Keystyle, locked up they wont let me out, spent some time in the county jail

tooshort21 · 09-14-2004, 02:03 PM

Locked up they wont let me out

sitting in my bunk on a 1 inch thick mattress wishing for some peace of mind
The wall is the closest thing to my friend right now, so I continue to stare
The blanket provided is too damn small, and the sheet smells like filth and grime
The sandals provided are two sizes too small and my socks are beginning to wear
Shaving in this motherfucker isnt even an option so I let it all go
Brushing my teeth is beginning to become more of a habit than necessity, what else am i to do?
I have a feeling the comb provided has been passed from inmate to inmate, more than I should really know
My thoughts are going haywire, wondering if im ever gonna get out of here, this cant be true
Insomnia has consumed my body, sleep is no longer needed
Im not a religious man but I pick up the bible and read the stories over and over
Listening to all the jail stories and knowing mine doesnt compare
Im not a bad person, (keep telling myself that)
Ill get out of here, just have patience (keep telling myself that)
All the druggies are going through their withdrawls
Screaming and moaning wishing they had a fix
Im locked up and they wont let me out
that will be my new song of choice
Police keep ensuring my safety,"oh you will be just fine, in all due time"
Easy for them to say when they get to go home to their family
Speaking of family, it brings me to why im in this motherfucker
Ex-wifey, damn i sure hope she is enjoying the money that I involuntarily provided her with
Wouldnt want her to be broke or nothing....

Bare with me people its been a minute since Ive posted, I think this piece is abstract as fuck, but its all good, *am I gonna edit it* no because it would take away from the originality of it... hope yall like and anyone with any questions just hit me up and Ill reply tomorrow... peace hey

illpoetical · 09-15-2004, 04:45 PM

i liked it, i think the editing would be good just to make it easier to read, i liked it tight piece.

serioustempa · 09-15-2004, 10:52 PM

Flow'd and was a nice read. Honest-felt!

Mind~$oul · 09-16-2004, 04:35 AM

Alright piece man, i've seen better from you though. I liked the imagery you displayed in this piece. The feeling you gave off was kinda depressing. I imagined you being in the "hole" while reading this

"All the druggies are going through their withdrawls
Screaming and moaning wishing they had a fix"

Last year I spent a day in a half jail for fightin and there was this junkie in a cell right across for me. One of the scariest/saddest thing i've seen in my life. He was so fucked up and need a fix so bad that he was headbut'n the walls and trying to bite through the bars. I'll never forget that scene.

Good drop though

one luv

tooshort21 · 09-16-2004, 06:22 PM

thanks for the replies

I feel what you said Mind, I went through some grimey shit up in the joint.... but its all good now, simply b/c im on the outside!!

thanks

ManMadeofAshes · 09-17-2004, 01:48 AM

ehhh too short. Long time know see. This is very nice man. Paints an awsome picture. As you said it is definately raw. I think I may have liked to see more of a flow because it seemed like a lot of statements in a sense.. sort of like. 1 2 3 4. But it was really nice.

what sent you there? You sort of failed to mention.. other than something to do with the X

just curious, might be a good addition to the peice at the very end, but I also like the curiosity it creates by knowing the general direction but not the reason.

peace

Ashes

tooshort21 · 09-18-2004, 02:11 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by ManMadeofAshes

ehhh too short. Long time know see. This is very nice man. Paints an awsome picture. As you said it is definately raw. I think I may have liked to see more of a flow because it seemed like a lot of statements in a sense.. sort of like. 1 2 3 4. But it was really nice.

what sent you there? You sort of failed to mention.. other than something to do with the X

just curious, might be a good addition to the peice at the very end, but I also like the curiosity it creates by knowing the general direction but not the reason.

peace

Ashes

thanks for the reply dawg, long time no hear!! or something like that, I ended up in the joint simply b/c of my ex wifey!! While I was in Iraq she took the liberty to spend my money and than high tail it the fuck out of America, shes originally from Costa Rica so yeah dawg, my card got pulled and i was played... its all good now though know what im saying, things like that build character *chuckles* and shit like that happens for a reason.... thanks for your input as always man, this piece was just a quick keystyle

Im gonna check out some more pieces, I see that you have two on the first page, ill hit them up

peace

tooshort21 · 09-20-2004, 01:12 PM

looking for more replies,

im locked up, they wont let me out!

