R.i.p.

ChyllTyrant · 07-20-2004, 11:08 AM

tomorrow will be here too soon, sense-less emotions, reinstate the trinity

R.I.P.

trusted
disgusted
combusted

i just did

terrible parables
and other variables
all over some valor bullshit

nothing but a
fathered terd
tarred and feathered

my speech’s leach is
teachers and beaches
and other creature features

hill top twyll pot ill stops
(pack weed)

pill pops and quill drops
(caffeine rap fiend)

kill cops
(macks lean attacking wack teams)

fact or dream?

jack and jill ran up the hill
to fetch a pail of water
something or other
something or other

depressed
expressed
impressed
distressed
repressed

rest
in peace

sucking at life
lucky at cyphs
trust me
i was white

now i watch time in black

tooshort21 · 07-20-2004, 01:33 PM

clarification needed man.... I really didnt follow this poem at all, help me out man!! lol

i was white

now i watch time in black.... what is your main focus in this piece..... hit me up alright peace

Quotive · 07-20-2004, 02:33 PM

My god.. this piece is sick.. though I see where something doesn't quite match the rest

"jack and jill ran up the hill
to fetch a pail of water
something or other
something or other"

You should have went
"something or other
other or something"

That would have made me went DAMN. I don't know what it is about this piece. The vobab and short multies were dope. I kind of understood it, but I don't know. Hmmph.

I'm thinking the "I am white" line means you saw light before you were dead, right? Then you said you watch time in black, as in your dead? Ehh.. I don't know. But I was feelin it. I'ma go read it again lol.. Props!

ChyllTyrant · 07-21-2004, 02:10 PM

thanks brodies.

tooshort... this is either about me dieing literally or dieing artistically.

Quotive · 07-22-2004, 08:13 PM

Uppin this piece... slept on then a bitch. This shyt is ill.

BirthOfTragedy · 07-22-2004, 08:39 PM

I liked the wordplay in this peice. Keep up the excellent work.

lpoet · 07-22-2004, 11:57 PM

i likes...sort of reminds me of my style of writting ....

couldnt really follow it all though

still good

UP

really · 07-23-2004, 03:06 AM

Verily, I say unto you, cool Shit. I wrote One kiNda like it.

Nu Afrikka · 07-23-2004, 11:16 AM

great wordplay. I like how you put those words together and some of the rhymes. You tried something different. Keep it up.

ChyllTyrant · 07-23-2004, 12:33 PM

i'm really glad peeps are reacting to this one. it might be my last for a while.

gotta get my paper str8, nah mean? str8 hustlin.

PEACE

shadygrady · 07-25-2004, 02:09 AM

good post here man, i really mean that

reading it now for the third time now, btw im tooshort21 too....

i couldnt get over the fact that you murdered this piece with all the multis... they were great man....The way you wrote this was by far more original than i am so used to reading up in this bizzzatch!!

good work and hope to see more from you in the near future...keep them coming

and i really mean that.... peace

rhino_number_33 · 07-29-2004, 07:15 PM

nice piece, dont really know wat else to say about it besides the fact that i kinda got lost reading it, but everything confuses me..lol

Anaphora · 07-30-2004, 02:35 AM

fathered terd
-ok, other than it rhymes this is meaningless... fathered turd? a piece of shit person? That seems to be what you're getting at, yet, you stilted your language in a 'hip hop' sort of way... I dunno. This was not my cup of tea I guess, everyone else seems to like it... seemed a little contrived...

07-20-2004, 11:08 AM	#1 (permalink)
ChyllTyrant AmIEternalOrAnEternalist? Join Date: Oct 2003 Location: Syracuse, NY Posts: 830	R.i.p. tomorrow will be here too soon, sense-less emotions, reinstate the trinity R.I.P. trusted disgusted combusted i just did terrible parables and other variables all over some valor bullshit nothing but a fathered terd tarred and feathered my speech’s leach is teachers and beaches and other creature features hill top twyll pot ill stops (pack weed) pill pops and quill drops (caffeine rap fiend) kill cops (macks lean attacking wack teams) fact or dream? jack and jill ran up the hill to fetch a pail of water something or other something or other depressed expressed impressed distressed repressed rest in peace sucking at life lucky at cyphs trust me i was white now i watch time in black __________________ Twyll The ChyllTyrant aka Verbal Kynt aka Soul Prophet aka Wally Wigglez And Like That... He's Gone The greatest trick the devil ever pulled, was convincing the world he didn't exist. http://www.myspace.com/twyllthechylltyrant http://www.myspace.com/realninjtruth http://www.soundclick.com/tyrantny

07-20-2004, 01:33 PM	#2 (permalink)
tooshort21 Banned Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: SIOUX Posts: 1,281	clarification needed man.... I really didnt follow this poem at all, help me out man!! lol i was white now i watch time in black.... what is your main focus in this piece..... hit me up alright peace __________________ will write poetry for food.

