A coverage of love

DaJackle · 10-03-2004, 03:39 PM

drunk is a five letter word that would never come out of your mouth
nor does alcohol can ever instill cold droplets to drown your tounge
but even I, one who said would never gamble
rode the plane's lungs to vegas
and traded in hard worked papers for plastic chips
but even then
portraits of you became the hotel's tiled floors
i never let temptations kiss me good night
but instead let loneliness's empty hands embrace me
I came home early without letting demented thoughts depress me
used luck's money to buy you a diamond ring
that cuts the sun's glare with dimentional arrays
i rehearsed our marriage with my brain cells
on soft sandy floor with the ocean breeze
whispering gentle tones in our ears
instead, you let lust tangled you with her web
seduced you to join her addiction
induced enjoyments upon your bare body
Tina twisted your body in ways that it soiled you
the person i could trust with dreams
opened a stream and rode you
animosity tainted the atmosphere in my eyes
as though pierced with rusted nails
my pores are unable to breathe
my lungs are caved in with the images i see
the inscents provoked you
her scents cheated me before i could ask you for marriage
this ring melted in my pocket and became useless
drunk was the five letter word you could never say
but instead you cheated and sprayed it back on my face
a sin that strayed the blue moon to black coal
it's too soon i feel like i'm in a black hole with a blind fold
but i can smell suicide fresh like morning coffee brew
a black rose window view with noosed petals
i lost you, so i lost life all together
i was hoping for a marriage
but instead
i can atleast give you
a front news
coverage

___________________________________ ___

my piece for the Poet Tree, but apparently it's dying...:-\

BrokenSoul8604 · 10-03-2004, 06:23 PM

yea...i posted a reply on that one, but just to make sure you knew...i thought this piece was dope....and reminded me of undying love by nas....

Stay up, kid...

God Bless

Sole Sovereign · 10-03-2004, 06:49 PM

Damn, damn damn... lol... you can't be dropping pieces on the same day as me. Just kidding. Man here when you wrote it, I could just see the ring turn into a puddle of metal and diamond in your pocket... and the line about smelling suicide like morning brew, holy shit.. I was definately feeling this piece yo. One question, is this your woman cheating on you with another woman? Just wanted to make sure I didn't get things confused.

DaJackle · 10-03-2004, 06:51 PM

yuppers...sad isn't it lol your girl turn gay on you... T_T

Sole Sovereign · 10-03-2004, 06:59 PM

Word, lol.. but you can't blame yourself man. They all have it in them, it just takes the right woman to bring it out in them. Atleast that's my theory, I mean two women being together is beautiful from almost everybody's perspective. So it only seems natural that it happens thaat way, hell to a sick fucker like me... your heart being ripped out in the process is kind of beautiful as well. Anyways duke, keep dropping.. I still don't have a partner for the collabo tourney... if you're interested.. i'd be more than honored to drop along side with ya. Maybe we could even do a practice drop before if you're up to it... Since I break the number one rule of authorship and write way more than I read.

DaJackle · 10-03-2004, 07:07 PM

i told nakey i'll do it with him...but if he's busy to do the tourney...sure...but i can't really promise ya :-\ i have to found to find out if he's still planning to do it...i'll let you know ..aight..i'll holla back and you...but we can still do a collab =) IM me at Ryoga360 , and the poem up there is totally fiction =) but lol i'd really don't know what to do if that were to happen to me

Cockmaster700 · 10-03-2004, 10:10 PM

Look I Got a plot bright and bazaar
Switch on and off like spotlights on a car
See major behavior and Flow flavor so recognize
Best you all do me a favor oblige and correct your eyes
Liking acts that be striking facts like Encyclopedias

BrokenSoul8604 · 10-03-2004, 11:40 PM

^^^boy, you might be legally retarted.

Quotive · 10-03-2004, 11:54 PM

lmfao word.. this nicca is fucking stupid.. I wish the mods would tell Jeff to ban this homo..

Its becoming way out of hand.

Quotive · 10-03-2004, 11:57 PM

and btw.. dope ass piece..

UFO the Phoenix · 10-04-2004, 02:40 AM

very nice poem man....I'm starting to wonder what you got under your sleeve your work is being way overlooked

this piece had so much in it...I was feeling it

you have your own style I cant yet place a finger on yet...but I like it

this part stood out to me:

"this ring melted in my pocket and became useless
drunk was the five letter word you could never say
but instead you cheated and sprayed it back on my face"

then the end was cool too....

interesting poem...very deep lots of raw emotions...cant say I can relate but I understand where you coming from with this one

