The Tale of a Male Lesbian

ManMadeofAshes · 09-17-2004, 02:05 AM

(Responded to areeyesee, Chyll Tyrant, and TooShort21)

I never tried to act together
My thought patterns scattered like the weather
I never claimed to have focus
I have never told anyone that I know where Im going

I move my legs
follow my heart
and what I do know is
I always end in the same place I start
The consequence of having a home

sweet home, with a sour stigma attached
what I lack is understanding
drowning in personal perspective
because I was raised to think like this

the consequence is
hating my roommates

I have forgotten what it means to live
but nobody else is ever thinking like this
I am labeled strange cause I don’t agree with the popular opinion
the almighty status quo laughs in my face
because I am still going my own way
and I still don’t know if its going to lead somewhere

I tear into my male mentality
I never really wanted to be called a man
but here I am
penis and all
but I can change baby
tomorrow I will call my doctor
I will buy some tits and a new ass and some hips
to make room for my brand new inverted penis

well I never claimed to be normal
I never could distinguish between a boy and a girl
when all I am looking for is inside their heads
what is the difference?
Vagina Vs. Penis?
Sperm Vs. Egg
is this competition, or are the two the same?
Are we just some puzzle pieces that have fallen out of place?

....I have never claimed to know

BrokenSoul8604 · 09-17-2004, 02:19 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by ManMadeofAshes

(Responded to areeyesee, Chyll Tyrant, and TooShort21)

I never tried to act together
My thought patterns scattered like the weather
I never claimed to have focus
I have never told anyone that I know where Im going

I move my legs
follow my heart
and what I do know is
I always end in the same place I start
The consequence of having a home

sweet home, with a sour stigma attached
what I lack is understanding
drowning in personal perspective
because I was raised to think like this

the consequence is
hating my roommates

I have forgotten what it means to live
but nobody else is ever thinking like this
I am labeled strange cause I don’t agree with the popular opinion
the almighty status quo laughs in my face
because I am still going my own way
and I still don’t know if its going to lead somewhere

I tear into my male mentality
I never really wanted to be called a man
but here I am
penis and all
but I can change baby
tomorrow I will call my doctor
I will buy some tits and a new ass and some hips
to make room for my brand new inverted penis

well I never claimed to be normal
I never could distinguish between a boy and a girl
when all I am looking for is inside their heads
what is the difference?
Vagina Vs. Penis?
Sperm Vs. Egg
is this competition, or are the two the same?
Are we just some puzzle pieces that have fallen out of place?

....I have never claimed to know

and what I do know is
I always end in the same place I start
The consequence of having a home

that line was doooope....

GOD BLESS

lpoet · 09-17-2004, 03:12 PM

hmmm....

this brings up alot of thoughts in my head.....i'm not sure if i like the subject but u did this really well

what I lack is understanding
drowning in personal perspective
because I was raised to think like this

..very nice lines there..very important to think outside the box...espcially in todays society...a lot of people are very closed minded..

the piece took sort of a twist for me.....but those are always interesting to say the least...lol

anyhow..nice job man

is this serious?

ManMadeofAshes · 09-17-2004, 03:37 PM

(Ipoet)

hahaha no its not serious. I actually have a crush on a lesbian.. so I wrote it about that.. but it was just to sort of turn an unfortunate situation into something light and funny. Thanks for the responce.

lpoet · 09-17-2004, 03:47 PM

lol

good...

Index. · 09-17-2004, 04:50 PM

i knew it would be dope as soon as I saw the thread title.

Quotive · 09-17-2004, 05:28 PM

lol, this is ill..

Can't say I can relate but its good...

"I never tried to act together
My thought patterns scattered like the weather
I never claimed to have focus
I have never told anyone that I know where Im going"

Thats my fav. part.. the penis v.s. vagina part had me laughing too..

nice drop yo..

illpoetical · 09-17-2004, 05:41 PM

this is a tight piece, i liekd the fdlow and the fact you tackled a tough subject with ease.

SeDuCe · 09-17-2004, 06:41 PM

Different, but stayed together well... nice

tooshort21 · 09-18-2004, 02:25 PM

I never tried to act together
My thought patterns scattered like the weather
I never claimed to have focus
I have never told anyone that I know where Im going

I never tried to fit in the whole scheme of things
My mentality is suffering an uncontrollable disorder
I never stated that I have the missing piece to the puzzle
Truthfully, honestly I dont know where the fuck Im going

I move my legs
follow my heart
and what I do know is
I always end in the same place I start
The consequence of having a home

I do what I got to do to survive
follow the leader, nah i lead the followers
I encircle myself and find pure confusion
The biggest question that faces me, Where shall I sleep tonight?

