Ascared of heights

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Old 07-02-2004, 02:51 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Ascared of heights
My indifference

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The limb of silver silence
Peaking in the horizons blue lights
Energy Erupting, catapulting the greatest fears
Cheroots have risen and rode past these roads
The lingering silence still smiles in the twilight
Glazing the pavement clean with tracks
Vacant laughs and abandoned phases

Shadow fight the darkness away
As well as it is, it's to no rival
They all parish in time of the night
When the light is absent from their life
Water trickling down the flesh of irony
Standing in a place of revolving luck
Aging over seconds and murdering time

Sleep walking nomads to a parallel existence
And the free trade of conversation ruptures ear drums
The tumble weeds roll past the battened ground
Were weeds once out grew the weeds
As flowers developed into suitable pray
These days are haunting the slow perplexity of breathes
Reminiscence of yesterdays' yesterdays and so on past that past

Tunnels of wind blow through the pierced air
Leaving clouds incomplete
The night takes over the sky that once was bright
As those lights sink away into portals
Where has the week went...?
When the music played and played
Now there is nothing left but silence of night

Smoothened glass shards are sharp on toes
When the blood runs dry, the streams shallow out
No more ounces of energy in luggage bags
A blood sucking hungry demon as taken them away
The misquotes scourer for the food of day
Tears can't touch burned out embers
The ashes of these matches leave nothing but piles

We all have fell asleep tonight
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Old 07-02-2004, 02:57 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Shadow fight the darkness away
As well as it is, it's to no rival
They all parish in time of the night
When the light is absent from their life
Water trickling down the flesh of irony
Standing in a place of revolving luck
Aging over seconds and murdering time

wow................. thats all i can say about this piece right here allnakey.....

uppin for ya and reputation points as well

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Old 07-02-2004, 03:26 PM   #3 (permalink)
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This had some real imaginative word play and some vivid imagery. your pieces are always packed with puzzles, I am intrigued by this limb of silver silence.It made me think of mercury rising..Anyways, take care
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Old 07-04-2004, 01:58 PM   #4 (permalink)
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Word thanks for the replies, been real busy so This is like the first piece, I've written up in like a few weeks
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Old 07-04-2004, 02:52 PM   #5 (permalink)
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I am sleepy as I read this, well I was...and it caught me directly in the belly and held me fast like a child falling from a window...Anyhow, loved this piece man...I'll come back and quote some later...peace...
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Old 07-04-2004, 03:28 PM   #6 (permalink)
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Reminiscence of yesterdays' yesterdays and so on past that past

That line man..that line...

This piece speaks volumes to the mind. I could read this several times over...and will. It's imagery and vocab are excellent! Beautiful So beautiful.
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Old 07-04-2004, 03:32 PM   #7 (permalink)
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I agree with what misskey said, that line she quoted spoke a thousand words to me, it was tight, imagery was perfect, i lv'd the style of writing here, really good job...*
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Old 07-05-2004, 05:50 PM   #8 (permalink)
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"Shadow fight the darkness away
As well as it is, it's to no rival
They all parish in time of the night
When the light is absent from their life
Water trickling down the flesh of irony
Standing in a place of revolving luck
Aging over seconds and murdering time"

^Those lines were insane. Really feeling the imagery in it. Shadow fight the darkness away. What a great line man. Keep it up

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Old 07-05-2004, 06:18 PM   #9 (permalink)
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damn Soul stole my quote, lol...
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Old 07-05-2004, 07:03 PM   #10 (permalink)
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Shadow fight the darkness away
As well as it is, it's to no rival
They all parish in time of the night
When the light is absent from their life
Water trickling down the flesh of irony
Standing in a place of revolving luck
Aging over seconds and murdering time

damn, damn, damn, damn. Damn.

That was real nice.. the imagery was tight.. the concepts were crazy..

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Old 07-07-2004, 06:50 PM   #11 (permalink)
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Old 07-10-2004, 02:39 PM   #12 (permalink)
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Old 07-12-2004, 09:23 PM   #14 (permalink)
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dog, the way you put things don't lie, real nice
real complete ideas

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this is a creative eye opener with very good vocab.... the first stanza opened it up, but it didn't stop there... it just made me want to read more

Sleep walking nomads to a parallel existence
And the free trade of conversation ruptures ear drums
The tumble weeds roll past the battened ground
Were weeds once out grew the weeds
As flowers developed into suitable pray
These days are haunting the slow perplexity of breathes
Reminiscence of yesterdays' yesterdays and so on past that past
this one was my favorite... this was great
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"The limb of silver silence
Peaking in the horizons blue lights
Energy Erupting, catapulting the greatest fears
Cheroots have risen and rode past these roads
The lingering silence still smiles in the twilight
Glazing the pavement clean with tracks
Vacant laughs and abandoned phases"

Great opener. Like Neb said, good use of vocabulary. Very very nice.

"Sleep walking nomads to a parallel existence
And the free trade of conversation ruptures ear drums"

For some reason, that caught my eye the most. Yo.. this line, hmm. I like it... very good use of vocabulary.

"Tunnels of wind blow through the pierced air
Leaving clouds incomplete"

Haha, cool. This shyt is veryyy good. Its giving me ideas, and topics to write. Theres so much to quote. Good line.

I didn't really get the title. But yo, this poem... shyt. It was amazing. Another great one from you. Great read.
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Old 07-30-2004, 02:49 PM   #17 (permalink)
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A very pastoral feel to it, as if u are watching things unfold in slow motion. Sorry to bring a downer to the replies, but i was jus wondering whether the spelling and grammar was intentional for all of the piece - koz some of the lines really dont work if it goes with what u wrote. But i can guess what ur gettin at most of the time i think. And i do like what ur trying to get across. Just to quote Nas - "sleep is the cousin of death" and ive held that line in my head for a while - so im feelin what ur writing about.

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well i was gonna pm you to ask how the writing coming along,
but your post answered it for me..hehe
nice work brother..you're truly a defintion of elevation..
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"Shadow fight the darkness away
As well as it is, it's to no rival
They all parish in time of the night
When the light is absent from their life
Water trickling down the flesh of irony
Standing in a place of revolving luck
Aging over seconds and murdering time"


That was sick
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