds illustrate
your little face
empty shaped
disentegrate
disipate
desiminate
pity chased
by a heartless sound, I grip your faith
but it slips away
into a different day
where the suns colors consist of gray.

These vivid paintings
are slowly disentrgrating.
Your lips are tasting
like bliss awating
for your eyelids to weigh in.

Helpless dreams corrupt
our self-esteem enough.

These are my usual thoughts,
beautiful thoughts,
my pupils were lost
when I saw your body stoned,
on a crucifixed cross.
Scarred to bone,
carved in stone
why was it Lucifer's loss?

Why can't Heaven be Hell?
Why do our elements fail?

I love the way you look at me...
you're so beautiful.

Where the fuck have the dreams gone?

Sole Sovereign · 10-03-2004, 11:01 PM

Whoa,

"Your lips are tasting
like bliss awaiting""

Damn man... shit.. i'll be thinking about those lines all night tonight. Definately loving this piece, it's like you let go of the structure to express yourself and then grabbed it back to wrap everything up. Good read man, definately good read

BrokenSoul8604 · 10-03-2004, 11:26 PM

"Your lips are tasting
like bliss awaiting""

sorry, i know it was already quoted but i feel like that line is soooo strong........definately an ill drop.....

these past few pieces from you have made you seemed like an obsessed man...you got love problems in ya life, bro......lol .....or you find someone?

Anyways

hit me up on aim....

God Bless

Quotive · 10-03-2004, 11:46 PM

Haha thanks y'all.

I found someone, I just mixed my beliefs in religion with love. I love doing creative pieces.

I don't have aim. I have MSN though... you do too?

c0nfessi0nz@webtv.net

Hit me up if you do. I'm glad y'all like my ish..

Uno..

UFO the Phoenix · 10-04-2004, 03:41 AM

very nice piece Quotive....I love your style....there seems to be many layers within this poem

diggin the word-play and imagery....interesting flow

kind of hard for me to pick a favorite part to quote because I was feeling it from start to finish

interesting questions and twist at the end too

props

PEACE AND GODBLESS

Cockmaster700 · 10-04-2004, 06:03 AM

I rap tall and make gaps in walls// with hardcore rhymes adored by minds//make food with flour and meal and the power heals// folks when they scoop it up from soup cup// look QUOTIVE your style is whack it piles and stack// words with no rhyme technique it blinds freaks on streets//

lpoet · 10-04-2004, 03:50 PM

i like this..i was a bit confused twords the end but u cleard that up with your reply in here

God drowns in his own words when my eyes romanticize your love

...nice line..makes me think a lil bit

look forward to reading more work from u...

Xero Satsujin · 10-04-2004, 08:24 PM

YO!!!

I think you robbed my brain, lol...Anyway, this was dope like the drug man...quite refreshing to be gone for a while and come back to something like this...Oh, and I LOVE that line lpoet quoted...damn man...this shit was tighter than a virgin...

allnakey · 10-05-2004, 12:24 AM

I wasn't feeling thsi as much as some of your other stuff, maybe it's just me... I liked those lines that some other people have already quoted

"Your lips are tasting
like bliss awaiting"

For me it just took a little while to pick up i mean the begining was cute and all, but it really didn't tell much untill you got into the middle of it... anyways this was a pretty solid piece some lines in there get ya thinking a bit... it was a nice piece... Just not really what Im feeling right now

Stay Up, Much Love, peace

tooshort21 · 10-05-2004, 04:16 PM

I drew your beautiful face onto a portait of broken glass

Your soul, I grasp, and travel through stars.
Just you, and I chasing the demons, battling scars

this shit was tighter than a virgin...lol @ that shit^^^from xero, welcome back you!!

dawg this shit was very, very, very tight.... damn, yo first off i love the selection of wordplay... I wish i could claim this piece!! The title was off the hook too.. Ive had burning tears b/f... they hurt like a m/f...Lol... the lines i quoted above were the ones that stood out to me the most... I can see from the first poem that Ive read from you that youve grown as a writer... this shit was hot... Ill probably end up reading it 3-4 more times!! lol

good drop homie... rep points most definetely

Cockmaster700 · 10-05-2004, 04:50 PM

your walk put the facts down cutie with booty some background so I act hound wanna attack and go down town// I dream about your body like it was cream and bacardi// bet your wet panties are silk and your candies are milk// duds come under the quilt with this thug love lets leave the club"// "wait SHAFT let me think a minute your plans have a kink in it// let me get this straight so I won't make a mistake huh? I give you cake then awake and go home? "yes" "hey that's shabby yo so hell no daddy yo SHAFT go find a chicken head and start licking her in bed"

