Remenicing over you........To my girl Sonya

Dru-P · 09-16-2004, 08:06 PM

This is just me rhyming to a girl that ain't here anymore, alot of it doesn't rhyme it's like a talk rhyme, explaining all the times that I remember...

I used to chill with ya', swill with ya'
at times my mind I would fill with ya
I would always keep shit real with ya'
I remember the first time that I seen ya'

It was a dance, I snuck in, you got me on the floor when I was hiding..
I was in eigth grade, you were a freshman..
Regional ball tournament, you weren't stressing..
We had a good time, couldn't wait to see you again..
Like a blessing' you were sent from heaven..
Words so kind, I was like dust, cuz' I got swept in..
Next year I'm in 9th grade, you a sophmore..
I would ride the bench, you would score more..
Watched you play, gracefully running, beautiful J..
Teams you would slay, then it came that day..
I partyed with you at state, we was swilling times were great..
There was no drama, you never showed me any hate..
We was cool, and I remember the next year at high school..
Sophmore, I finally got off of the bench..
My jersey was drenched, sweating like a bitch..
You gave me a hug after the game, showed me love simple n' plain..

You're my homie, you're my friend..
You kept it cool until the very end..
I thank you for everything..
showed me love, before the bling..

Now my senior year rolls bye, nobody on your team would say hi..
I wondered why, that's when you caught my eyes..
Chilled with me, and cheered me up even though we lost..
Told me shit happens, and you got me back to laughing..
State was the world to me, I thought you might be the girl for me..
That's why it hurts to see, your name still gracing me on MSN..
After state we would chat, we always kept it real..
I was firefighting all summer, making cash, pumping steel..
Just got back and I heard the news.....

Dru-P: Hello
Aaron: Did you hear what happened to your girl Sonya??...

Oh no, that couldn't be right, not now, why??
those were my only thoughts, how could god let you die??
And raped?? what the hell, investigation was tripping..
All I knew was that instantly you I was missing..
Wishing it could be anybody else, pain is all I felt..
3 months roll bye, and still the killer is at large..
another 3 months, and they found out it was a cop..
Left you naked, a gunshot to the back of the head..
When I see that pig, it's gonna be another cop dead..
Just wishing it was anybody else instead..
And hot lead, that's the worst way for an angel to go..
I'll see you again, cuz' till the end you was my friend..
hope you in heaven..

Miss you girl... Hope you in piece now

RealMS · 09-17-2004, 04:53 PM

[i]Damn, that is so tragic I can't believe how it must've been when you got word of it. And I can see why justice has not been served yet even to this day-system is so messed up everywhere you go it seems. Very nice, maybe more like something you could turn into like a spoken word, very deep when you think of it as well. Safe to say your angel is resting upstairs now.
-Much Love, good read.

illpoetical · 09-17-2004, 06:42 PM

i really liked this, it was kinda sad and i can feel your pain. tight piece

Dru-P · 09-17-2004, 10:33 PM

Thanks for the feedback.... Yeah the systems still corrupt... I was mainly trying to sum up my relationship with this girl... Cuz' when she first got killed I kinda shut it out, and then somebody reminded me that we were close..

Mind~$oul · 09-18-2004, 05:53 PM

Didnt really like the rhyming in this this piece. I must say that this was a really heartfelt piece man. I always say to anybody who writes a poem about losing somebody, that it takes alot to do it. Once you finally have, you feeling a little stronger on the inside. Keep your head up man

one luv

Thaumaturge · 09-18-2004, 08:56 PM

at the least i could feel what you were saying, the only problem is you didnt artiuclate your thoughts in a very intellectual way or anything, but you told a nice story of how you met her and all that. everything was just lying on the surface here, there was no hidden messages or comparison, but then again, that's okay. overall the poem was decent, keep ya head up

MzDee · 09-19-2004, 12:56 AM

this was a very sad peice and i hope you got some of your hurt out through your words . just as long as she lives in your heart she will never be forgotten
much respect

Dru-P · 09-19-2004, 10:46 PM

Yeah I didn't want to put any hidden meaning in this.. Because this is an everyday reality. I articulate in my vernacular... This is how I talk I was just clearing this outta my head..