07-21-2004, 02:10 PM	#4 (permalink)
ChyllTyrant AmIEternalOrAnEternalist? Join Date: Oct 2003 Location: Syracuse, NY Posts: 830	thanks brodies. tooshort... this is either about me dieing literally or dieing artistically. __________________ Twyll The ChyllTyrant aka Verbal Kynt aka Soul Prophet aka Wally Wigglez And Like That... He's Gone The greatest trick the devil ever pulled, was convincing the world he didn't exist. http://www.myspace.com/twyllthechylltyrant http://www.myspace.com/realninjtruth http://www.soundclick.com/tyrantny

07-22-2004, 08:39 PM	#6 (permalink)
BirthOfTragedy Join Date: Dec 2003 Location: Brooklyn Heights. Posts: 4,336	I liked the wordplay in this peice. Keep up the excellent work. __________________ C-Unit

07-22-2004, 11:57 PM	#7 (permalink)
lpoet POET Join Date: Oct 2002 Location: Indianapolis, IN Posts: 12,672	i likes...sort of reminds me of my style of writting .... couldnt really follow it all though still good UP __________________ "SHE CAME BACK TO ME AND I PRAY SHE STAYS" --lpoet

07-23-2004, 03:06 AM	#8 (permalink)
really The Apologist Join Date: Jul 2004 Location: round here Posts: 208	Verily, I say unto you, cool Shit. I wrote One kiNda like it. __________________ I tried to walk like a Big Wham Bham I came across like a battering Ram I tried to float like a telegram sam I'm trying to divine you

07-23-2004, 11:16 AM	#9 (permalink)
Nu Afrikka The Re'velator Join Date: Nov 2001 Location: I am but a traveler passing by, on my way home. Posts: 2,252	great wordplay. I like how you put those words together and some of the rhymes. You tried something different. Keep it up. __________________ "...Repent and be baptized..." --Acts 2:38

07-23-2004, 12:33 PM	#10 (permalink)
ChyllTyrant AmIEternalOrAnEternalist? Join Date: Oct 2003 Location: Syracuse, NY Posts: 830	i'm really glad peeps are reacting to this one. it might be my last for a while. gotta get my paper str8, nah mean? str8 hustlin. PEACE __________________ Twyll The ChyllTyrant aka Verbal Kynt aka Soul Prophet aka Wally Wigglez And Like That... He's Gone The greatest trick the devil ever pulled, was convincing the world he didn't exist. http://www.myspace.com/twyllthechylltyrant http://www.myspace.com/realninjtruth http://www.soundclick.com/tyrantny

07-25-2004, 02:09 AM	#11 (permalink)
shadygrady nate short's the name Join Date: Oct 2003 Location: Sioux FIZZY... aka sioux falls south dakota... hey someone's got to represent the MidWest Posts: 521	good post here man, i really mean that reading it now for the third time now, btw im tooshort21 too.... i couldnt get over the fact that you murdered this piece with all the multis... they were great man....The way you wrote this was by far more original than i am so used to reading up in this bizzzatch!! good work and hope to see more from you in the near future...keep them coming and i really mean that.... peace __________________ life is too damn short yo get out and get your's I love my family

07-29-2004, 07:15 PM	#12 (permalink)
rhino_number_33 RRRRROOOOOAAAAARRRR! Join Date: May 2004 Location: Dalllas, Texas Posts: 88	nice piece, dont really know wat else to say about it besides the fact that i kinda got lost reading it, but everything confuses me..lol

07-30-2004, 02:35 AM	#13 (permalink)
Anaphora was here Join Date: Jan 2004 Posts: 1,694	fathered terd -ok, other than it rhymes this is meaningless... fathered turd? a piece of shit person? That seems to be what you're getting at, yet, you stilted your language in a 'hip hop' sort of way... I dunno. This was not my cup of tea I guess, everyone else seems to like it... seemed a little contrived... __________________ -- -- -- -- "Those who know they are profound strive for clarity. Those who would like to seem profound strive for obscurity." -Nietzsche -- -- -- -- -- -- This isn't a place for people to improve. This is a support group, where everybody just pats each other on the back and give words of encouragement. -predicate* on the poetry realm*

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