my heart is on fire

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Old 09-17-2004, 06:46 PM   #1 (permalink)
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illpoetical takes it up the butt!
my heart is on fire
this is not a vent, but it's kinda angry so be prepared. let me know what you think
replied to: allnakey, manmadeofashes, and dru-p.



This isn’t a fucking love poem so I won’t speak about it
Not once will I say “I love you” so deal with it
You know who this is about and I’m broke up over bullshit
Crying my fucking eyes out like you hit me in the chest with a bullwhip
Poetry you are not worthy of
You caught and strangled my dove
I’m punching the fucking mirror because I can’t look at myself
Shards of glass and blood drip down onto the shelf
This isn’t a love poem, so kiss my ass
Sorry for being crass, but I feel more broken up then the glass
My chest is ready to explode and expand
Don’t reach out for me I’ll break that hand
Don’t look at me you’re too ugly inside
To deal with me on the outside
Shit, I’m just cursing and cursing because I’m pissed
Standing alone in a dark closet ready to slice my wrists
Ready to break the knuckles in my fist
Ready to do some extreme shit in the name of revenge
Walking towards your house ready to impinge
On your life like you did to mine
Needing to poke your eyes out until you’re blind
Whoa, let me turn it down a few degrees
You broke up with me and discarded me as you pleased
Used me and left me repeatedly
I’m all distraught because of your cruelty
It was like open heart surgery with the anesthesia
I sit alone in my king size bed waiting for you to realize
No fancy words are needed for me to surmise
My heart is on fire...
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Old 09-17-2004, 08:17 PM   #2 (permalink)
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im sorry but LMMAO

not too much flow here, but it was very over the edge and emotional
 
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Old 09-17-2004, 09:29 PM   #3 (permalink)
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^^^agreed..... wasnt feelin the scheme of the piece..but i guess you said yourself that she wasnt worthy of poetry....lol.....dont listen to me tho....just an opinion....stay up

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Old 09-18-2004, 05:37 PM   #4 (permalink)
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Piece was very hars man. Respect the fact that you didnt hold anything back from the reader. I think I remember you saying that you just got married or something. Could have been somebody who said it, but I sure hope things work at man. Keep your head up

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Old 09-18-2004, 08:54 PM   #5 (permalink)
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when i iread this i felt more sorry for her then i did for you...but i guess that's what you were going for
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Old 09-19-2004, 01:07 AM   #6 (permalink)
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Really sad piece, but it got out the anger thats held inside. The flow of this piece was intense and indeed emotional, hope everything gets well. Much luv!
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Old 09-19-2004, 12:49 PM   #7 (permalink)
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I think you kinda surprised some, including me. Didn't know you had this in you here ill. You say its not a vent and thats what made me think you're just angry at the moment. It isn't a love poem, in the sense of how most love poems are and what they're about, but this was about love. IDK if you're writing about yourself, or just using that style you told me you been tryin out. If so, I send you my hopes that you'll be alright.
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Old 09-19-2004, 03:37 PM   #8 (permalink)
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this seemed like a man scorned. It was powerfull, but something was just overly fierce for me.

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Old 09-19-2004, 07:42 PM   #9 (permalink)
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thanks for the replies everyone, real it was what we talked about, mind i'm married, but there are no problems. thanks
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