*the agony of hearing myself sing, send help*
lol

Cockmaster700 · 09-20-2004, 02:56 PM

aw man since you used the title of an awesome rapped by STYLES P from the LOCS should've come with some like this

I'M LOCKED UP WON'T LET ME OUT, I'M LOCKED UP WON'T LET ME OUT (NOW LISTEN)

The block corrupt and I’m locked up as a hard knock butt// charged with theft investigation large and deft// a hung jury that sprung fury// in my life. The judge opposed my style and closed trial// without proof of the truth now in a jail cell, prevail in hell. // they feel I'm a threat no doubt they won't let me out//

I'M LOCKED UP WON'T LET ME OUT, I'M LOCKED UP WON'T LET ME OUT (NOW LISTEN)

Imprison and confine just vision doing time
Collision with crime cause fission of the mind
On detention not to mention awaiting a wild trial
Guess my style is senile like a dog on leash growl
And howl behind bars, blind scars show very well
Convicted and restricted to a cell block of hell
Hot, apart from others the heart of some brothers
Under pressure can’t thunder the pleasure as lovers
Fight in stride to stay on the right side of the law
The foul grow like an aloe long spikes with flaw
Sticky wrong type and raw society scratch with claw

I'M LOCKED UP WON'T LET ME OUT, I'M LOCKED UP WON'T LET ME OUT

ManMadeofAshes · 09-20-2004, 04:54 PM

damn fool I didnt realize you were still locked up...

just based on the fact that you have been married and divorced I am curious... how old are ya? sucks you got fucked over but at least you got the right attitude.

I got to go, tyin up the house phone.

peace... if your board, gimme another poem to read!

ashes

09-14-2004, 02:03 PM	#1 (permalink)
tooshort21 Banned Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: SIOUX Posts: 1,281	Keystyle, locked up they wont let me out, spent some time in the county jail Locked up they wont let me out sitting in my bunk on a 1 inch thick mattress wishing for some peace of mind The wall is the closest thing to my friend right now, so I continue to stare The blanket provided is too damn small, and the sheet smells like filth and grime The sandals provided are two sizes too small and my socks are beginning to wear Shaving in this motherfucker isnt even an option so I let it all go Brushing my teeth is beginning to become more of a habit than necessity, what else am i to do? I have a feeling the comb provided has been passed from inmate to inmate, more than I should really know My thoughts are going haywire, wondering if im ever gonna get out of here, this cant be true Insomnia has consumed my body, sleep is no longer needed Im not a religious man but I pick up the bible and read the stories over and over Listening to all the jail stories and knowing mine doesnt compare Im not a bad person, (keep telling myself that) Ill get out of here, just have patience (keep telling myself that) All the druggies are going through their withdrawls Screaming and moaning wishing they had a fix Im locked up and they wont let me out that will be my new song of choice Police keep ensuring my safety,"oh you will be just fine, in all due time" Easy for them to say when they get to go home to their family Speaking of family, it brings me to why im in this motherfucker Ex-wifey, damn i sure hope she is enjoying the money that I involuntarily provided her with Wouldnt want her to be broke or nothing.... Bare with me people its been a minute since Ive posted, I think this piece is abstract as fuck, but its all good, am I gonna edit it no because it would take away from the originality of it... hope yall like and anyone with any questions just hit me up and Ill reply tomorrow... peace hey __________________ will write poetry for food.

09-15-2004, 04:45 PM	#2 (permalink)
illpoetical raising the bar everyday Join Date: Jun 2000 Location: Long Island Posts: 1,533	i liked it, i think the editing would be good just to make it easier to read, i liked it tight piece. __________________ How vain it is to sit down and write when you have not stood up to live. The skill of writing is to create a context in which other people can think.

