-Your Life is Not in Mine-

RealMS · 10-03-2004, 12:56 PM

Some of you may think this is cold, but I can't keep believing that one day things will be perfect, because it never was, but there was a time when I thought things were all good, but I was just a child and I didn't understand things. It was never good from the start, and so of course the child will be in the midst of it. There's more to it, but I'm kinda tired of it.

If I could describe my encounter with you,
I'd say I was two steps from feeling
The wrath of a loaded weapon.
Semiautomatic, all it needed was guts to fire,
And you always did but just this once was I pulled
Out of attack in time,
Into hands of one I needed.

Fed up with the repetitions, yeah I got a say in this,
This extra baggage was never required
For me to be the reason of your problems within problems,
I hear you all the time but I choose to listen no more.

Today I got tired of holding in words,
So I tried my best to bite the tongue
I failed at that, so I spoke to the sky
Pain restrained in the dead center of my chest,
I heard his footsteps and didn't care to force the clouds to pour,
Well, rather drizzle,
I wanted it destroyed.

The relationship died, no mother-I didn't decide,
What can you say to one who is never satisfied with life?
I was in distance of the sun and I found my warmth where it was real,
I'm left with a feeling of guilty sin because I think I disobeyed what I can only think does not love me.

Is everything truly my fault?
And if not why do these eyes constantly
Feel like glass designed specially to break?
The more you shout I realize, we don't know each other

The crazy thing is I'll always believe it's never too late.
No...I should let go of that dream,
But since its in my prayer I won't waste the time.
Either way the minutes are running weak and empty,
And it takes two so who am I kidding
You never came through,
What makes myself think all of a sudden you'll be
Willing to show up, for me?

It was I who used to be fully convinced,
I needed to be consulted by a "higher mind"
But you see I have that in my life,
And you could not handle my humanly flow,
You lost thought the past would come
Up from your behind.
You make it,
You take it.

Quotive · 10-03-2004, 01:03 PM

Deep ass piece girl.. dang..

"Is everything truly my fault?"

I often ask myself this question, when everything fucks up. Ya know..

"Feel like glass designed specially to break"

That line is crazy. Put on this earth just to be hurt. Shyt makes you feel worthless, but you've got to keep your head up.

Its not as strong as some of your most previous pieces, seems like a vent. Keystyle maybe? But nonetheless, it was cool. You have a way with words.. beautiful, even when you're expressing pain.

Keep writin', and don't let nothing stop you.

DaJackle · 10-03-2004, 01:40 PM

indeed...wow...this was amzing...i can really relate with this...especially this stanza

Is everything truly my fault?
And if not why do these eyes constantly
Feel like glass designed specially to break?
The more you shout I realize, we don't know each other

// because of my mom always screaming, i created and inept reaction to reponse in the same dynamic of voice...even when i don' t want too...but it happens subconciously that i feel bad when i think about it...some bad traits of mine really annoys me and i wish i can just brush it off...deep piece...i'm loving that a lot...on luv...peace

BrokenSoul8604 · 10-03-2004, 06:18 PM

"Today I got tired of holding in words,
So I tried my best to bite the tongue
I failed at that, so I spoke to the sky
Pain restrained in the dead center of my chest,
I heard his footsteps and didn't care to force the clouds to pour,
Well, rather drizzle,
I wanted it destroyed."

that part was nice..... well, rather drizzle...lol...diggin it

and the glass made specially to break was sick too.....i can relate...

Good piece....stay up

God Bless

Sole Sovereign · 10-03-2004, 06:55 PM

Yo, I'm digging this one a grave i've read it over and over. I really can't quote anything, because the line that's STILL ringing in my head is the line about broken glass. It would be repetitious to quote it, so I'll just end this with a..."I can feel your pain" but then again, who couldn't feel your pain with a piece so precisely expressed like this.

illpoetical · 10-03-2004, 09:27 PM

Tight piece b, as usual get at me for the collab and stop hating on the kid. One luv

UFO the Phoenix · 10-04-2004, 02:56 AM

word this was nice....but for me I had a hard time getting into it compare with some of your other pieces...I dunno why?...

lots of good parts stood out...and it was a very personal powerful poem

but it lacked structure and flow to me...I dunno how to explain it...

but you got your point across and laid out your message in your own style so thats cool

my favorite part was:

"Is everything truly my fault?
And if not why do these eyes constantly
Feel like glass designed specially to break?
The more you shout I realize, we don't know each other"

good stuff

keep writing

PEACE AND GODBLESS

Mind~$oul · 10-04-2004, 05:06 PM

I had my issues with my mother. Let me say it wasnt a healthy relationship that we had. I only used to pain to make me stronger on the inside. It was a hard thing to do, but I believe anybody can do it. If you can put it on paper, then that's all you need. Keep ur head up

one luv

tooshort21 · 10-05-2004, 04:05 PM

Today I got tired of holding in words,
So I tried my best to bite the tongue
I failed at that, so I spoke to the sky
Pain restrained in the dead center of my chest,
I heard his footsteps and didn't care to force the clouds to pour,
Well, rather drizzle,
I wanted it destroyed.