sweet home, with a sour stigma attached
what I lack is understanding
drowning in personal perspective
because I was raised to think like this

Jumping from place to place trying to find comfort, the stale aroma of the streets
What I lack is direction
I scared to swim for I know Ill drown
because I was raised like this

the consequence is
hating my roommates

my consequence is
hating my surroundings

I have forgotten what it means to live
but nobody else is ever thinking like this
I am labeled strange cause I don’t agree with the popular opinion
the almighty status quo laughs in my face
because I am still going my own way
and I still don’t know if its going to lead somewhere

I tear into my male mentality
I never really wanted to be called a man
but here I am
penis and all
but I can change baby
tomorrow I will call my doctor
I will buy some tits and a new ass and some hips
to make room for my brand new inverted penis

well I never claimed to be normal
I never could distinguish between a boy and a girl
when all I am looking for is inside their heads
what is the difference?
Vagina Vs. Penis?
Sperm Vs. Egg
is this competition, or are the two the same?
Are we just some puzzle pieces that have fallen out of place?

....I have never claimed to know

I felt like adding on to this my own little work, hope you like

btw this is a well written piece dawg, hit me back on your ideas peace

Brit Boi Gee · 09-19-2004, 03:52 PM

This was kinda, well, strange?..No offense, you understand. I was thinking hmm, male lesbian? a straight guy?lol then as the poem unfolded I realised it was infact a man who wants to be a woman to be with other women. Wow thats quite something. Anyway. My favourite part would have to be:

I tear into my male mentality
I never really wanted to be called a man
but here I am

This seemed like an issue a lot of menxoyld take heart with, even though society probably prevents them with pressure in doing so. Not the fact of physically being a man, but the things masculinity must live upto, and the trials men must meet to secure respect etc. This part seemed like the male equivelenr of a feminists view. something rarely talked about--by feminists anyway. :-)

An enjoyable read, take care

ManMadeofAshes · 09-19-2004, 03:54 PM

intresting interpretation of my peice tooshort. for the most part you are right on. a few lines I would have liked to provoke a different thought, but you seem to grasp it.. I noticed you cut out when it started getting CREEPYY. what happened? heheh.. yea.. but your interpretation of the top is pretty right on in the sense that.. this guy knows he is fucked in the head... wanting to be woman for so he can be with the woman he loves who only likes girls. So its him just kind of admitting to himself... Im not like other people. Im not normal, Im totally fucked up but I dont care. This is who I am. It could also be seen as.. I love this girl soo much that Im willing to leave my social comfort zone just to be with her, which most definately means, being outcasted by the rest of society just to be close to one person. Thanks for .. thinking when you read this peice ehhh. I read your latest. Havent had a chance to respond yet, but i should have time tonight, I will let you know what my thoughts were... . . peace

Ashes

ManMadeofAshes · 09-19-2004, 03:57 PM

thanks brit boi gee... awsome feedback.. and hahah no offence taken. If you didn't find it fucked up... that might be offensive!! LOL. peace

Mind~$oul · 09-20-2004, 03:51 AM

Sat here scratching my head for a few seconds after I finished reading this poem. I must say even though it was strange and it took some turns i wasnt quit prepared for, I still enjoyed the read. Love to see something different in the realm. That last stanza was amazing and it sum'd up everything on point.

When i first saw the title, it reminded me of this book i'm reading now called, "Mama's Black Widow", by Iceberg Slim. Bought this gay dude struggling to do things the right way, but his past keeps hauntin him. You should check it out, if you like to read or what not.

One luv

Diablo · 09-20-2004, 09:49 AM

i would hate to see good old Sigmond read this one...lol

good piece though, pretty comical, the real question is could it turn the girl straight? ;)

ManMadeofAshes · 09-20-2004, 01:13 PM

(diablo) LOL, yea I don't know. She is pretty into women.. but um.. Im willing to bet that if it didn't turn her straight she still wouldnt go for it. I just can't win. I seem to be this gay magnet (I get hit on a lot by gay men), yet the girl I like is a lesbian. Cruel fate. The bad thing is I can't be mad at her because... as I have had to explain to many men, as she has herself, I DONT LIKE PENIS! You can't like a gay man as a person unless you at least admire their penis. thanks for the feedback

Mind Soul - yea, Im not sure how this poem even came to be. I wanted to write something and this came out. (subconscious desire?? God I hope not!) anyway, I will check out that book. Love to read. Thanks for taking to time (everyone) to read this..