10-03-2004, 11:01 PM	#2 (permalink)
Sole Sovereign Hungry But Never Starving Join Date: Jan 2001 Posts: 2,927	Whoa, "Your lips are tasting like bliss awaiting"" Damn man... shit.. i'll be thinking about those lines all night tonight. Definately loving this piece, it's like you let go of the structure to express yourself and then grabbed it back to wrap everything up. Good read man, definately good read __________________ ...Take a step: one step, one dive... ...Fate is death. A leap of faith over sunset's sunrise... ...Hate is everpresent, some let love die... ...even if you laced loosely, some get tongue tied... elo§overeign ˜W™

10-03-2004, 11:26 PM	#3 (permalink)
BrokenSoul8604 Apparently Emotionless Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: DMI~ Posts: 705	"Your lips are tasting like bliss awaiting"" sorry, i know it was already quoted but i feel like that line is soooo strong........definately an ill drop..... these past few pieces from you have made you seemed like an obsessed man...you got love problems in ya life, bro......lol .....or you find someone? Anyways hit me up on aim.... God Bless __________________ A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness.

10-04-2004, 03:41 AM	#5 (permalink)
UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS! Join Date: Aug 1999 Location: Oceanside CA USA Posts: 2,965	very nice piece Quotive....I love your style....there seems to be many layers within this poem diggin the word-play and imagery....interesting flow kind of hard for me to pick a favorite part to quote because I was feeling it from start to finish interesting questions and twist at the end too props PEACE AND GODBLESS __________________ *The Truth isn't out there because its already landed and the Truth is:* JESUS CHRIST Oddie Sloan

10-04-2004, 03:50 PM	#7 (permalink)
lpoet POET Join Date: Oct 2002 Location: Indianapolis, IN Posts: 12,672	i like this..i was a bit confused twords the end but u cleard that up with your reply in here God drowns in his own words when my eyes romanticize your love ...nice line..makes me think a lil bit look forward to reading more work from u... __________________ "SHE CAME BACK TO ME AND I PRAY SHE STAYS" --lpoet

10-04-2004, 08:24 PM	#8 (permalink)
Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes Join Date: Jul 2003 Location: Sinking into the paper, like I was ink Posts: 2,197	YO!!! I think you robbed my brain, lol...Anyway, this was dope like the drug man...quite refreshing to be gone for a while and come back to something like this...Oh, and I LOVE that line lpoet quoted...damn man...this shit was tighter than a virgin... __________________ !.¸(`!.¸Xero Satsujin¸.!`)¸.! "Laissez les bon temps rouler" "Time to a writer is like play dough in the hands of a toddler..."

10-04-2004, 06:03 AM	#6 (permalink)
Cockmaster700 Registered User Join Date: Feb 2004 Posts: 2,048	I rap tall and make gaps in walls// with hardcore rhymes adored by minds//make food with flour and meal and the power heals// folks when they scoop it up from soup cup// look QUOTIVE your style is whack it piles and stack// words with no rhyme technique it blinds freaks on streets//

10-05-2004, 12:24 AM	#9 (permalink)
allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself Join Date: Mar 2003 Posts: 2,860	I wasn't feeling thsi as much as some of your other stuff, maybe it's just me... I liked those lines that some other people have already quoted "Your lips are tasting like bliss awaiting" For me it just took a little while to pick up i mean the begining was cute and all, but it really didn't tell much untill you got into the middle of it... anyways this was a pretty solid piece some lines in there get ya thinking a bit... it was a nice piece... Just not really what Im feeling right now Stay Up, Much Love, peace __________________ And I sat watching a flower As it was withering I was embarrassed by its honesty So I'd prefer to be remembered as a smiling face Not this fucking wreck That's taken its place get some balls biatch or else

10-05-2004, 04:16 PM	#10 (permalink)
tooshort21 Banned Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: SIOUX Posts: 1,281	I drew your beautiful face onto a portait of broken glass Your soul, I grasp, and travel through stars. Just you, and I chasing the demons, battling scars this shit was tighter than a virgin...lol @ that shit^^^from xero, welcome back you!! dawg this shit was very, very, very tight.... damn, yo first off i love the selection of wordplay... I wish i could claim this piece!! The title was off the hook too.. Ive had burning tears b/f... they hurt like a m/f...Lol... the lines i quoted above were the ones that stood out to me the most... I can see from the first poem that Ive read from you that youve grown as a writer... this shit was hot... Ill probably end up reading it 3-4 more times!! lol good drop homie... rep points most definetely __________________ will write poetry for food.

10-05-2004, 04:50 PM	#11 (permalink)
Cockmaster700 Registered User Join Date: Feb 2004 Posts: 2,048	your walk put the facts down cutie with booty some background so I act hound wanna attack and go down town// I dream about your body like it was cream and bacardi// bet your wet panties are silk and your candies are milk// duds come under the quilt with this thug love lets leave the club"// "wait SHAFT let me think a minute your plans have a kink in it// let me get this straight so I won't make a mistake huh? I give you cake then awake and go home? "yes" "hey that's shabby yo so hell no daddy yo SHAFT go find a chicken head and start licking her in bed"

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