Favorite part right here^^ damn,..... damn.... very deep like quotive said.... Ive done this a few too many times... tired of holding in words and resorting to the sky... good drop and much love peace out girl keep ya head up

10-03-2004, 12:56 PM	#1 (permalink)
RealMS Pro 31 Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Lafayette/New Orleans, LA Posts: 4,230	-Your Life is Not in Mine- Some of you may think this is cold, but I can't keep believing that one day things will be perfect, because it never was, but there was a time when I thought things were all good, but I was just a child and I didn't understand things. It was never good from the start, and so of course the child will be in the midst of it. There's more to it, but I'm kinda tired of it. If I could describe my encounter with you, I'd say I was two steps from feeling The wrath of a loaded weapon. Semiautomatic, all it needed was guts to fire, And you always did but just this once was I pulled Out of attack in time, Into hands of one I needed. Fed up with the repetitions, yeah I got a say in this, This extra baggage was never required For me to be the reason of your problems within problems, I hear you all the time but I choose to listen no more. Today I got tired of holding in words, So I tried my best to bite the tongue I failed at that, so I spoke to the sky Pain restrained in the dead center of my chest, I heard his footsteps and didn't care to force the clouds to pour, Well, rather drizzle, I wanted it destroyed. The relationship died, no mother-I didn't decide, What can you say to one who is never satisfied with life? I was in distance of the sun and I found my warmth where it was real, I'm left with a feeling of guilty sin because I think I disobeyed what I can only think does not love me. Is everything truly my fault? And if not why do these eyes constantly Feel like glass designed specially to break? The more you shout I realize, we don't know each other The crazy thing is I'll always believe it's never too late. No...I should let go of that dream, But since its in my prayer I won't waste the time. Either way the minutes are running weak and empty, And it takes two so who am I kidding You never came through, What makes myself think all of a sudden you'll be Willing to show up, for me? It was I who used to be fully convinced, I needed to be consulted by a "higher mind" But you see I have that in my life, And you could not handle my humanly flow, You lost thought the past would come Up from your behind. You make it, You take it.

10-03-2004, 01:40 PM	#3 (permalink)
DaJackle ThoughtS ProcessinG Join Date: Sep 2003 Location: Pittsburgh Posts: 493	indeed...wow...this was amzing...i can really relate with this...especially this stanza Is everything truly my fault? And if not why do these eyes constantly Feel like glass designed specially to break? The more you shout I realize, we don't know each other // because of my mom always screaming, i created and inept reaction to reponse in the same dynamic of voice...even when i don' t want too...but it happens subconciously that i feel bad when i think about it...some bad traits of mine really annoys me and i wish i can just brush it off...deep piece...i'm loving that a lot...on luv...peace __________________ You can only do so much in life, at some point you just have to let go and let God decide...what is the meaning of life? it's very simple...to simply live

10-03-2004, 06:18 PM	#4 (permalink)
BrokenSoul8604 Apparently Emotionless Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: DMI~ Posts: 705	"Today I got tired of holding in words, So I tried my best to bite the tongue I failed at that, so I spoke to the sky Pain restrained in the dead center of my chest, I heard his footsteps and didn't care to force the clouds to pour, Well, rather drizzle, I wanted it destroyed." that part was nice..... well, rather drizzle...lol...diggin it and the glass made specially to break was sick too.....i can relate... Good piece....stay up God Bless __________________ A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness.

10-03-2004, 06:55 PM	#5 (permalink)
Sole Sovereign Hungry But Never Starving Join Date: Jan 2001 Posts: 2,927	Yo, I'm digging this one a grave i've read it over and over. I really can't quote anything, because the line that's STILL ringing in my head is the line about broken glass. It would be repetitious to quote it, so I'll just end this with a..."I can feel your pain" but then again, who couldn't feel your pain with a piece so precisely expressed like this. __________________ ...Take a step: one step, one dive... ...Fate is death. A leap of faith over sunset's sunrise... ...Hate is everpresent, some let love die... ...even if you laced loosely, some get tongue tied... elo§overeign ˜W™

10-03-2004, 09:27 PM	#6 (permalink)
illpoetical raising the bar everyday Join Date: Jun 2000 Location: Long Island Posts: 1,533	Tight piece b, as usual get at me for the collab and stop hating on the kid. One luv __________________ How vain it is to sit down and write when you have not stood up to live. The skill of writing is to create a context in which other people can think.

10-04-2004, 02:56 AM	#7 (permalink)
UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS! Join Date: Aug 1999 Location: Oceanside CA USA Posts: 2,965	word this was nice....but for me I had a hard time getting into it compare with some of your other pieces...I dunno why?... lots of good parts stood out...and it was a very personal powerful poem but it lacked structure and flow to me...I dunno how to explain it... but you got your point across and laid out your message in your own style so thats cool my favorite part was: "Is everything truly my fault? And if not why do these eyes constantly Feel like glass designed specially to break? The more you shout I realize, we don't know each other" good stuff keep writing PEACE AND GODBLESS __________________ *The Truth isn't out there because its already landed and the Truth is:* JESUS CHRIST Oddie Sloan

10-04-2004, 05:06 PM	#8 (permalink)
Mind~$oul I'm Pretty Join Date: Apr 2001 Location: North Memphis BITCH! Posts: 17,145	I had my issues with my mother. Let me say it wasnt a healthy relationship that we had. I only used to pain to make me stronger on the inside. It was a hard thing to do, but I believe anybody can do it. If you can put it on paper, then that's all you need. Keep ur head up one luv __________________ "Everybody wanna be a nicca, but don't nobody wanna be a nicca"-Paul Mooney "I tried to live right, but society aint made for niccas to live right"-Joe Budden

10-05-2004, 04:05 PM	#9 (permalink)
tooshort21 Banned Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: SIOUX Posts: 1,281	Today I got tired of holding in words, So I tried my best to bite the tongue I failed at that, so I spoke to the sky Pain restrained in the dead center of my chest, I heard his footsteps and didn't care to force the clouds to pour, Well, rather drizzle, I wanted it destroyed. Favorite part right here^^ damn,..... damn.... very deep like quotive said.... Ive done this a few too many times... tired of holding in words and resorting to the sky... good drop and much love peace out girl keep ya head up __________________ will write poetry for food.

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