Circus Circus

[UFO the Phoenix]

Circus Circus

The circus is coming to town
I decided to check it out taking my notebook
Now I’m surrounded by clowns
With no make up or jokes giving me cold looks

These fast talking Carney people
Help run the park with their bag of tricks
Soon to vacuum out my pockets
And empty out my wallet rather quick

My parents paid my admission
So I’m really just visiting
Wide-eyed to all the attractions
Yet my spirit is lacking true vision

You see the night is young
And I’m here to have fun
Cause where I’m from we all want to ride
THE ROLLERCOSTER CALLED LOVE

With all its ups and downs – twist and turns
And maybe loop around
In the end you found the final drop
You saw it coming heard the couples scream and shout

Fear and excitement mix with dreams of doubt
All the butterfly’s came out of your mouth
Along with your true self – speaking hurtful words
Left dizzy and nauseous with shaky health no hiding your vomit

Yet you gather your belongings
And get back in line to ride it again
Love is an ongoing problem we all are solving
Divided by sin

I tried to pretend I conquered my flesh
Doing my best to stay true to scriptures
But a cartoonist saw threw this when he drew my picture
He said it revealed my inner self
With a big head and small body
I guess a poet’s ego is spiritual health

I decided to open a booth of my own
And charge all the guest for a personal poem
Just take a seat over there in that chair
And tell me all your dirty little secrets
And I will craft the words from thin air
That shall reveal your inner soul much clearer
Then those early years of playing truth and dare

Journey threw the house of mirrors
See different perspectives of your reflection
More correct then psychics or palm readers
With their fake wigs, accents, and plastic taboo cards
Burning incense claiming to see your future existence in a crystal ball

Life is like a Circus ya’ll - come join the freak show
Hide yourself and pose behind cardboard misshaped models
Or play toss a quarter into the empty bottle
Unplug the fairest wheel and leave my love and me in the moons shadow

If you’re single there’s a porn vendor for every male
The gender with painted nails
Who whisper in parallel – “come see the strippers on carousels”
It’s just a temporary merry-go-round of lust
No realer then a fairy tale

Sometimes sin can be so sweet
But even the caramel dipped apples tend to rot
When teeth fall out there’s no retreat
Just enjoy the tumbleweeds for cotton candy

Those short moments of joy
We can never seem to hold on to
Like the kids with balloons
That slip threw their little hands
Floating above the clouds given pigeons turbulence

Come test your strength silly man
And win your lovely girlfriend a teddy bear
Do I dare walk the rope of love? The fall below is deadly
I’m an acrobat without a license or trampoline

I swallow flame and spit heat
But where’s my pay check each week?
Maybe I should join the circus?
Oddie Sloan known as UFO the alien space child
Mutilating your cows and false Gods
I will not bow down to these fantasy mascots

…………………..

I’m sorry I always seem to fall off topics
I’ve always been a back seat bumper car driver
You better watch it - Spilling popcorn when I get excited
The mind of a poet is an ongoing riot

Yet Sooner or later the games all stop
The night becomes silent and the park must close
When the funs all over we got to go back home
Back to reality back to another poem








(Brand new poem written Oct 2, 2004 - Inspired by all the talent on the Poetry Realm....thank you I think I'm starting to get this poetry thing down...what do ya'll think....feedback helps)

[BrokenSoul8604]

come on...dayum...this was wayyy to long....lol....i had alot of time tho, so i finished it...if it was daytime i prolly wouldnt have...but cant knock ya hustle....

"Yet you gather your belongings
And get back in line to ride it again
Love is an ongoing problem we all are solving
Divided by sin"

that was dope...to be honest i wasnt feelin the first third of your piece...it just didnt grab my attention and seemed to be overly simple...but you picked up around there ^^^

"I guess a poet’s ego is spiritual health"

fa sho fa sho...lol

"If you’re single there’s a porn vendor for every male
The gender with painted nails
Who whisper in parallel – “come see the strippers on carousels”
It’s just a temporary merry-go-round of lust
No realer then a fairy tale "

damn if it aint sooo true, man....good verse there


and finally

"The mind of a poet is an ongoing riot"

by far my favorite line of the WHOLE piece....how true... psychotic genius' we are.....lol

Loved the piece...prolly the best thing i've read from you yet...and im sure theres more to come....

stay up

God BLess

[Quotive]

Hella long.. damn son..

"Yet you gather your belongings
And get back in line to ride it again
Love is an ongoing problem we all are solving
Divided by sin"

Word, I feel that. Love is pain.. but you can't live without it. Its like its... addictive.