keep blessing us with your gems

thanks

PEACE AND GODBLESS

10-03-2004, 03:39 PM	#1 (permalink)
DaJackle ThoughtS ProcessinG Join Date: Sep 2003 Location: Pittsburgh Posts: 493	A coverage of love drunk is a five letter word that would never come out of your mouth nor does alcohol can ever instill cold droplets to drown your tounge but even I, one who said would never gamble rode the plane's lungs to vegas and traded in hard worked papers for plastic chips but even then portraits of you became the hotel's tiled floors i never let temptations kiss me good night but instead let loneliness's empty hands embrace me I came home early without letting demented thoughts depress me used luck's money to buy you a diamond ring that cuts the sun's glare with dimentional arrays i rehearsed our marriage with my brain cells on soft sandy floor with the ocean breeze whispering gentle tones in our ears instead, you let lust tangled you with her web seduced you to join her addiction induced enjoyments upon your bare body Tina twisted your body in ways that it soiled you the person i could trust with dreams opened a stream and rode you animosity tainted the atmosphere in my eyes as though pierced with rusted nails my pores are unable to breathe my lungs are caved in with the images i see the inscents provoked you her scents cheated me before i could ask you for marriage this ring melted in my pocket and became useless drunk was the five letter word you could never say but instead you cheated and sprayed it back on my face a sin that strayed the blue moon to black coal it's too soon i feel like i'm in a black hole with a blind fold but i can smell suicide fresh like morning coffee brew a black rose window view with noosed petals i lost you, so i lost life all together i was hoping for a marriage but instead i can atleast give you a front news coverage ___________________________________ ___ my piece for the Poet Tree, but apparently it's dying...:-\ __________________ You can only do so much in life, at some point you just have to let go and let God decide...what is the meaning of life? it's very simple...to simply live

10-03-2004, 06:23 PM	#2 (permalink)
BrokenSoul8604 Apparently Emotionless Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: DMI~ Posts: 705	yea...i posted a reply on that one, but just to make sure you knew...i thought this piece was dope....and reminded me of undying love by nas.... Stay up, kid... God Bless __________________ A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness.

10-03-2004, 06:49 PM	#3 (permalink)
Sole Sovereign Hungry But Never Starving Join Date: Jan 2001 Posts: 2,927	Damn, damn damn... lol... you can't be dropping pieces on the same day as me. Just kidding. Man here when you wrote it, I could just see the ring turn into a puddle of metal and diamond in your pocket... and the line about smelling suicide like morning brew, holy shit.. I was definately feeling this piece yo. One question, is this your woman cheating on you with another woman? Just wanted to make sure I didn't get things confused. __________________ ...Take a step: one step, one dive... ...Fate is death. A leap of faith over sunset's sunrise... ...Hate is everpresent, some let love die... ...even if you laced loosely, some get tongue tied... elo§overeign ˜W™

10-03-2004, 06:51 PM	#4 (permalink)
DaJackle ThoughtS ProcessinG Join Date: Sep 2003 Location: Pittsburgh Posts: 493	yuppers...sad isn't it lol your girl turn gay on you... T_T __________________ You can only do so much in life, at some point you just have to let go and let God decide...what is the meaning of life? it's very simple...to simply live

10-03-2004, 06:59 PM	#5 (permalink)
Sole Sovereign Hungry But Never Starving Join Date: Jan 2001 Posts: 2,927	Word, lol.. but you can't blame yourself man. They all have it in them, it just takes the right woman to bring it out in them. Atleast that's my theory, I mean two women being together is beautiful from almost everybody's perspective. So it only seems natural that it happens thaat way, hell to a sick fucker like me... your heart being ripped out in the process is kind of beautiful as well. Anyways duke, keep dropping.. I still don't have a partner for the collabo tourney... if you're interested.. i'd be more than honored to drop along side with ya. Maybe we could even do a practice drop before if you're up to it... Since I break the number one rule of authorship and write way more than I read. __________________ ...Take a step: one step, one dive... ...Fate is death. A leap of faith over sunset's sunrise... ...Hate is everpresent, some let love die... ...even if you laced loosely, some get tongue tied... elo§overeign ˜W™

10-03-2004, 07:07 PM	#6 (permalink)
DaJackle ThoughtS ProcessinG Join Date: Sep 2003 Location: Pittsburgh Posts: 493	i told nakey i'll do it with him...but if he's busy to do the tourney...sure...but i can't really promise ya :-\ i have to found to find out if he's still planning to do it...i'll let you know ..aight..i'll holla back and you...but we can still do a collab =) IM me at Ryoga360 , and the poem up there is totally fiction =) but lol i'd really don't know what to do if that were to happen to me __________________ You can only do so much in life, at some point you just have to let go and let God decide...what is the meaning of life? it's very simple...to simply live

10-03-2004, 10:10 PM	#7 (permalink)
Cockmaster700 Registered User Join Date: Feb 2004 Posts: 2,048	Look I Got a plot bright and bazaar Switch on and off like spotlights on a car See major behavior and Flow flavor so recognize Best you all do me a favor oblige and correct your eyes Liking acts that be striking facts like Encyclopedias

10-03-2004, 11:40 PM	#8 (permalink)
BrokenSoul8604 Apparently Emotionless Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: DMI~ Posts: 705	^^^boy, you might be legally retarted. __________________ A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness.

10-04-2004, 02:40 AM	#11 (permalink)
UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS! Join Date: Aug 1999 Location: Oceanside CA USA Posts: 2,965	very nice poem man....I'm starting to wonder what you got under your sleeve your work is being way overlooked this piece had so much in it...I was feeling it you have your own style I cant yet place a finger on yet...but I like it this part stood out to me: "this ring melted in my pocket and became useless drunk was the five letter word you could never say but instead you cheated and sprayed it back on my face" then the end was cool too.... interesting poem...very deep lots of raw emotions...cant say I can relate but I understand where you coming from with this one keep blessing us with your gems thanks PEACE AND GODBLESS __________________ *The Truth isn't out there because its already landed and the Truth is:* JESUS CHRIST Oddie Sloan

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