On The Money

Cockmaster700 · 09-12-2004, 04:08 PM

Correct posts and check growths// in grammar try hammer
Knowledge into brains and still garbage tends to rain// no glamour

“So MADD its funny how cats want feedback with seeds whack//
And don’t grow like plants”, “yeah dawg should fertilize their act
Be wise and exact learn to recognize fact// if you soft get attacked”

Know one cat use to brag met one dude that abuse his dew rag//
Now he has bad hair days sad how his affairs sways// and sag

Like my pants but I don’t get a chance to dance just do the rocawear
And lean back with keen fact// chill because there’s some glocks out there”

“Well MADD this junk is psycho action like Michael Jackson
So I duck trend and tuck cats in// with a clever clever plan of attraction
But explicit don’t visit never never land but forever stand// and do fractions”

My rhymes make minds shift like winds just to uplift the trends//
In rap

babyangel17 · 09-12-2004, 06:25 PM

it was funny sorta u kno the begining part ..but still i like the way you write yo its good lol keep up the good work

*Pink Lemonade* · 09-12-2004, 07:43 PM

this is a pretty good piece, I enjoyed reading it. :]

illpoetical · 09-12-2004, 09:43 PM

i liked it, it flowed like a rhyme though. plus it seemed like you put your lines togehter like bars. i think you could change your structure alittle to make it easier to read poetically speaking. anyway tight piece keep posting.

Cockmaster700 · 09-13-2004, 03:08 PM

thanks for the props yall for real yo

runofthejamill · 09-14-2004, 07:19 AM

good stuff

Cockmaster700 · 09-15-2004, 06:53 AM

wow! rally appreciate the props for real yall

09-12-2004, 04:08 PM	#1 (permalink)
Cockmaster700 Registered User Join Date: Feb 2004 Posts: 2,048	On The Money Correct posts and check growths// in grammar try hammer Knowledge into brains and still garbage tends to rain// no glamour “So MADD its funny how cats want feedback with seeds whack// And don’t grow like plants”, “yeah dawg should fertilize their act Be wise and exact learn to recognize fact// if you soft get attacked” Know one cat use to brag met one dude that abuse his dew rag// Now he has bad hair days sad how his affairs sways// and sag Like my pants but I don’t get a chance to dance just do the rocawear And lean back with keen fact// chill because there’s some glocks out there” “Well MADD this junk is psycho action like Michael Jackson So I duck trend and tuck cats in// with a clever clever plan of attraction But explicit don’t visit never never land but forever stand// and do fractions” My rhymes make minds shift like winds just to uplift the trends// In rap

09-12-2004, 06:25 PM	#2 (permalink)
babyangel17 Registered User Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: Pgh ~~~~~ Posts: 147	it was funny sorta u kno the begining part ..but still i like the way you write yo its good lol keep up the good work __________________ Shit life can put you in the strangest place's never knew i'd become just like them.....walking in the shadows of the night ..been in this game since i was 12 cuz daz when i saw one of my niggz fall..knew i had to protect my own ...it hasnt been long ...but look inside my eyes you'll see that i know murder more then life

09-12-2004, 09:43 PM	#4 (permalink)
illpoetical raising the bar everyday Join Date: Jun 2000 Location: Long Island Posts: 1,533	i liked it, it flowed like a rhyme though. plus it seemed like you put your lines togehter like bars. i think you could change your structure alittle to make it easier to read poetically speaking. anyway tight piece keep posting. __________________ How vain it is to sit down and write when you have not stood up to live. The skill of writing is to create a context in which other people can think.

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09-12-2004, 07:43 PM	#3 (permalink)
Pink Lemonade DLicious Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: Around the Way Posts: 246	this is a pretty good piece, I enjoyed reading it. :]

09-13-2004, 03:08 PM	#5 (permalink)
Cockmaster700 Registered User Join Date: Feb 2004 Posts: 2,048	thanks for the props yall for real yo

09-14-2004, 07:19 AM	#6 (permalink)
runofthejamill or not. Join Date: Sep 2004 Posts: 91	good stuff

09-15-2004, 06:53 AM	#7 (permalink)
Cockmaster700 Registered User Join Date: Feb 2004 Posts: 2,048	wow! rally appreciate the props for real yall

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