"I swallow flame and spit heat
But where's my pay check each week?
Maybe I should join the circus?
Oddie Sloan known as UFO the alien space child
Mutilating your cows and false Gods
I will not bow down to these fantasy mascots"

LoL.. I liked this.. it reminds me of the way Jason Mraz writes. Added your own little twist into the mix. Its like saying, you're your own god, fuck believing in everyone elses. Nice man, nice.

"When the funs all over we got to go back home
Back to reality back to another poem"

Sitting here reading these poems, sometimes I seriously get lost in them. Then when its over, I come back to reality, and to my own poetry, of pain and love or whatever.

Very unique piece.. I don't like the Circus, but this is cool. You have a weird, and unique style. Its refreshing. Keep dropping, and try to make your poems a little shorter. Learn how to explain things without using so many words, lengthen the words man.. You'll get it. Ill drop.. peace

[niniane17]

i was really lovin this piece, the metaphors were so captivating, it actually made you see the world as a circus (at least it made me see it that way). all the rides you put in like the rollercoaster of love, or the merry-go-round of lust, and the attractions like the rope of love, and the fortune teller, damn........... lovin it, lookin forward to more.

[Johnnie French]

I decided to open a booth of my own
And charge all the guest for a personal poem
Just take a seat over there in that chair
And tell me all your dirty little secrets
And I will craft the words from thin air
That shall reveal your inner soul much clearer
Then those early years of playing truth and dare

Favorite part.

Word play and vision is clear. I don't think sometimes poets understand that you don't need to be complex to get your point across. The use of rhyme adds to the fun feel of a carnival. Sounding like a ring master in a sense like Willy Wonka taking you for a ride. This is impressive the way you divided up the part into different parts of "self". Talented piece cause it made the time pass. Every ride that you did mention we can relate to and from that relation you spun it off towards the parallel(sp). Keep that in mind when you guys read if you see my response. Overall a fun piece with strong undertones of personal reflection. Very well done.

[DaJackle]

heh this was dope...really loving this...great images man, great symbolism...and i liked how you played with love and made it an attractions...real witty....i love this stanze lol it's funny and the steady paced rhymes in it

If you’re single there’s a porn vendor for every male
The gender with painted nails
Who whisper in parallel – “come see the strippers on carousels”
It’s just a temporary merry-go-round of lust
No realer then a fairy tale

// loving that lol switched the mood of the piece from serious to humorous...stay up man...one luv...peace

[UFO the Phoenix]

wooooooord up!!!!....thanks for the replys/feedback/and love ya'll

Brokensoul....glad you took the time to read this...you found my favorite lines too...I spent alot of time on this piece and I think so far it is my best work...mainly because its my new stuff plus I'm experimenting with concepts and techniques

Quotive....word you caught that yo...I was trying to relate the circus with love...since thats what it seems to revole around...so I put a lot of hints in there to see if cats would catch on...you spotted a few of them...and yeah I'm not bowing down to the "world's" GOD...gotta be careful on who you are worshiping...if it doesnt have to do with Jesus its probably some twisted truth

Nini........hahaha....yep that was my original title for this piece...the world is a circus...but i wanted to see if people could see it...and you saw it!!!!...thanks yo

Johnnie....thanks for all your help earlier yo I really respect that...not to many Vets step out and lend a hand to the next up and coming poet....and you quoted one of the most interesting lines in this whole poem...at least to me...basically concluding that what can I add to the world (circus)...since everyone else has something

Da jackle...yeah that stripper line was how this mess all started...lol...I dunno where it came from but that started me writing more around it and playing with the idea....thanks also for your detailed feedback on AIM

wow

MUCH RESPECT YA'LL!!!!!!!

anyone else?

[allnakey]

"All the butterfly’s came out of your mouth
Along with your true self – speaking hurtful words"


I was really feeling this part


You swiched up as you went.. kind of taking the reader around to where ever you wanted... like a big roller coaster... I wasn't feeling the whole circus begining, but it evolved into something greater then that, something bigger... I liked this


Stay Up, Much Love, peace

[UFO the Phoenix]

^woooord up thanks for peeping yo

yeah started out slow but picks up with many different loops like a rollercoaster

actually I have a poem called "Rollercoaster of Love"....so this just kind of added on to that concept and I played with the idea a lil more

[UFO the Phoenix]

^uppin^

[MisterEThoughts]

This was beautiful for real damn it was long but i enjoyed it had to read it couple times really stood out... I love everything about it the word usage the imagery everything flowed real nice.

[Mind~$oul]

Uppin for the sleepers.