09-16-2004, 08:06 PM	#1 (permalink)
Dru-P Alaskan Assassin Join Date: Jan 2001 Location: Tanana, AK, 99777 Posts: 2,483	Remenicing over you........To my girl Sonya This is just me rhyming to a girl that ain't here anymore, alot of it doesn't rhyme it's like a talk rhyme, explaining all the times that I remember... I used to chill with ya', swill with ya' at times my mind I would fill with ya I would always keep shit real with ya' I remember the first time that I seen ya' It was a dance, I snuck in, you got me on the floor when I was hiding.. I was in eigth grade, you were a freshman.. Regional ball tournament, you weren't stressing.. We had a good time, couldn't wait to see you again.. Like a blessing' you were sent from heaven.. Words so kind, I was like dust, cuz' I got swept in.. Next year I'm in 9th grade, you a sophmore.. I would ride the bench, you would score more.. Watched you play, gracefully running, beautiful J.. Teams you would slay, then it came that day.. I partyed with you at state, we was swilling times were great.. There was no drama, you never showed me any hate.. We was cool, and I remember the next year at high school.. Sophmore, I finally got off of the bench.. My jersey was drenched, sweating like a bitch.. You gave me a hug after the game, showed me love simple n' plain.. You're my homie, you're my friend.. You kept it cool until the very end.. I thank you for everything.. showed me love, before the bling.. Now my senior year rolls bye, nobody on your team would say hi.. I wondered why, that's when you caught my eyes.. Chilled with me, and cheered me up even though we lost.. Told me shit happens, and you got me back to laughing.. State was the world to me, I thought you might be the girl for me.. That's why it hurts to see, your name still gracing me on MSN.. After state we would chat, we always kept it real.. I was firefighting all summer, making cash, pumping steel.. Just got back and I heard the news..... Dru-P: Hello Aaron: Did you hear what happened to your girl Sonya??... Oh no, that couldn't be right, not now, why?? those were my only thoughts, how could god let you die?? And raped?? what the hell, investigation was tripping.. All I knew was that instantly you I was missing.. Wishing it could be anybody else, pain is all I felt.. 3 months roll bye, and still the killer is at large.. another 3 months, and they found out it was a cop.. Left you naked, a gunshot to the back of the head.. When I see that pig, it's gonna be another cop dead.. Just wishing it was anybody else instead.. And hot lead, that's the worst way for an angel to go.. I'll see you again, cuz' till the end you was my friend.. hope you in heaven.. Miss you girl... Hope you in piece now __________________ Hellz Prophets... "I didn't record this track, The beat memorized my Verse!!" --- Joe Buddens Steppn' Up Mixtape!!! Get it while it's hot....

09-17-2004, 06:42 PM	#3 (permalink)
illpoetical raising the bar everyday Join Date: Jun 2000 Location: Long Island Posts: 1,533	i really liked this, it was kinda sad and i can feel your pain. tight piece __________________ How vain it is to sit down and write when you have not stood up to live. The skill of writing is to create a context in which other people can think.

09-17-2004, 10:33 PM	#4 (permalink)
Dru-P Alaskan Assassin Join Date: Jan 2001 Location: Tanana, AK, 99777 Posts: 2,483	Thanks for the feedback.... Yeah the systems still corrupt... I was mainly trying to sum up my relationship with this girl... Cuz' when she first got killed I kinda shut it out, and then somebody reminded me that we were close.. __________________ Hellz Prophets... "I didn't record this track, The beat memorized my Verse!!" --- Joe Buddens Steppn' Up Mixtape!!! Get it while it's hot....

09-18-2004, 05:53 PM	#5 (permalink)
Mind~$oul I'm Pretty Join Date: Apr 2001 Location: North Memphis BITCH! Posts: 17,145	Didnt really like the rhyming in this this piece. I must say that this was a really heartfelt piece man. I always say to anybody who writes a poem about losing somebody, that it takes alot to do it. Once you finally have, you feeling a little stronger on the inside. Keep your head up man one luv __________________ "Everybody wanna be a nicca, but don't nobody wanna be a nicca"-Paul Mooney "I tried to live right, but society aint made for niccas to live right"-Joe Budden

09-19-2004, 10:46 PM	#8 (permalink)
Dru-P Alaskan Assassin Join Date: Jan 2001 Location: Tanana, AK, 99777 Posts: 2,483	Yeah I didn't want to put any hidden meaning in this.. Because this is an everyday reality. I articulate in my vernacular... This is how I talk I was just clearing this outta my head.. __________________ Hellz Prophets... "I didn't record this track, The beat memorized my Verse!!" --- Joe Buddens Steppn' Up Mixtape!!! Get it while it's hot....

09-17-2004, 04:53 PM	#2 (permalink)
RealMS Pro 31 Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Lafayette/New Orleans, LA Posts: 4,228	[i]Damn, that is so tragic I can't believe how it must've been when you got word of it. And I can see why justice has not been served yet even to this day-system is so messed up everywhere you go it seems. Very nice, maybe more like something you could turn into like a spoken word, very deep when you think of it as well. Safe to say your angel is resting upstairs now. -Much Love, good read.

09-18-2004, 08:56 PM	#6 (permalink)
Thaumaturge Registered User Join Date: Jun 2004 Posts: 354	at the least i could feel what you were saying, the only problem is you didnt artiuclate your thoughts in a very intellectual way or anything, but you told a nice story of how you met her and all that. everything was just lying on the surface here, there was no hidden messages or comparison, but then again, that's okay. overall the poem was decent, keep ya head up

09-19-2004, 12:56 AM	#7 (permalink)
MzDee Where Stars Fall..... Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: chucktown ,sc Posts: 58	this was a very sad peice and i hope you got some of your hurt out through your words . just as long as she lives in your heart she will never be forgotten much respect

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