“Adoration’s Ebb and Flow”

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Old 07-22-2004, 05:42 PM   #1 (permalink)
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“Adoration’s Ebb and Flow”
Tooshort21 – Song that no one sings song that no one sings

Smoke Trail – Love .. It Does
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Evg.poet – Sense-less emotions
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“Adoration’s Ebb and Flow”



I sit and ponder my next demographic,
no worries of slappin some mental addict
no contemplation of hatred ending my sadness
only thoughts of your heart strings and exploring their fathoms
From a life of street eloquence,
so cold without gladness
Some might speak of decaying decadance,
I can only preach ballads
Inspite of the trappings,
my freedom’s whimsickle when she’s tested yo
Answered by lesser happenings
I bleed on in my Adoration’s Ebb and Flow
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Old 07-22-2004, 05:59 PM   #2 (permalink)
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I won't say that I actually liked it, lol...well, I liked the rhyme scheme and the flow of the piece, but wasn't exactly feeling the whole concept. I don't know, maybe it's just me...Anyhow, I think it could have been longer to me, maybe that's what I was feelin about it. Sure it had depth, but it didn't exactly express to me what you were saying thuroughly enough...But, it's not bad...And welcome back to the realm...I can see by your join date that you've been here a while...
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Old 07-22-2004, 06:44 PM   #3 (permalink)
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Yeah, first piece i dropped since my son died in 02
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Old 07-22-2004, 07:08 PM   #4 (permalink)
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it was a good dedication piece, but it kinda confused me, but i get confused easily
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The first two rhymes had me thinking it'd contain all multies... nah...

It was cool though, rhyming "yo" with anything shows you have a pretty low vocabulary... Up the vocab man...
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Old 07-22-2004, 07:58 PM   #6 (permalink)
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Appreciate the constructive criticism guys, but there's nothing lacking in my vocabulary. Go dig up a few of my open mic pieces from back in the day, i just chose not to sacrifice the feeling of somebody from the streets that really hasn't known anything eloquent and has now came into something above and beyond the hardness of what he's known. Sometimes when you just type and stop thinking... it feels good. Thanks again for all the comments, i'll be dropping another soon.
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No doubt yo. I'm just saying... you couldn't have thought of anything else that rhymed with "Ebb and Flow"?

But none the less, it was cool. I'll go peep out some of your older work to see what your about. Hang around here though, we need more life. Stay up homie.
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Old 07-22-2004, 09:01 PM   #8 (permalink)
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Thanks again.... yeah ill be around
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hmm..i liked this..

different

very unique to the realm...couldnt really focus in one one thing and draw out on it..however had some nice lines in there..just didnt feel like they all went with each other

anyhow...nice job and welcome to the realm
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Sorry to hear about your son. I think the piece was put together nicely. There were somethings I didnt get though. Hope to see more from you soon.

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