much love

Ashes

09-17-2004, 02:05 AM	#1 (permalink)
ManMadeofAshes *DREAMER Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: at home Posts: 635	The Tale of a Male Lesbian (Responded to areeyesee, Chyll Tyrant, and TooShort21) I never tried to act together My thought patterns scattered like the weather I never claimed to have focus I have never told anyone that I know where Im going I move my legs follow my heart and what I do know is I always end in the same place I start The consequence of having a home sweet home, with a sour stigma attached what I lack is understanding drowning in personal perspective because I was raised to think like this the consequence is hating my roommates I have forgotten what it means to live but nobody else is ever thinking like this I am labeled strange cause I don’t agree with the popular opinion the almighty status quo laughs in my face because I am still going my own way and I still don’t know if its going to lead somewhere I tear into my male mentality I never really wanted to be called a man but here I am penis and all but I can change baby tomorrow I will call my doctor I will buy some tits and a new ass and some hips to make room for my brand new inverted penis well I never claimed to be normal I never could distinguish between a boy and a girl when all I am looking for is inside their heads what is the difference? Vagina Vs. Penis? Sperm Vs. Egg is this competition, or are the two the same? Are we just some puzzle pieces that have fallen out of place? ....I have never claimed to know Last edited by ManMadeofAshes; 09-17-2004 at 02:07 AM.

09-17-2004, 03:12 PM	#3 (permalink)
lpoet POET Join Date: Oct 2002 Location: Indianapolis, IN Posts: 12,672	hmmm.... this brings up alot of thoughts in my head.....i'm not sure if i like the subject but u did this really well what I lack is understanding drowning in personal perspective because I was raised to think like this ..very nice lines there..very important to think outside the box...espcially in todays society...a lot of people are very closed minded.. the piece took sort of a twist for me.....but those are always interesting to say the least...lol anyhow..nice job man is this serious? __________________ "SHE CAME BACK TO ME AND I PRAY SHE STAYS" --lpoet

09-17-2004, 03:47 PM	#5 (permalink)
lpoet POET Join Date: Oct 2002 Location: Indianapolis, IN Posts: 12,672	lol good... __________________ "SHE CAME BACK TO ME AND I PRAY SHE STAYS" --lpoet

09-17-2004, 04:50 PM	#6 (permalink)
Index. 11/15/08 Join Date: Jan 2002 Posts: 15,135	i knew it would be dope as soon as I saw the thread title. __________________ Niggas know the line of work Bullet proof designer shirt

09-17-2004, 05:41 PM	#8 (permalink)
illpoetical raising the bar everyday Join Date: Jun 2000 Location: Long Island Posts: 1,533	this is a tight piece, i liekd the fdlow and the fact you tackled a tough subject with ease. __________________ How vain it is to sit down and write when you have not stood up to live. The skill of writing is to create a context in which other people can think.

09-17-2004, 03:37 PM	#4 (permalink)
ManMadeofAshes *DREAMER Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: at home Posts: 635	(Ipoet) hahaha no its not serious. I actually have a crush on a lesbian.. so I wrote it about that.. but it was just to sort of turn an unfortunate situation into something light and funny. Thanks for the responce.

09-17-2004, 06:41 PM	#9 (permalink)
SeDuCe i sm0keheavy.... Join Date: Feb 2000 Location: I'Da'Hoe Posts: 3,366	Different, but stayed together well... nice __________________ S E D U C E -i watch opinion flip a nugha to b!tch- . . .coal-esce-ratz. . .

09-18-2004, 02:25 PM	#10 (permalink)
tooshort21 Banned Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: SIOUX Posts: 1,281	I never tried to act together My thought patterns scattered like the weather I never claimed to have focus I have never told anyone that I know where Im going I never tried to fit in the whole scheme of things My mentality is suffering an uncontrollable disorder I never stated that I have the missing piece to the puzzle Truthfully, honestly I dont know where the fuck Im going I move my legs follow my heart and what I do know is I always end in the same place I start The consequence of having a home I do what I got to do to survive follow the leader, nah i lead the followers I encircle myself and find pure confusion The biggest question that faces me, Where shall I sleep tonight? sweet home, with a sour stigma attached what I lack is understanding drowning in personal perspective because I was raised to think like this Jumping from place to place trying to find comfort, the stale aroma of the streets What I lack is direction I scared to swim for I know Ill drown because I was raised like this the consequence is hating my roommates my consequence is hating my surroundings I have forgotten what it means to live but nobody else is ever thinking like this I am labeled strange cause I don’t agree with the popular opinion the almighty status quo laughs in my face because I am still going my own way and I still don’t know if its going to lead somewhere I tear into my male mentality I never really wanted to be called a man but here I am penis and all but I can change baby tomorrow I will call my doctor I will buy some tits and a new ass and some hips to make room for my brand new inverted penis well I never claimed to be normal I never could distinguish between a boy and a girl when all I am looking for is inside their heads what is the difference? Vagina Vs. Penis? Sperm Vs. Egg is this competition, or are the two the same? Are we just some puzzle pieces that have fallen out of place? ....I have never claimed to know I felt like adding on to this my own little work, hope you like btw this is a well written piece dawg, hit me back on your ideas peace __________________ will write poetry for food.

