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Old 09-12-2004, 03:36 AM   #1 (permalink)
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He's Alone Again...
He hung his head beneath an autumn rain
Gallows of mourn provide a withered noose
Pennies for his thoughts buy serenity,
a coffin for a quarter of a man...

Breaths a breath of a youthfully stale air
Exhaling the void to point out a soul
Gusting winter wind sighs a frozen loss
His tears could wash out a bloody manger...

An epiphyte on his door notes goodbye
Water a wilted rose till warmth's restored
Sun deprived pines of woe harness slumber
Lord's early call fusing eyes half open...

Serve as a lighthouse for a distant soul
An hourly tear feeds the undertow
Dull senses caught between the words of two
Moving forth takes effort in any world...

Hands of tomorrow hold the same dagger
Daunting truth masked with infantile features
He's alone again to no one's surprise
Moon lit hills only go upwards from here....
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Old 09-12-2004, 04:58 AM   #2 (permalink)
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Old 09-12-2004, 01:33 PM   #3 (permalink)
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thanks for all the feedback guys.
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Old 09-12-2004, 02:02 PM   #4 (permalink)
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^ lol.. give people time damn..

Your style is fresh.. its like, vintage poetry.. some old, nice smooth shyt..

"Hands of tomorrow hold the same dagger
Daunting truth masked with infantile features
He's alone again to no one's surprise
Moon lit hills only go upwards from here...."

That stanza is seriously thought provolkin'.. I'm diggin' ya style.. your dope..

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Old 09-12-2004, 03:31 PM   #5 (permalink)
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yea this was very thought provoking... I like how it ended kind of openly like...well...
Ya know, this was very smooth and the words were pieced together nicely, I was feeling it


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it was decent i liked it
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Old 09-12-2004, 11:34 PM   #7 (permalink)
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only decent? :(

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Old 09-13-2004, 01:56 PM   #8 (permalink)
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Old 09-13-2004, 02:29 PM   #9 (permalink)
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i thought this was much better than decent. i agree with Quotive, you're a throw back poet. I wish more people would post stuff like this, i think its really underappreciated.

Serve as a lighthouse for a distant soul
An hourly tear feeds the undertow
Dull senses caught between the words of two
Moving forth takes effort in any world....

i liked this stanza the best. extremely thought provoking.

very nice drop.
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Old 09-14-2004, 02:00 AM   #11 (permalink)
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throw back indeed...really feeling it.......lookin forward to reading more...

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this was excellent keep up the good work...

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The part quotive quoted was on some serious shit man. Dont know if I've told you this already, but your work reminds me such much of brit boi gee's work. Would be something else if yall two was to get together on a collab....this should be gettin more replies...uppin for you



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