09-15-2004, 10:52 PM	#3 (permalink)
serioustempa Registered User Join Date: Mar 2002 Posts: 40	Flow'd and was a nice read. Honest-felt! __________________ SUNSET...

09-16-2004, 04:35 AM	#4 (permalink)
Mind~$oul I'm Pretty Join Date: Apr 2001 Location: North Memphis BITCH! Posts: 17,145	Alright piece man, i've seen better from you though. I liked the imagery you displayed in this piece. The feeling you gave off was kinda depressing. I imagined you being in the "hole" while reading this "All the druggies are going through their withdrawls Screaming and moaning wishing they had a fix" Last year I spent a day in a half jail for fightin and there was this junkie in a cell right across for me. One of the scariest/saddest thing i've seen in my life. He was so fucked up and need a fix so bad that he was headbut'n the walls and trying to bite through the bars. I'll never forget that scene. Good drop though one luv __________________ "Everybody wanna be a nicca, but don't nobody wanna be a nicca"-Paul Mooney "I tried to live right, but society aint made for niccas to live right"-Joe Budden

09-16-2004, 06:22 PM	#5 (permalink)
tooshort21 Banned Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: SIOUX Posts: 1,281	thanks for the replies I feel what you said Mind, I went through some grimey shit up in the joint.... but its all good now, simply b/c im on the outside!! thanks __________________ will write poetry for food.

09-17-2004, 01:48 AM	#6 (permalink)
ManMadeofAshes *DREAMER Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: at home Posts: 635	ehhh too short. Long time know see. This is very nice man. Paints an awsome picture. As you said it is definately raw. I think I may have liked to see more of a flow because it seemed like a lot of statements in a sense.. sort of like. 1 2 3 4. But it was really nice. what sent you there? You sort of failed to mention.. other than something to do with the X just curious, might be a good addition to the peice at the very end, but I also like the curiosity it creates by knowing the general direction but not the reason. peace Ashes

09-20-2004, 01:12 PM	#8 (permalink)
tooshort21 Banned Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: SIOUX Posts: 1,281	looking for more replies, im locked up, they wont let me out! the agony of hearing myself sing, send help lol __________________ will write poetry for food.

09-20-2004, 02:56 PM	#9 (permalink)
Cockmaster700 Registered User Join Date: Feb 2004 Posts: 2,048	aw man since you used the title of an awesome rapped by STYLES P from the LOCS should've come with some like this I'M LOCKED UP WON'T LET ME OUT, I'M LOCKED UP WON'T LET ME OUT (NOW LISTEN) The block corrupt and I’m locked up as a hard knock butt// charged with theft investigation large and deft// a hung jury that sprung fury// in my life. The judge opposed my style and closed trial// without proof of the truth now in a jail cell, prevail in hell. // they feel I'm a threat no doubt they won't let me out// I'M LOCKED UP WON'T LET ME OUT, I'M LOCKED UP WON'T LET ME OUT (NOW LISTEN) Imprison and confine just vision doing time Collision with crime cause fission of the mind On detention not to mention awaiting a wild trial Guess my style is senile like a dog on leash growl And howl behind bars, blind scars show very well Convicted and restricted to a cell block of hell Hot, apart from others the heart of some brothers Under pressure can’t thunder the pleasure as lovers Fight in stride to stay on the right side of the law The foul grow like an aloe long spikes with flaw Sticky wrong type and raw society scratch with claw I'M LOCKED UP WON'T LET ME OUT, I'M LOCKED UP WON'T LET ME OUT

09-20-2004, 04:54 PM	#10 (permalink)
ManMadeofAshes *DREAMER Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: at home Posts: 635	damn fool I didnt realize you were still locked up... just based on the fact that you have been married and divorced I am curious... how old are ya? sucks you got fucked over but at least you got the right attitude. I got to go, tyin up the house phone. peace... if your board, gimme another poem to read! ashes

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