09-19-2004, 03:52 PM	#11 (permalink)
Brit Boi Gee manifest the zen Join Date: Mar 2002 Location: Near To Athena Posts: 15,977	This was kinda, well, strange?..No offense, you understand. I was thinking hmm, male lesbian? a straight guy?lol then as the poem unfolded I realised it was infact a man who wants to be a woman to be with other women. Wow thats quite something. Anyway. My favourite part would have to be: I tear into my male mentality I never really wanted to be called a man but here I am This seemed like an issue a lot of menxoyld take heart with, even though society probably prevents them with pressure in doing so. Not the fact of physically being a man, but the things masculinity must live upto, and the trials men must meet to secure respect etc. This part seemed like the male equivelenr of a feminists view. something rarely talked about--by feminists anyway. :-) An enjoyable read, take care __________________ They all laughed when I said I was going to be a comedian. They aren't laughing now. -Bob Monkhouse Brit Boi has a highly calibrated wifermometer Last edited by Brit Boi Gee; 09-19-2004 at 03:53 PM.

09-19-2004, 03:54 PM	#12 (permalink)
ManMadeofAshes *DREAMER Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: at home Posts: 635	intresting interpretation of my peice tooshort. for the most part you are right on. a few lines I would have liked to provoke a different thought, but you seem to grasp it.. I noticed you cut out when it started getting CREEPYY. what happened? heheh.. yea.. but your interpretation of the top is pretty right on in the sense that.. this guy knows he is fucked in the head... wanting to be woman for so he can be with the woman he loves who only likes girls. So its him just kind of admitting to himself... Im not like other people. Im not normal, Im totally fucked up but I dont care. This is who I am. It could also be seen as.. I love this girl soo much that Im willing to leave my social comfort zone just to be with her, which most definately means, being outcasted by the rest of society just to be close to one person. Thanks for .. thinking when you read this peice ehhh. I read your latest. Havent had a chance to respond yet, but i should have time tonight, I will let you know what my thoughts were... . . peace Ashes

09-19-2004, 03:57 PM	#13 (permalink)
ManMadeofAshes *DREAMER Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: at home Posts: 635	thanks brit boi gee... awsome feedback.. and hahah no offence taken. If you didn't find it fucked up... that might be offensive!! LOL. peace

09-20-2004, 03:51 AM	#14 (permalink)
Mind~$oul I'm Pretty Join Date: Apr 2001 Location: North Memphis BITCH! Posts: 17,145	Sat here scratching my head for a few seconds after I finished reading this poem. I must say even though it was strange and it took some turns i wasnt quit prepared for, I still enjoyed the read. Love to see something different in the realm. That last stanza was amazing and it sum'd up everything on point. When i first saw the title, it reminded me of this book i'm reading now called, "Mama's Black Widow", by Iceberg Slim. Bought this gay dude struggling to do things the right way, but his past keeps hauntin him. You should check it out, if you like to read or what not. One luv __________________ "Everybody wanna be a nicca, but don't nobody wanna be a nicca"-Paul Mooney "I tried to live right, but society aint made for niccas to live right"-Joe Budden Last edited by Mind~$oul; 09-22-2004 at 02:54 AM.

09-20-2004, 09:49 AM	#15 (permalink)
Diablo Master Of Blades Join Date: Jul 1999 Location: The Unholy Posts: 3,901	i would hate to see good old Sigmond read this one...lol good piece though, pretty comical, the real question is could it turn the girl straight? ;) __________________ ◄UNHOLY MERCENARIES► Diablo ≥ Joswik Gamboa ≤ DamO THE RETURN OF THE DYNASTY

09-20-2004, 01:13 PM	#16 (permalink)
ManMadeofAshes *DREAMER Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: at home Posts: 635	(diablo) LOL, yea I don't know. She is pretty into women.. but um.. Im willing to bet that if it didn't turn her straight she still wouldnt go for it. I just can't win. I seem to be this gay magnet (I get hit on a lot by gay men), yet the girl I like is a lesbian. Cruel fate. The bad thing is I can't be mad at her because... as I have had to explain to many men, as she has herself, I DONT LIKE PENIS! You can't like a gay man as a person unless you at least admire their penis. thanks for the feedback Mind Soul - yea, Im not sure how this poem even came to be. I wanted to write something and this came out. (subconscious desire?? God I hope not!) anyway, I will check out that book. Love to read. Thanks for taking to time (everyone) to read this.. much love Ashes

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