Angel Withen The Devil

[babyangel17]

This is jus some shit i came up wit lemme kno wat u think ight peace

replied to shoping at fresh farm, Hes alone again, Morining

Never really got
the concept of 2 minds
put togather in one ...
there an angel stands
alone, cold
There the devil stands
in the distance.
Never really understood
myself never took the time
to understand someone else
look inside my eyes
you'll be full of confuesion
and pain and a heart
that never will be at peace
In the midst of all my tears
i am alone.
My heart is week, my soul
is gone, you see me sit
by that cold , n wet gravestone
but you dont bother to understand
My mind is corupted by the whispers
that tease and haunt me
when i try to sleep
An angel withen the devil
you see me smile
but you turn away
cuz you see the anger and hate
that builds inside of me
My balence is unsteady
My mind is constantly spinning
An angel withen the devil...
When will i be able to breathe
smothered by my struggles
that leads into another peice
of a broken puzzle......

[*Pink Lemonade*]

this poem seemed to portray you being uncertain or something, but overall it was a good piece, keep up the good work.. :]

[lpoet]

hmmm

Never really understood
myself

....i'm feeling that....makes me think of myself and how i dont think i've ever tried to understand myself..if that makes sense

anyhow..

piece was nice...kind of raw..nothing really floored me about the piece but i liked it b/c it reminded me of myself in certain parts

nice job

[babyangel17]

yea biw that i think about it the peice i put up is kinna boring lol but i still liked some parts of it ya kno

[Mind~$oul]

Decent piece. I liked the concept of the piece mostly. Seem like something you keystyled right quick. Uppin for you


one luv

[serioustempa]

I liked the probing concerns of wanting to know self and view of others very different. Piece by piece until the puzzle is revealed. Nice read!

[RealMS]

Yeah girl nice read, b/c if I could relate to something I'm reading I will like the poem automatically probably. Tryna find yourself is no secret, we all are whether we admit it or not, and the more we are, the more it gets interesting. May take us our whole entire lives, but the ones around you may say the whole time they always knew who you were.
Keep writing,
Much Love

[babyangel17]

thanx everybody u kno ....shit keep happenin but at least i try to keep ma head up ya kno thanx fo all the feedback

[Cockmaster700]

this was really deep for real girl enjoyed it

[BrokenSoul8604]

pretty nice read..... i liked tha flow........overall concept was deep

God bless