Devastating Better Than Satan

[ChyllTyrant]

Devastating Better Than Satan


the marked body of time represents the changes undone in a lifetime doubly as the potential release of
extraneous energy
otherwise
externally engaged in extremities of endangerment
execution of electrons’ legibility
elected to become
legends elite in elevation
exits literally endless

scarface

the woman with the tattooed hands

mutant

me

equal equestrians whose equities were equivalent to economic downfall

punching bones swiftly
crushing arms of ghosts
but my home’s filthy
so homie pass the roach

lost

i hear the call of the wild
outside my basement window

when time takes a turn too soon

i am dead

[Quotive]

I like this piece.. I don't really understand it though..

I like the alliteration of "E" in the first stanza, tounge twisting.. dope.

"equal equestrians whose equities where equivalent to economic downfall"

Thats ill man, it'd be cool as a spoken word piece. I don't understand this, but whatever it means, its cool.

[ChyllTyrant]

thanks, i edited the first stanza, hopefully it will make it more clear...

[Quotive]

Still a bit hazy, but its like all of your work.

Show me some love too, homie!

[BrokenSoul8604]

i agree with quo on the alliteration....except it seems like you just used every e word you could find...lol...but its all good, i re read it and it makes as much sense as it can....anyways

Stay up...good drop

God Bless

[Sole Sovereign]

I don't know, there's a point where being abstract loses its point. I'd be interested in seeing how you break this down to something somebody can relate to. Maybe i'm just too ignorant to grasp it, but I don't think that it reallly means anything, just a collage of expressive wording with no real aim.

[Xero Satsujin]

Originally Posted by ChyllTyrant

equal equestrians whose equities were equivalent to economic downfall

punching bones swiftly
crushing arms of ghosts
but my home’s filthy
so homie pass the roach

lost

i hear the call of the wild
outside my basement window

when time takes a turn too soon

i am dead

From that point, the poem became absolutely brilliant. Not only was it vividly worded, but it had finess as well...I always like coming back here, even after I've been gone for a while, just to read what you've been up to, and some of the things you've done.